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message 1: by Maron (last edited Apr 26, 2014 08:42AM) (new)

Maron Anrow (maronanrow) | 15 comments Hello! Three weeks ago I posted a possible cover and blurb for my book Laika in Lisan here, and I received terrific constructive feedback. I ended up completely ditching my earlier concepts and starting from scratch. I commissioned an artist to draw a unique illustration for the book, and I'm so happy I did. Now I'm back and eager for feedback on the new cover and new blurb! I'm generally happy with both of them--much more than I was with the earlier versions--but I value the opinions of this group. I'm ready to make changes if other people think both the cover and blurb could be improved.

Here is the current cover:

http://www.maronanrow.com/Cover_2014_04_25.jpg

Here is the blurb:

When historian and private tutor Laika Roen is invited to study in Lisan—a country to which few foreigners are granted entry—she drops everything in her unsatisfying life to pursue adventure. Lisan is a mysterious land where citizens are oppressed by their cruel and despotic leader, who they worship and adore nonetheless.

Laika gets more than she bargained for when her trip is disrupted by violence and she’s forced to set out on her own. She soon meets Rodya, a man who’s living in the mountains to avoid Lisan’s oppressive government. With his guidance Laika witnesses what is normally hidden from foreigners like her: the widespread abuse and deprivation of the Lisani people.

Trapped in a maze of moral ambiguity, Laika must choose between her conscience, her feelings for Rodya, and the greater good.


When the artist started making concept sketches for the cover, I made a "draft" based on her concept sketches. I really like the colors of the draft, probably more so than the colors of the final illustration... I'm debating whether I should try to darken the cover above to try to achieve a similar effect. The draft cover is below. I'm very curious to hear whether you guys prefer the general tone of the current cover or the draft cover (granting the illustration in the draft cover is clearly a sketch).

http://www.maronanrow.com/Cover_2014_04_25old.jpg

Thanks in advance for your input!


message 2: by Thaddeus (new)

Thaddeus White | 24 comments I like the blurb. Depending on what you want to convey, the cover might work better with the two figures a little smaller, to stronger emphasise isolation in the mountains.

'who' should be 'whom' (referring to the despot), I think, but that's often considered optional nowadays. Also, it might seem a bit odd that you mention the despotic leader but later reveal that most foreigners don't see the oppression (so how would Laika/people generally know he's a despot?).

You could just refer to Lisan as exotic and remote, isolated etc.

I can't see either picture in your post, so can't comment on the draft.


message 3: by Maron (last edited Apr 26, 2014 08:43AM) (new)

Maron Anrow (maronanrow) | 15 comments Thanks for the feedback, Thaddeus! I'm not sure why the img src html code isn't working, so I've replaced them with hyperlinks in the original post. Thanks again!


message 4: by Maron (last edited Apr 26, 2014 08:55AM) (new)

Maron Anrow (maronanrow) | 15 comments Here is the revised blurb based on Thaddeus's comments (thanks):

When historian and private tutor Laika Roen is invited to study in Lisan—a country to which few foreigners are granted entry—she drops everything in her unsatisfying life to pursue adventure. Lisan is a mysterious land, where it's rumored that citizens are oppressed by their cruel and despotic leader, a man they worship and adore nonetheless.

Laika gets more than she bargained for when her trip is disrupted by violence and she’s forced to set out on her own. She soon meets Rodya, a man who’s living in the mountains to avoid Lisan’s oppressive government. With his guidance Laika witnesses firsthand what is normally hidden from foreigners like her: the widespread abuse and deprivation of the Lisani people.

Trapped in a maze of moral ambiguity, Laika must choose between her conscience, her feelings for Rodya, and the greater good.



message 5: by Maron (new)

Maron Anrow (maronanrow) | 15 comments The version I posted above was made after enlarging the characters in the illustration. I'm thinking about returning to the original size. The revised cover is below (using the unaltered illustration). If anyone has any feedback (e.g., do you prefer this version or the one with larger characters), I'd appreciate it. Thanks!

http://maronanrow.com/Cover_2014_04_26b.jpg


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