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Weekly Poetry Stuffage > Week 211 (April 28-May 4). Poems. Topic: A Packed Suitcase.

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You have until May 4 to post a poem, and May 5-7 we’ll vote for which one we thought was best.

Please post directly into the topic and not a link. Please don’t use a poem previously used in this group.

Your poem can be any length.

This week’s topic is: A Packed Suitcase.

*Thanks to Nicky for the idea*

The rules are pretty loose. You can write a poem about anything that has to do with the topic. I do not care, but the poem you post must relate to the topic somehow.

Have fun!


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Nicky (soundgirl) | 1141 comments Hi Leslie,

Your welcome, glad you liked it!


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Here is my poetry submission for the topic: A Packed Suitcase. Feedback ALWAYS welcome!

A PACKED SUITCASE by Melissa Andres

He didn't notice the suitcase
Sitting by the door
But his eyes opened wide
As he sunk onto the floor.

All the furniture was gone
There was nary a knick or knack
The empty room began to spin
Hot air was turning black.

He rushed into the baby's room
No toys, books or clutter
Clutching at his chest
His heart began to flutter.

Slogging to the bedroom
He shared with his lovely wife
Vacancy stared him in the eyes
Where had gone his life?

Back on down the hallway
To re-trace his heavy steps
He now noticed the suitcase
And reached into its depths.

There was their wedding photo
A couple pictures of their son
Why'd she want to leave him?
What had made her run?

The note she'd packed away
Didn't explain too much
Just that she was tired
Of the hitting and such.

As her golden wedding ring
Rolled across the hardwood floor
He looked again at her portrait
The one he had adored.

He only did what he thought
What he saw a marriage to be
Daddy always picked on Ma
She never complained, you see.

Now she was breaking the cycle
Of generations long since passed
His son would grow into a real man
And for him, true love would last.


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Suitcase Coruscate ©2014 by Catherine Niedzwiecki
Ode to the Balcony Scene In Romeo & Juliet

The unbolted suitcase is full of seeds:
Lady slippers, Lady’s smock, Lady’s Thumb.
Grum throw to the pool below; a duckweed.
Seventeen year locust lives’ anthem.

Your greeting is akin to a lament.
The roof garden of possibility -
Engarlands the best of what is well meant
by this jettison coffer of me: Cathie..

The familial jetty recasts our night
Supports our reckless nosedive into seas
where stony coral catches our fears’ plight;
How the suitcase yields a democracy.

Tonight I see you full of seeds and awe
The stone fruit of any great endeavor.
Irrationalism is just the brawl
Of umbolted suitcases; the lay over

between the here and there of you and I
The iron-hearted circumstance of Try.


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Cat Grimalkin wrote: "Suitcase Coruscate ©2014 by Catherine Niedzwiecki
Ode to the Balcony Scene In Romeo & Juliet

The unbolted suitcase is full of seeds:
Lady slippers, Lady’s smock, Lady’s Thumb.
Grum throw to the po..."


Duckweeds: Duckweeds, or water lens, are flowering aquatic plants which float on or just beneath the surface of still or slow-moving bodies of fresh water and wetlands.

Seventeen Year Locust: a cicada which lives underground as a larva for from 13 to 17 years before emerging as an adult to live in the open for a brief period.


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Jim Agustin (jim_pascual_agustin) | 625 comments had to delete. submitting somewhere.


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Sarah (sbrock36) | 110 comments Melissa wrote: "Here is my poetry submission for the topic: A Packed Suitcase. Feedback ALWAYS welcome!

A PACKED SUITCASE by Melissa Andres

He didn't notice the suitcase
Sitting by the door
But his eyes opened ..."


Wow! Great job Melissa.


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Thank you, Sarah! :-)


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Emily | 44 comments In memory of my sister. Critique is highly encouraged.

Packed
by Emily

I recorded a cassette
And said goodbye
before I left

You were bundled
Feeble, Yet strong enough
To make me fumble

I thought I was leaving
But when I came back
There was no retrieving

A past, of few years
Only two,
Then many tears

I packed a suitcase
And traveled across
The earth's surface

You packed yourself
And deserted this world
Further than I can delve

Did you intentionally
Leave my heart here
Along with your memory?


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Ryan | 5334 comments Emily, wow!

You stopped me in my tracks with this poem. It is deep and heartfelt and so achingly sad. I really don't have enough words to sum up just how beautiful I think it is. Stanzas 2 and 5 hit a particularly strong note for me but the overall effect of the whole poem is incredible. Amazing!


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Emily | 44 comments Thank you Ryan, that means a lot to me :)


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Robert Rooney | 60 comments Suitcase Of Tears

Tears among tears fell on every face
It was painful to look at any packed suitcase
The pain free days should've been endless
But time, oh time, does not wait for a mistress
Anxiety settled in hard on the older man
He stared at the marsh and could only mutter "damn"
In the kitchen his wife trashed the last of the bait
If only, if only, time would agree to wait
Packing the truck brought pain of it's own
Mother and Father only spoke in a sad tone
Four hours to home and it seemed forever
This trip had been great, quite so clever
But reality won't stall for anyone's rat race
That's why tears fell for every packed suitcase


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M | 11043 comments Head for the polls, ye pirates! Let no blood be shed at the polling place over poems and stories. The afterdeck has been reserved for that.

https://www.goodreads.com/poll/show/1...


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Nicky (soundgirl) | 1141 comments Cat Grimalkin wrote: "Suitcase Coruscate ©2014 by Catherine Niedzwiecki
Ode to the Balcony Scene In Romeo & Juliet

The unbolted suitcase is full of seeds:
Lady slippers, Lady’s smock, Lady’s Thumb.
Grum throw to the po..."


Hi Cat,
I really liked this poem - it conjured up such strong imagery!


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Nicky (soundgirl) | 1141 comments Emily wrote: "In memory of my sister. Critique is highly encouraged.

Packed
by Emily

I recorded a cassette
And said goodbye
before I left

You were bundled
Feeble, Yet strong enough
To make me fumble

I th..."


Hi Emily
I enjoyed your poem, reading it aloud, there were some very subtle pieces of rhythm and rhyme. I liked the sadness and simplicity.


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Emily | 44 comments Thank you.


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