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message 1: by Lizzy (new)

Lizzy :D post your Romance tagged poem in here!


message 2: by Musical♥Writer (last edited Jul 22, 2009 08:43AM) (new)

Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments

Forbidden Love

I talk to you
Most everyday
We are so close
Yet so far away

A secret love
We cannot tell
For if we do
All wont be well

All the time
We pretend
We glare and fight
We cannot bend

But darling
I can't live this way
Sneaking, hiding
Day after day

I want you for life
But this secrecy hurts
Noone knows your mine
So those cheerleaders flirt

Why can't we tell
Let them all know
If we don't
I swear I will go

But I can't
I'm stuck on you
At least tell them
Your stuck on someone too

Dont tell them its me
Just say you've got a girl
Then that flirting
Will unfurl

I need to be sure
I'm set above
So that its safe
Our Forbidden Love

Does that count as romance?


message 3: by Lizzy (new)

Lizzy yeah, thats really good!!! :D your very god at poetry!!


message 4: by ☮Mary☮ (new)

☮Mary☮ (MaryMusicLover) Never

He'll never love me
Never need me
Like I love him
Like I need him
He'll never know
That this is
How I feel
He doesn't know me
The way that I know him

But I love him
All the same

Even if
He doesn't know
Who I am
And will never
Love me back
Or kiss me
The way I wish
He would
He breaks my heart
In half

But I love him
All the same

No one knows
How hard it is
To love someone
Who will never
Want you

But I love him
All the same

No matter how much
It breaks my heart
I’ll always love him
The way he will
Never love me
And yet
For some reason…

I love him
All the same



message 5: by Lizzy (new)

Lizzy awh...


message 6: by ☮Mary☮ (new)

☮Mary☮ (MaryMusicLover) it's true, you know


Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments thanks! here's another:

It is

It is everywhere I look
It is nowhere in sight
It is my spirit
It is my hatred
It is my tears
It is my voice
It is my fears
It is a loving embrace
It is a kick to the curb
It is a truth
It is a fairy tale
It is all there is
It is nothing at all
It is my life
It is my end
It is inside me
It is out of my reach
It is all i want
It is my worst fear
It is strenghthening
It is maddening
It is my closest friend
It is a stranger
It is the world
It is the fires of hell
It is essential
It is toxic
It is...Love

All my poetry I just posted off the top of my head when I had insperation, *shrugs* some aren't the best...


message 8: by Lizzy (new)

Lizzy that was really really good!!!! :D


message 9: by ☮Mary☮ (new)

☮Mary☮ (MaryMusicLover) i like it. same here. here's another of mine

Apart

I can't hear
Can't think
Can't breath
With you
On my mind
And you're there
Constantly
Why I can't
Get you out
I don't know
Could it be that
I love you
Could it be that
You're the one
I've be searching for
Waiting for

I can't hear
Can't think
Can't breath
Since the moment
You met my gaze
Problem is
You don’t know it


message 10: by Musical♥Writer (new)

Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments Your really good!!!


message 11: by Lizzy (new)

Lizzy you guys are soooo good!!! i can't connect like that with poetry!!! i wish I could write it like you guys can...


message 12: by Musical♥Writer (new)

Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments I like your Adventure one! I can't decide where to post my other poems, or writing, *sigh* I'm no good at decisions


message 13: by ☮Mary☮ (new)

☮Mary☮ (MaryMusicLover) you can write. i can't write chapters. i can write songs and poems, but i can't write like you can. i don't have the patience to!


message 14: by Lizzy (new)

Lizzy thanks guys! :D


message 15: by [deleted user] (new)

Love Forever?

When you said you’d love me forever,
Did you mean what you said?
I lay down every night,
And let it wander in my head.

How can it be forever
since I know there will be an end?
How can we stay together
with so many bends?

As we walk down the road
You ask what is wrong
If only you knew
What was going on

You bring me to town square
Romantic and bright
Kneel down on one knee
And I can now see your fright

You take my hand
So I can’t move for whatever
And then you ask me
Will you be with me forever?

lol. that is one of my older poems, but still a favorite. here's the link to it: Love Forever?


message 16: by Lizzy (new)

Lizzy I commented!


message 17: by [deleted user] (last edited Jul 23, 2009 11:12PM) (new)

☮☠♪♥♪Mary♪♥♪☠☮ wrote: "i like it. same here. here's another of mine

Apart

I can't hear
Can't think
Can't breath
With you
On my mind
And you're there
Constantly
Why I can't
Get you out
I don't know
Could i..."




OMG...I LOVE this one!!!!!!I can totally relate!!




message 18: by Zunpip (new)

Zunpip | 4 comments wow you peoples are really good and this coming for a person who hates love-y stuff


message 19: by [deleted user] (new)

♪*B*♪ Music is my Passion! wrote: "

Forbidden Love

I talk to you
Most everyday
We are so close
Yet so far away

A secret love
We cannot tell
For if we do
All wont be well

All the time
We pretend
We glare..."


Bianca your writing is just AMAZING!!!



message 20: by Musical♥Writer (new)

Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments Thank you soo much! that really helps me and means a lot!!


message 21: by [deleted user] (new)

:]]]]..No Problem B!!!


message 22: by Musical♥Writer (new)

Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments Have u read and commented on some of me stuff?!!?!


message 23: by [deleted user] (new)

I have a poem.. But it isn't that good. but ppl tell me it is! Here it is:

The Passing Love

Every day, i wander towards you,
through the crowd, and try to find,
the courage i used to have...
Every time i think i have found it again,
i see your beautiful face.. and it crumbles.
I walk by, I fade to the backgrounds..
'Till I'm nothing but a passer by...
One day i pray, that as i walk by you,
i find that courage,
and follow my dreams, follow my heart..
and that you will realize why i walk by every
single day... that you realize...I love you..


message 24: by [deleted user] (last edited Jul 22, 2009 02:09PM) (new)

♪*B*♪ Music is my Passion! wrote: "Have u read and commented on some of me stuff?!!?!"

