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≈aleх: pнoenιх oғ тнe ғlaмe≈ (loveisendless) http://www.wattpad.com/story/7984125-...

Please read and leave advice! Thanks Hetalians!


≈aleх: pнoenιх oғ тнe ғlaмe≈ (loveisendless) I added a chapter :D


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SingingCamels (Iggy) (iggyswingsoffreedom) Yaaay you used my ideas ^^
I would suggest adding a little more commentary between the dialogue, how the room looks, describe how England looks without his eyebrows, etc. Also, add just a tad bit more character development to make the piece complete.
I really like how England was the one to shoot Spain, because the two of them practically hate each other, so some of the other countries might blame England for it not being an "accident" that Spain was shot. Oh! And for Romania, did you mean Romano?

So, overall, wonderful story!!! I can't wait until the next chapter comes out. I'll be pestering you~


≈aleх: pнoenιх oғ тнe ғlaмe≈ (loveisendless) Yeah, Romano >< Sorry


≈aleх: pнoenιх oғ тнe ғlaмe≈ (loveisendless) I added a chapter. I'm sorry Italy :'( :P


≈aleх: pнoenιх oғ тнe ғlaмe≈ (loveisendless) I posted the link on Facebook and my parents saw


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SingingCamels (Iggy) (iggyswingsoffreedom) owo what did they say?


≈aleх: pнoenιх oғ тнe ғlaмe≈ (loveisendless) Dad: "Alex, is this your story?
Me: "Which one?"
Dad: Hetalia World War III?"
My response: "...Yeah."
Dad: "Really Alex?"
Me: "...Yeah"


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SingingCamels (Iggy) (iggyswingsoffreedom) haha lol ^^


≈aleх: pнoenιх oғ тнe ғlaмe≈ (loveisendless) I feel bad that I stabbed Italt :'(


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