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message 1: by Ryan (last edited Nov 21, 2013 02:19AM) (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments You have until November 28th to post a poem and on November 29th and 30th we'll vote for which one we thought was best.

Please post directly into the topic and not a link. Please don't use a poem previously used in this group.

Please keep your poem to LESS than 3,500 words.

The topic this week is:

Choose a quote from below to guide your pens and imaginations.

1. "Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened." - Dr Seuss

2. "Without music, life would be a mistake." - Friedrich Nietzsche

3. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." - Oscar Wilde

4. "There is never a time or place for true love. It happens accidentally, in a heartbeat, in a single flashing, throbbing moment." - Sarah Dessen

5. "I solemnly swear that I am up to no good." - J.K. Rowling


The rules are pretty loose. You could write a poem about anything that has to do with the subject. I do not care, but it must relate to the poem somehow.

Have fun!


message 2: by Mandy (last edited Nov 21, 2013 02:16PM) (new)

Mandy Blake | 1231 comments Cycle of Love


In just an instant,
              your heart gets a little shove
Even if you feel,
              there is never a time or place for true love
It happens accidentally, in a heartbeat
              before you even get, a chance to retreat
In a single flashing, throbbing moment
              head over heals, you are hopelessly sent

I solemnly swear, that I am up to no good
Into my arms, I'ld pull you if I could
Like some sappy ending, straight out of Hollywood

Without music, life would be a mistake
Too hard to bare, to awful to take
Songs are the words we can't find,
              when crushed by heartbreak.

We are all in the gutter,
              but some of us are looking at the stars
Either to young or to old,
              to drown our sorrow at bars
Heartbroken, us all
              just learning to live with our scars

Don't cry because it's over,
              smile because it happened
The joy and the pain,
              both more intense than I imagined
What started with such happiness,
              has now left both of us saddened


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 1365 comments Very nice poem Mandy, I love how you worked in all the quotes, that was very clever. On a side note I think you meant "True" love not "Ture" love in the first verse third line :D
Again nice job!


message 4: by Mandy (new)

Mandy Blake | 1231 comments Thanks, I'm glad you liked it, and thank you for catching my mistake.


message 5: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Mandy! That is fantastic. I'm struggling just to work one of the quotes in and you've managed all of them. Your use of rhyme is stunning. I really like this poem a lot.


message 6: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments One of your best, Al. Deliciously dark and what a twist in the quote! So fine.


message 7: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments Mandy, welcome to the WSS. Excellent use of all citations, and well written and conceived poem.

Al, I loved this! I re-read it several times.


message 8: by Shayma (new)

Shayma (almightysush) | 47 comments Oh dear Seuss

Dr. Seuss was a rhymer
A rhymer that's good
He could make a word funny
A word useful and good
He could talk about feet
And eyebrows on fire
He could rhyme about nonsense
And make you learn
In funny new ways that
You'd not know without him
Dr. Seuss wish id met u
Boy I loved u so dear
With cat in the hat
And the fish in the bowl
Whose world could be better
Then thing ones
And thing twos
They may have broke glasses
But put it back they did
Let's just say it out loud
It goes without saying
dr Seuss is a rhymer
the best there can be
he rhymed about poodles with bottles and paddles
He was my fave author
And he surly deserved
A reward for his rhyming
For rhyming so good
But as Dr. Seuss once said
Don't cry because it's over,
smile because it happened.
His books may have ended
But there's more that might happen
A kid becomes a rhymer
A rhymer who could
Bring back the good rhymes
That no one else could.


message 9: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Such a fun poem, Shayma! Dr Seuss is one of my all-time favorites and I think you've captured the spirit of his verse very nicely. The sentiment expressed in your final four lines is just fantastic. It gave such excellent purpose to the rest of your poem. I like how you've used the idea of the quote, plus the actual quote itself and also written the poem in the style of the person who made the quote. This is a very thoughtful poem and well executed.


message 10: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments Shayma, this is a fun and delightful bit if rhyme. It captures very well the feel and timbre of Dr. Seuss's writing, one of my favourite writers of all time.


message 11: by Shayma (new)

Shayma (almightysush) | 47 comments Thanks guys I had so much fun writing it plus the topic this week was so fun.


message 12: by Jocelyn (Ducky) (new)

Jocelyn (Ducky) (ducky113) Mandy: It's so very pretty. Very creative on the use of the quotes. Lovely.
Al: Short, but perfectly so. It's quite nice.
Shayma: I love the life in your poem. Like someone who has forgotten exactly what made them who they are and they are just now remembering. Wonderful.


message 13: by Jim (last edited May 06, 2014 11:01AM) (new)

Jim Agustin (jim_pascual_agustin) | 625 comments sorry, had to delete. sending somewhere. please send me a message if you want to read it. thanks, guys!


