wow...that was cool. i like how contradictory everything is. and it makes you almost feel guilty.
one suggestion i can make, is that i didn't like the use of the word "trash" there. you could try "rubbish", "garbage", "scum" or "filth", but "trash just doesn't fit for me, it doesn't seem to fit with the other words in the poem.
one suggestion i can make, is that i didn't like the use of the word "trash" there. you could try "rubbish", "garbage", "scum" or "filth", but "trash just doesn't fit for me, it doesn't seem to fit with the other words in the poem.
keep working,and you won't think it's so lame.