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My Heart Forgets To Beat
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Commemorating World War One > new troubles in the old kitbag

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message 1: by Philip (last edited Feb 09, 2014 04:07AM) (new)

Philip Lee | 80 comments Mod
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new troubles in the old kitbag

the two-stroke mob on leave from weekday jobs
our motors stuttering like Vickers guns
in Air Force goggles surplus Army boots
and Navy loader’s gloves we signal turns
that camouflage the pacifist in us

and lasses too hunching on barbèd steeds
we rip your peaceful town and village squares
not like the choirboys that sheepishly marched
to drown in gas of Ypres mud of Somme

why don’t we halt at chapel doors pack up
your troubles in our cast-off killers’ bags
or put on bun fights down the orphanage
instead we roast your Sunday mourners’ ears
yowling for freedom in the togs of war

From the novel, “My Heart Forgets To Beat”


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Marti Martinson | 49 comments hunching on barbèd steeds

Nice. Clear images, you are "showing, not telling." The "yowling for freedom" is pretty poignant. WW1 is significantly overlooked, I fear, and I mean its history and its war poets.


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Philip Lee | 80 comments Mod
Thanks for the comment. The "yowl" is the signature note of 2-stroke motorcycle engines. In the novel, Vaughan Thomas rides a Velocette.


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