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message 1: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) This is the story I started writing recently. Here is a link to the story on GoodReads
And here it is for Wattpad.


message 2: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) If you'd like to do that :) Of course! I still have to edit a few things though, cause my brother proofread it a few day ago.

Do you like the story so far?


message 3: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) That's okay. I never expect anyone to read it. So whenever someone does even a little bit. It makes me very happy :P


message 4: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Well sure. I read it. My boyfriend reads it. And those whom I talk to daily on here read it. But a lot of people don't read it. Like my friends? Nop.

Just cause I put it online doesn't mean that people will read it (unfortunately).

Take your time :P It's not like I'm posting a new chapter everyday. You will probably have gone through it before I post another chapter ;)


message 5: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) I knew you were gonna put that in my face XD I meant like my school friends.

Now you are challenging me to not post a chapter until you are done reading.. :P Aline is not gonna be happy with that XD


message 6: by [deleted user] (new)

I've found a few grammar mistakes. If you want, I can attach/show you the whole chapter, but only edited version. Your permission, of course. :)


message 7: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) You can send it to me in PM, that would be easier for me to be honest. But of course you can :)


message 8: by [deleted user] (new)

:) Okay!


message 9: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) As in she does it for a job. or What do you mean?


message 10: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Aaah okay. But I don't know her, wouldn't it be weird If I asked her? I mean, I don't wanna use someone or something.


message 11: by [deleted user] (new)

Annie is kinda gloomy...she makes me uncomfy...


message 12: by [deleted user] (new)

Uncomfy, haha. Word inventor, I am!


message 13: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Hihi :)


message 14: by [deleted user] (new)

Hi :)


message 15: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Do you guys spend much time together on here or something :P?


message 16: by [deleted user] (new)

Huh? No, we're just friends, I guess.


message 17: by [deleted user] (new)

Lokrow wrote: "Tina-chan, I use that word..... Why do we have the same expressions?"

I don't know, do you?


message 18: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) I asked that since you use the same expressions. Me and my brother do that too, but we spend a lot of time together so .. :P


message 19: by [deleted user] (new)

Lokrow wrote: "Nope. I've been having some weird syncs with the people I meet here. But I believe someone I know once said: Weird is a side-effect of awesome. ;)"

Okay, now that's MINE.


message 20: by [deleted user] (new)

"But you didn't have to cut me off
Make out like it never happened and that we were nothing
But you treat me like a stranger and that feels so rough
No you didn't have to stoop so low
guess that I don't need that though
Now you're just somebody that I used to know"
-Gotye


message 21: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Ah the song of my life :P


message 22: by [deleted user] (new)

Haha, I know. :)


message 23: by [deleted user] (new)

Haha, nice one.
Ooh, I uploaded The Others!
https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...


message 24: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Please give me feedback on this story if you have read it ;)


message 25: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Yeah.. :P but you went very quickly all of a sudden so yeah.

I agree. I hate slow stories. I rather learn more about the situation while stuff is already happening.

I will give you guys more Aiden and Lily I promise. I will work on that.

She will always be a fighter, I promise.

Break the rules? I will think about that.

You are making a lot of sense :) Thank you for all of this Lokrow! I really appreciate it!


message 26: by Alyssa (last edited May 11, 2014 04:39AM) (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Phone Five :D

True. I have been struggling with that too. Cause I know some of my readers are some what younger. I don't want to become George R.R. Martin though :P


message 27: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) I should become George R.R. Martin? Okay I don't think I am hot or anything but I still hope I look better than he does XD


message 28: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) I didn't say anything about beauty though, I said hot.
But you think I should be like that?


message 29: by Alyssa (last edited May 11, 2014 02:30PM) (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) You sound like my boyfriend ;) you are my kind of person. Thank you for that response.


message 30: by Alyssa (last edited May 11, 2014 02:30PM) (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Better?

I was giving you a compliment.. but okay..


message 31: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) I didn't know indeed. I'm always very careful about it on GR because names never tell you anything, not all the time anyway. But the way you talked just made me think of my BF which made me conclude something I shouldn't have concluded. Either way, sorry.


message 32: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Ahw thanks ^^


message 33: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) I agree. Thanks :)


message 35: by Alyssa (new)

Alyssa (vr_alyssa) Just let me guys know what you think ;)


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