YEAH!!!No wait..have I??????????I have read all your stuff!!!I just haven't commented!!!i'll do that!!!I LOVE WINGS OF FOREVER!!


message 25: by [deleted user] (last edited Jul 22, 2009 02:09PM) (new)

I had read your Poem Erin!!IT WAS AWESOME!!I think I even commented..right???


message 26: by [deleted user] (new)

yup!


message 27: by [deleted user] (new)

=)


message 28: by [deleted user] (new)

lol, i know its awesome right??


message 29: by Rae (new)

Rae Knowles (raeknowles) this is exactly how i feel

Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ☮♥Mary♥☮Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ wrote: "Never

He'll never love me
Never need me
Like I love him
Like I need him
He'll never know
That this is
How I feel
He doesn't know me
The way that I know him

But I love him
All the sam..."





message 30: by Rae (new)

Rae Knowles (raeknowles) amazing i love this


message 31: by I'amber (new)

I'amber (xiamberx) | 188 comments Mod
Kelsey wrote: "this is exactly how i feel

Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ☮♥Mary♥☮Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ wrote: "Never

He'll never love me
Never need me
Like I love him
Like I need him
He'll never know
That this is
How I feel
He doesn't..."



Omfg, I love this :D



message 32: by Rae (new)

Rae Knowles (raeknowles) We are
perpetually drowning in sand
each grain, a vision
together gritty heaps of
eroded past-time pleasures
we build castles
for moments
until the inevitable crash
of the sea on its gates,
when it crumbles
unrecognizable,
shambles of what was us
and we kneel
to our knees
flailing wildly to
push the grains
together, into something
familiar.
and while we attempt
to reconstruct
high tide encroaches,
leaves us choking,
drowning in sand.
We are children forever
building sand castles too close to the shore



message 33: by [deleted user] (new)

This is really good Kelsey!!


message 34: by Rae (new)

Rae Knowles (raeknowles) Maryam_Music Lover_ wrote: "This is really good Kelsey!!"

thank you so much for the input! makes me feel great!


message 35: by [deleted user] (new)

:]], no problem!


message 37: by Musical♥Writer (new)

Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments It was confusing, but i like it!


message 38: by Musical♥Writer (new)

Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments Thanks to all you guys who comment on my writing!!! It really helps me and encourages me when people read it and leave feedback!!!




message 39: by Musical♥Writer (last edited Jul 24, 2009 10:35AM) (new)

Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments Everyone was writing poetry about loving someone who doesn't love you back, so I decided to write something a little different. They love each other, but they can't be together. I wrote about nature and being alive too. I'm going to put all that in multi genre, its random poetry that is really short...



message 40: by Musical♥Writer (new)

Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments
Why did I just post that???


message 41: by [deleted user] (new)

Cause you're random and awesome!:D


message 42: by Musical♥Writer (new)

Musical♥Writer (musicalwriter) | 75 comments Yay!!!!


message 43: by [deleted user] (new)

lol!!=D


JustAnotherConverseLovinGurl OMG yall are all so good!!!! I loved all of em!!! I suck at poetry lol so im jealous of yall =P


message 45: by Della (new)

Della | 25 comments http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...

I've never really written poetry before, espeically romance, so be honest and tell me what you think!! :)


JustAnotherConverseLovinGurl Dude! thats really good!!


message 47: by [deleted user] (new)

You're right!!!It was!!By the way, Della Have you posted a new chapter in The guns And i????


message 48: by Della (new)

Della | 25 comments Thanks!! :D
yea, I just updated it with two new chapters!! :)

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...


message 49: by Amelia (last edited Aug 27, 2009 06:59AM) (new)

Amelia Mapstone Hi all! This is my newest poem I've just made... and it's based on um...my life right now. *nods* (oh, and it can also be a song. FYI, this person I write about is on Goodreads, so keep it hushed.) thanks.

~Tell Me~

Don't be afraid to tell me,
Tell me, tell me, tell me.
Of all the things you think of me.
Tell me. Tell me.

I think of you as the sun,
shining on my day
and even though I feel nervous around you
I still think of you in every way,

as a kind and smart and loving guy
Who's really nice but just as shy.

I feel the same way, but I must know
whether you hate me or like me so.
So just tell me what you think of me,
and I'll tell you.

Because I know that if you tell me,
I'll have a reason to explain.
All the times I've held you close to my heart.

So tell me.
I'm not afraid of a challenge,
or a comment,
or the opposite.

Do not be afraid, I am here.

So tell me.

Please.
I must know.

So tell me.

Tell me.

Tell me.

Please.


message 50: by Amelia (new)

Amelia Mapstone This is kind of about the same person, but not really...I made it up a while ago...


~A few yards away...~

In the cool summer night, I look out of my bedroom window, wishing it would face the other direction.

I can't be sure you're home, or if I can see or hear the crickets below.

It's too damp and far too late for either of us to be outside, but in my heart, I know you're just a few yards away.

I don't need a calender, or a calculator; I don't need to calculate anything.

Please just call out from your window, so that I may hear you.

For I know, you're only a few feet away...

I am no Rapunzel.
I am no Juliet.
I will not climb down to see you.
But I swear, if you EVER call my name and throw stones at my window, I will call back to you, that I am here.

And you're still only a few yards away.


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