message 14: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments mind if i try? i know i have not been on lately buuuutt...issues come up unexpectedly..sadly. maybe they will help my writing come to life though, i do not know, i have not had the chance the write in a while


message 15: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments Alright. Let's see if I can finish it tonight. :-)


message 16: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments Also, I do not have to delete my goodreads account like I thought I would have to do, but i still will not be able to get on much. and i wanted to thank you all for the comments on my passed poems, I never really got the chance to properly say thanks :-)


message 17: by M (new)

M | 11008 comments Hang in there, Billie Jo!


message 18: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments Thanks, M...I'm trying.


message 19: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments *Definition PLEASE?!*

"I solemnly swear I am up to no good. " - J.K. Rowling

Good?
What's that word?
Have I heard it before?
Can I get a definition please?
Can you explain it to me?
That word, what does it mean?
Is it full of mischief?
Is it full of deceit?
I'm sorry my dear, I'm afraid it can't be.
The word good, has no room for me.
Where would this apply?
Does it contain a lie?
When I am here,
I can solemnly swear
Good is not good for me,
For good I will never be.
I mean, thank you but no thank you
I would rather not.
Because if I were to say "I am good"
You'd be in for a shock
I am a good actor,
But this part I cannot play
The word itself
Is hard enough to say.
This may sound bad,
And maybe it should
I solemnly swear
I am up to no good.

Yes? No? Critique (good or bad) is welcome


message 20: by Ryan (last edited Nov 25, 2013 09:15PM) (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." - Oscar Wilde


Chasing the Dragon

From lofty heights descended,
an angel, fallen low.
Crystal dreams, dark testament,
to the black eagle in white snow.

Once she raced before the wind,
but she grew her wings too soon.
The dragon she chased, has turned to hunt
beneath a harvest moon.

The Beast stole joy and crawled away
over cracked and bleeding plains.
A white horse from stables bolted,
leaving dried up, broken veins.

Her palace of air, the white boy stole,
to all four corners blown.
In a back alley gutter, she stares at the stars,
knowing she can never go home.

~ R ~

This started as one thing and ended as something else entirely. Please feel free to share any thoughts...


message 21: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments Ryan I love it!!!
Really great job.


message 22: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Thanks, Billie Jo! And welcome back, I'm glad we didn't lose you. I'm just reading your poem now - stand by.


message 23: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments No problem.
Thanks, glad I can stay :).

This one isn't really all that good.
I know I can do better, but a lot is on my mind.
I'm trying for a distraction of some kind >.<

And alright


message 24: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Excellent, Billie Jo, I'm glad you persevered. I like your take on the quote, I think your poem embodied it perfectly. Your rhyme is really good and I think the lines, 'When I am here/I can solemnly swear/Good is not good for me' are just wonderful. I particularly enjoyed the rhythm of the last four lines.


message 25: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments Thanks so much. It means a lot. and the funny thing is, after I posted it i thought of ore things I could have added to it. Haha. So thanks for the critique :)


message 26: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments Billie Jo, I actually really love this one from you. I strangely find myself relating to it really well, and even though the structure is fairly simple and a bit abrupt at first, it actually moves along very well and has a certain flow.


message 27: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments Well thank you, Kristen.
i was actually planning on writing something else but then this just popped into my head.
i dont know why haha but thank you


message 28: by M (last edited Nov 27, 2013 07:52AM) (new)

M | 11008 comments A Measure in E Minor


We chased an autumn evening’s ghost
through ash leaves on a lawn.
She kissed me by a scrolled gatepost,
the kind she might have drawn,

the shadow of its rusting grate
a palsied harpist’s skein
to stave the notes the woodbined gate
made flicker on the lane.


message 29: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Just stunning, M! Your rhyme seems so effortless (although I'm sure it isn't!). I love your title and the beautiful image you have painted. 'She kissed me by a scrolled gatepost/the kind she might have drawn' gave me shivers.


message 30: by M (new)

M | 11008 comments Thank you, Ryan! It started out as a revision of something I wrote when I was in college. Then it metamorphosed into something entirely different.


message 31: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments I had the same thing happen. I started writing about a girl who still gazes at stars despite her mundane life, only to finish up with a poem about the downward spiral of a heroin addiction...go figure!


message 32: by [deleted user] (new)

I apologize for putting up the polls too early than intended. I disregarded the date, thought I was right on schedule. It won't happen again.

Happy Thanksgiving! :)


message 33: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Thank you for posting them, Leslie. Wonderful job :)


message 34: by [deleted user] (new)

And the winners for Week 190 (*Quotes*) are:

1st Place: Billie Jo (Congratulations!)
2nd Place: Jim / Shayma / Al / Mandy / Ryan / M

Thank you for submitting your poems and for voting! :)


message 35: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments Thanks!


message 36: by Angie (new)

Angie Pangan | 4795 comments Congratulations, Billie Jo!


message 37: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Thank you, Leslie.
Congratulations, Billie Jo!


message 38: by Billie Jo (new)

Billie Jo (jojolov333) | 232 comments Thanks Angie and Ryan! :)


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