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message 1: by Amelia (new)

Amelia (miawalla3) Hi, I just joined this group and would love some feedback on some poetry I've done recently. Let me know what you think!

"When I fall off my box of strings
will you be the one to tie me up
into a thousand envelopes
of promises and wings
to fly me to the place
where your heart will be
waiting to embrace me
in moments of love and kisses
that taste like your soul
the one that each day grows brighter
like the stars I wish upon each night
we’re not together
holding hands with you
who washes away all the pain
from broken limbs and broken hearts
which I give only to you to cast off
the mountains we will climb together
treading across all the peaks and rivers
between the sorrows and joys that will come
every day for the rest of always
hoping you will be by my side
through the thick and the thin
lines that keep me from falling
off this precipice of doubtless love
you forever
I will"


message 2: by [deleted user] (new)

Amelia-welcome to the group! I'm glad to have you here!
This poem is beautifully written...well done!


message 3: by Wordy, Modérateur d'un. (new)

Wordy Nerd (wordynerd) | 1809 comments Mod
I like this poem. Great Job!


message 4: by Claudane (new)

Claudane | 16 comments very emotional and i love it.you should keep on writing poems.I think you would come up with the best poems.and welcome if you want could you be my friend and join my group thank you i would love it.


message 5: by a. r. (new)

a. r.  (aisyahrasyid) | 10 comments I love this because I can relate to it and I think many will too. And not only that, you describe such feelings in ways I strive to express. Its a beautiful piece. Keep writing!


message 6: by Evelynn (new)

Evelynn (authorgirlev) | 806 comments Amelia wrote: "Hi, I just joined this group and would love some feedback on some poetry I've done recently. Let me know what you think!

"When I fall off my box of strings
will you be the one to tie me up
into a ..."


Beautiful imagery and feeling. I really liked it! Keep writing! :D


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