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message 1: by Emily (last edited May 16, 2014 07:53PM) (new)

Emily | 44 comments Just some silliness :)

Anyone who feels the need to comment, or critique is free to do so.

Violins

Violins you have inspired
My dreams aspired
To dance to your sounds
Dizzily spinning around
Until...

I realized just how demanding
I'd practice to be outstanding
Then I screamed my failure
Tuning, and Rosin were more
Than I could endure

Violins you still inspire
But I know now that I was
Not meant to join your choir
Sorry to keep you in the closet...


message 2: by Emily (last edited May 17, 2014 03:07PM) (new)

Emily | 44 comments Cliche

A sense of vertigo
Dramatic pause, then go
Overstuffed with corn and cheese
Then top that off by the letter "why"
Parallel gravity
Propelling you forward
To a destiny
Touch then step back
And revolve around
Balance your tilted ground
Watch the sun rise
Through human eyes
Catch your heart stutter
Relishing the beauty of its pain
As it happens again and again
You, eating the same foods
Asking the same letter
Trying to understand the need
To criticize a feeling so true
Then laugh when you become
The backside of its joke
Cliche?

Laugh away...


message 3: by [deleted user] (new)

I'm not sure I understand it, but I enjoy reading it! There's something so cool and kind of hypnotic about your poetry. :)


message 4: by Emily (new)

Emily | 44 comments Aw, thanks. My poetry is usually pretty straight forward. But I guess that last one speaks of the concept of "cliche", and why it's repeated so often by society then made fun of because it is so common.


message 5: by Emily (new)

Emily | 44 comments You walk about listlessly
Joining you is not easy
Zoned out, and over there
Content without a care

Dancing along to an unheard tune
Leaving our side oh so soon
I'm jealous of this world you see
The one you do not share with me

Your eyes glaze over, and you surrender
Sighing, flying, swept in its blender
I finally give up on bringing you back
You found beauty there, this world lacks


message 6: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Nice use of rhyme, Emily. Your poem flows easily and has a lovely rhythm :)


message 7: by Emily (new)

Emily | 44 comments Thanks


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