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message 1: by Willa (new)

Willa Valentine (paper.seas) (paperseas) .


message 2: by Willa (new)

Willa Valentine (paper.seas) (paperseas) I'm excited for more on your story, Marthie! I love the beginning, because it hooked me, and it painted the information I needed to know in my head very well, versus starting out with a lot of flourishing metaphors and similes and whatnot, which would have been a bit harder to understand and wouldn't have fit with the story.


message 3: by Willa (new)

Willa Valentine (paper.seas) (paperseas) 'K, so I just have to comment again because this sentence is just perfect: "the extravaganza was really a concert, banquet, and holiday bazaar wrapped into one, and it took place at hale park, downtown."


message 4: by marthie ! (new)

marthie ! (marthie) | 17 comments thanks, i don't think my writing is all that great so it's nice to know that people like my writing.


message 5: by kaya (new)

kaya (ananats) | 389 comments it's awesome. i love it.


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