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message 1: by Rose (new)

Rose | 43 comments here is the link to my poems and please tell me what you like or any suggestions :)
i'm open to criticism as long as you can tell me why you don't like them or what is wrong. please don't be rude :)


message 3: by Rose (new)

Rose | 43 comments cathartic


red splashes
blood flowing as if a watefall
clock ticking
water dripping
heart beating
as every second goes by it gets worse
the pain now almost unbearable

before the darkness takes over me
there are flashes of images ; memories
prictures of you leaving me
YOU, who once meant the world to me
leaving me
leaving me alone
to play the game called "life"

as the fire consumes me
the pain overwhelms me
my body screams out of pain
burns scorche my skin
my heart beat slows down
water drips faster
the clock stops ticking
I QUIT


message 4: by [deleted user] (new)

Rose wrote: "cathartic


red splashes
blood flowing as if a watefall
clock ticking
water dripping
heart beating
as every second goes by it gets worse
the pain now almost unbearable

before the darkness take..."


Oh... MY... GOOOOOOODREADS!!!!! That is amazing!


message 5: by Maximillian (new)

Maximillian (maximillianthefirst) I have so many emotions from that.


message 6: by Rose (new)

Rose | 43 comments Anna thank you so much ;)

Demonhunter is that good or bad? Just wondering.


message 7: by Maximillian (new)

Maximillian (maximillianthefirst) That is good. I believe art can only be called such if it causes you to experience something you wouldn't ordinarily felt. Thus causing you to feel emotion.


message 8: by Rose (new)

Rose | 43 comments Oh. Well thnk u :)


message 9: by Maximillian (new)

Maximillian (maximillianthefirst) You are very welcome.


message 10: by Rose (new)

Rose | 43 comments U mean it was evocative right?


message 11: by Maximillian (new)

Maximillian (maximillianthefirst) Yes that.


message 12: by Rose (new)

Rose | 43 comments Demonhunter wrote: "Yes that."

ok


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