My untitled story

[Amy]

This story follows our two protagonists, Evelynn and Aidan, through their struggle across the Wastelands. In a world of fear, anger and hardship will they find anything worth fighting for?

This is my first time ever writing, and I'd really appreciate comments!:D However, please don't be too brutal.
Thanks for reading, I hope you enjoy!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/4...

[Alice]

I am so sorry I didn't see this sooner, Amy! But I just read it and I think you really have a lot of talent. For your first time, it was incredible. The story flowed very nicely, and the idea was fantastic! I loved the idea of the whole community and the "Incomplete Land".

This is just my opinion, but I didn't think your prologue sounded like a prologue, because it had dialogue, which books usually don't have in prologues. I totally understand if you'd like to keep it your way; there's really no significant problem with it at all.

Sorry for this long post... but I loved reading your story and I really hope to see more of it. Keep up the amazing work!

[Amy]

Ah wow, no, don't worry about the long post, thank you so much! That's really helpful, if I'm honest it was meant to be the first chapter but I changed my mind so I think I might change it back:D xxxxx Thank You!!! x