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message 1: by Emily Ann (last edited Jul 16, 2014 05:27AM) (new)

Emily Ann | 78 comments Fire


The fire crackles in my ears
And whispers things that no one hears
Deep inside a beast in wait
Is this my gift my curse my fate?

My fingers are the fire’s loom
My fingers set my enemy’s doom
I shiver in the midst of fire
Am I a friend a weapon a liar?

Can I overcome my fears
Can I drown this fire in my tears
Will I fight back my own desires
Will I overcome the fire?

Can I recognize right from wrong
Can I pretend I’m a hero great and strong
Will I ever forget what I have done
And through ash cleared skies, see the sun?


message 2: by Samantha (new)

Samantha | 69 comments I love that last line!


message 3: by Roxanne (new)

Roxanne Shriver (roxannexshriver) I love this poem. :)


message 4: by Emily Ann (new)

Emily Ann | 78 comments Thank you :)


message 5: by Roxanne (new)

Roxanne Shriver (roxannexshriver) You're welcome! ^w^


message 6: by Allison (new)

Allison | 679 comments That was cool!


message 7: by Zanib (last edited Jul 05, 2014 07:44PM) (new)

Zanib  (dawnofthebooks) | 95 comments That last line really was a blast, but I suggest you put a comma after skies.

Will I ever forget what I have done
And through ash cleared skies, see the sun?

It makes the reader pause, and makes it dramatic. (and the question mark! It really brings out the indicative mood.)


message 8: by Emily Ann (new)

Emily Ann | 78 comments Thanks!


message 9: by em_panada (new)

em_panada Beautiful!


message 10: by Emily Ann (new)

Emily Ann | 78 comments Thank you


message 11: by Emma (new)

Emma | 11 comments Well done! I enjoyed reading your poem very much!


message 12: by Emily Ann (new)

Emily Ann | 78 comments Thank you!


message 13: by odelia (odeng) (new)

odelia (odeng) (odeliat) | 14 comments This is so good! :)


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