my poem...tis lame >-<

[Silvia]

wow...that was cool. i like how contradictory everything is. and it makes you almost feel guilty.

one suggestion i can make, is that i didn't like the use of the word "trash" there. you could try "rubbish", "garbage", "scum" or "filth", but "trash just doesn't fit for me, it doesn't seem to fit with the other words in the poem.

keep working,and you won't think it's so lame.

[Brittany]

That is like soo good...keep at it..I wanna hear more!! So sad but true!!


<3

[Brigid ✩]

this poem is definitely not lame! have more confidence. u r a really good poet. :)