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message 1: by ♕ ❤ ♕ Princess pink diamonds posh bird LINZY.x.♕ ❤ ♕ (last edited Dec 07, 2013 10:12AM) (new)

 ♕ ❤  ♕ Princess pink diamonds posh bird LINZY.x.♕ ❤ ♕ (marilyngoodreadscom) | 337 comments Mod
JACKS POETRY.


message 2: by Lot (last edited Nov 29, 2013 04:44PM) (new)

Lot (lot1) | 38 comments Today was a clear sky,
Without a cloud,without a sight
The feeling is always the same
Without you everything’s a shame…

Only if I hear your voice I can feel better,
Only if I hear your heart I can be happy,
But without you I am unhappy
Cuz you know I will love you forever…

All your passions are strange to me,
If you say just I agree
And I will be the one
Shooted by your gun.

All around me are people,
Good and bad, simple and crazy ones
All of them are like eagles
Cuz they like the way it comes.

The feeling is always the same,
Everything without you is a shame.
All my little lies can hurt you bad
Cuz you know that I’m already dead…


message 3: by Dee (new)

Dee Sauter (indeathaddict) I like it, but it is really sad. I, however, prefer happier poetry.


message 5: by Lot (new)

Lot (lot1) | 38 comments Well it was for a girl that poem...a girl who broke my heart...Anyway I had written another poem at school and I really hope to be a little bit happier but I guess it's a little bit strange...hope to enjoy it



Angels and roses

Angels are in the light
And roses are in the dark,
Their wings are very white
And their petals are like a mark...

A mark for what I really am
A mark for what I supposed to be,
A fly for who is calm
And a fly for who is free...

All is kept in a lie
And all is found when we die,
But do we really know
What we really want to show?


message 6: by ♕ ❤ ♕ Princess pink diamonds posh bird LINZY.x.♕ ❤ ♕ (last edited Nov 29, 2013 05:40PM) (new)

 ♕ ❤  ♕ Princess pink diamonds posh bird LINZY.x.♕ ❤ ♕ (marilyngoodreadscom) | 337 comments Mod
Simple wrote: "Well it was for a girl that poem...a girl who broke my heart...Anyway I had written another poem at school and I really hope to be a little bit happier but I guess it's a little bit strange...hope ..."

Sorry you had your heart broken Jack.

I like the Angel and roses poem.


message 7: by Dee (new)

Dee Sauter (indeathaddict) I am also sorry about your broken heart. You sound young, and I don't mean to trivialize your broken heart because when you have "unrequited love." It is just easier when you are young to bounce back.

I really, really liked your Angel and Roses Poem


message 8: by Julius, He Who Arises in Might (:D) (new)

Julius (bookseeker007) | 1781 comments Mod
Good heart in your work, sir.


message 9: by Lot (last edited Dec 30, 2013 04:02PM) (new)

Lot (lot1) | 38 comments Thank you Julius, Princess and Dee for the comments...When I write a poem, I write about my feelings...so this is how am I today~
Hope to enjoy it~
P.S. I know very well that this is not a good title but what has a beginning has also an ending~

Loneliness

Now is the time
The time to say good bye.
Goodbye to my soul,
Goodbye to my heart.

All I can see now is the nothing.
The nothing that makes me cry
And the nothing that makes me die
And all is resumed in hating.

Hating what had I become
And loving what have you done.
Now is the time
The time to leave our life

And to make our death to be upon us...


message 10: by Julius, He Who Arises in Might (:D) (new)

Julius (bookseeker007) | 1781 comments Mod
I don't the title is too far off the mark. But it depends on what you exactly wish. Either way it didn't seem to NOT fit to me.


 ♕ ❤  ♕ Princess pink diamonds posh bird LINZY.x.♕ ❤ ♕ (marilyngoodreadscom) | 337 comments Mod
Aww,that was really good Jack.
I hope you're feeling okay today.


message 12: by Lot (last edited Dec 15, 2013 03:36PM) (new)

Lot (lot1) | 38 comments Because of the school and the holidays are coming soon I've been thinking to try something new
Hope to enjoy it~

Christmas

It's Christmas Eve
And all of us a gift achieve
From the Santa, from the elves
From the sound of ringing bells.

Now is already Christmas
And Santa is already here too.
So do what you need to do
And give him some milk and biscuits
To finish his longest business.


message 14: by Lot (last edited Mar 18, 2014 01:53PM) (new)

Lot (lot1) | 38 comments Thanks...sorry but I am a little bit busy...anyway I want to leave this before going back to study...:)


My eyes are seeing only your face
And my ears are hearing only your voice
But why does not my heart
Feel like you are my art?

Everyday I think about you
And every night I dream about you
But why are you so sad
When I am asking you that?

Why are you getting mad
When I am going back?
Why are you so sad
When I am calling you like a dad?

I don't know
I don't want to make a show
A show in which you would leave me
And I would cry when I would set you free...


message 16: by Lot (new)

Lot (lot1) | 38 comments Well I don;t know how but I had thought to try this poem so let me know if you like it or not...I had decided to write it in French because it sounds beautiful. Don't worry I had also made a translation in English

Où est mon amour
Quand le temp est mal toujours?
Où est ma vie
Quand tu est déjà morte?

"Ton amour est cache par tes yeux
Et tu ne peut pas voir dans l'obscurité."

Ma petit-amie repondre moi
Et explique tout la verite autrefois

"Mais tu n'as pas ecouter moi
Et tu as fini cette poeme
Sans attendre pour moi
Quand j'appelle toi."

Translation:

Where is my love
When the weather is bad all the time?
Where is my life
When you are already dead?

"Your love is hiding from your eyes
And you cannot see it in the darkness"

My girlfriend responded me
And explicated me the truth at once

"But you did not listened to me
And you had finished this poem
Without waiting for me
When I had called for you"


message 18: by Julius, He Who Arises in Might (:D) (new)

Julius (bookseeker007) | 1781 comments Mod
Nice French, Simple.


message 19: by Phoebe, TheInvincibleRabbit (new)

Phoebe (theneveronlinechick) | 3313 comments Mod
I love all of these poems. You can feel the emotions singing in each and every word. Brilliant job. :)


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