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message 1: by Ama (new)

Ama Pomaa (amapomaa) | 7 comments Hello,

Please comment on the blurb below. Thanks. All suggestions are welcome.

Jasmine Morrison is a stunning, smart and lost twenty-something courting the idea of suicide. When she is presented with a chance to right a wrong, her decision throws her into the tangle of everything she’s afraid to want: her estranged brother, a second-chance at life, and an old flame still nursing the wound she left in his back.

Kojo’s cool demeanor hardly betrays the haunted man within. But in one horrid night, a bullet snuffs out his lifelong dream of building a family. Nothing, besides satisfying his thirst for vengeance, seems to matter. That is, before he finds out that the paths of vengeance and healing meet in the dark corridors of his past.

Thanks.


message 2: by Rod (new)

Rod Baker | 106 comments Jasmine Morrison is a stunning, smart, twenty-something—but so lost she is flirting with suicide. Into this mix, a chance to right a wrong comes up and her decision to accept draws her towards everything she’s afraid to want: a relationship with her estranged brother, a second-chance at life, and an old flame still nursing the wound she left in his back.

Kojo’s cool demeanor hardly betrays the haunted man within. But in one horrid night, a bullet snuffs out his lifelong dream of building a family. Nothing, besides satisfying his thirst for vengeance matters—until he discovers the paths of vengeance and healing collide in the dark corridors of his past.

just a quick shot. Rod


message 3: by Ama (new)

Ama Pomaa (amapomaa) | 7 comments Thanks, Rod.


message 4: by [deleted user] (new)

It's got pontential but I'm a little confused by this sentence. "When she is presented with(given a chance) a chance to right a wrong, her decision throws her into the tangle of everything she’s afraid to want:"

I think you're on the right track.


message 5: by Stan (last edited Jun 10, 2016 08:34PM) (new)

Stan Morris (morriss003) | 140 comments Here are my suggestions.

Jasmine Morrison is a stunning, smart, lost twenty-something courting the idea of suicide. Presented with a chance to right a wrong, her decision throws her into a tangle of everything she’s afraid to want: her estranged brother, a second-chance at life, and an old flame nursing the wound she left in his back.

Kojo’s cool demeanor hardly betrays the haunted man within. But in one horrid night, a bullet snuffs out his lifelong dream of building a family. Nothing besides satisfying his thirst for revenge seems to matter, until he finds the paths of vengeance and healing meeting in the dark corridors of his past.


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