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message 1: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments I need critiques on my book so here's the link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

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Fifteen year old Jade Toscano must learn how to recreate her life and her own self after she survives a crash that kills the rest of her family. Two unlikely friends - the bad boy, and the boy next door - request her acceptance of them, but Jade has to first come to terms with herself and her past. Or maybe one of them can morph her life into something else entirely.

Please post comments and critiques on the story, not here. And don't hesitate to tell me what doesn't work, as long as you suggest how to fix it!


message 2: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments The link below is of a short prologue I wrote of a book I'm interested in writing. My plot so far has many gaps though, so I'd love for you guys to read this and comment (on the story, NOT here) with any ideas you have that might work for it.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...


message 3: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Wrote a new short story from the time of the Titanic called This Weightlessness. It's only four short chapters so I'd love for you guys to take a look and tell me what you think I can improve on! http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3... (comments ON THE STORY please, not here)


message 4: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments So I finally got around to writing a sequel to my first posted short story, Inordinate. This one's called Exorbitant (Brian's POV) and there will be a third posted later today or tomorrow called Irrevocable.

In case you missed the first one: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

Exorbitant: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

I would love reviews and suggestions on how to improve - even negative reviews are welcome! Please comment ON THE STORY, though, not here.


message 5: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments And finally, the short story trilogy is completed:

Inordinate: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

Exorbitant: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

And finally, Irrevocable: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

Check it out and post your critiques! On the story, though, NOT here. Please and thank you :D


message 6: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Read this please! http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3... If you have a title suggestion, I've very open to them! (Comments on story please, NOT here)


message 7: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments This is a short story called Lake Mors and I'd love to get critiques on it please! http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3... (Comments on story please, NOT here)


message 8: by [deleted user] (new)

I have come to add diversity comment-wise to your writing thread!

So hi, and your stories are completely and utterly fantastic.


message 9: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Read this please and give me critiques! http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3... (Comments on story please, NOT here)


message 10: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Ashlyn wrote: "I have come to add diversity comment-wise to your writing thread!

So hi, and your stories are completely and utterly fantastic."


hehe :)


message 11: by Jocelyn (new)

Jocelyn (Ducky113) | 265 comments Hey, I am trying to get around to reading all your stories, but you have so many! How on earth do you do that? Wow.


message 12: by Mel (new)

Mel | 371 comments Mod
Ikr? She's like a writing, lightning fast, ninja! XD


message 13: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments So guys ... I wrote a Twilight parody :D (just the ending of it, though). Go read it: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3... (comments ON THE STORY, not here)


message 14: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Mel wrote: "Ikr? She's like a writing, lightning fast, ninja! XD"

Ducky wrote: "Hey, I am trying to get around to reading all your stories, but you have so many! How on earth do you do that? Wow."

Hahaha I didn't see your comments until now but thanks guys :) I'd love for you to get around to them when you can (take all the time you need) and be sure to comment on what you think!


message 15: by Mel (new)

Mel | 371 comments Mod
Destiny wrote: "So guys ... I wrote a Twilight parody :D (just the ending of it, though). Go read it: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3... (comments ON THE STORY, not here)"

OH MY MUFFINCHEESE, I CANNOT WAIT TO READ THIS! XD


message 16: by Jocelyn (new)

Jocelyn (Ducky113) | 265 comments That was exactly what I expected Twilight to be.


message 17: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Here are some short poems I wrote a while back: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3.... Please read and let me know what you think! (comments on the story please, not here)


message 18: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments URGENT MESSAGE: I just found my book Something Else Entirely posted on the web by someone else (here's the link: http://www.quotev.com/story/2516866/S...). Everyone please do me the biggest favor ever and go to that link and report it! It needs to be taken down as soon as possible! I repeat, this is URGENT!


message 19: by Mel (new)

Mel | 371 comments Mod
Dangit, the link is only showing up the homepage and I can't find it when I search it. Can you try linking it again?


message 20: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Mel wrote: "Dangit, the link is only showing up the homepage and I can't find it when I search it. Can you try linking it again?"

It actually got deleted. So it's all good now :)


message 21: by Jocelyn (new)

Jocelyn (Ducky113) | 265 comments The first names are absolutely perfect. I always struggle with those. Most of my characters don't even have names, they just sort of exist in my head.

Here are my ideas, but some might be odd, and it's totally cool if you don't take them:

Jackson(Jack) Sollis/Morrow
Abel Hartman/Dunce
Griffin Morris/Westing
Kellan Shore/(???)

That's all I've got. If you don't like those, maybe they'll at least give you some ideas.


message 22: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Thank you, that was very helpful! I might actually use those ... :)


message 23: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments If you need some inspiration or you just need to feel loved (whether you're Christian or not), click here: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3.... I've posted a mix of things in the devotionals I read with bits of my own thoughts. Hopefully something about one (or more) of these will bring you hope. (Comments ON the link, not here. Please and thank you)


message 24: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments I finally got around to writing another short story! Right now, it's called "Something Like Fate," but if you have any other title suggestions, let me know by commenting on it. Here's the link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3.... I need some brutal critiques, so please post them on the story, not here to let me know how I can edit and improve this. Thank you so much!


message 25: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments I am very happy to present the first chapter to my new book, Like The Stars. I am currently working on it, but plan to be finished by June 30th. After that, I'll just take a few days to edit and then it'll all be up here. Please comment letting me know what you think, but on the story please, not here! Link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...


message 26: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments I posted a deleted scene from my first book, Something Else Entirely. If you wanna read it, click the link! Leave a comment on the story letting me know what you think.


message 27: by Erie (new)

Erie Morgan (amadeusfan27) | 31 comments "gathering the darkest times in my
life, not knowing where the pieces
fit,

tell me will this nightmare ever
seem to fade away from me
once again."


message 28: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Erie wrote: ""gathering the darkest times in my
life, not knowing where the pieces
fit,

tell me will this nightmare ever
seem to fade away from me
once again.""


I don't mean to be rude, but what in the world? This is a topic for my writing and I don't understand what your comment is.


message 29: by Erie (new)

Erie Morgan (amadeusfan27) | 31 comments that's a poem that i wrote a while back that i wanted to share with you if that's okay with you if i did that.


message 30: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Yes, that's fine. But from now on please message it to me, or make your own topic for your writing.


message 31: by Erie (new)

Erie Morgan (amadeusfan27) | 31 comments okay i'll message you now okay


message 32: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments I added the second and third chapters to Like The Stars. Please give this a quick look and comment on the story letting me know what I can improve! (Please don't comment on this topic) http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...


message 33: by Erie (new)

Erie Morgan (amadeusfan27) | 31 comments hi i'm trying to write a new poem


message 34: by Mel (last edited Aug 16, 2013 05:42PM) (new)

Mel | 371 comments Mod
Destiny (Elizabeth Grace) wrote: "I added the second and third chapters to Like The Stars. Please give this a quick look and comment on the story letting me know what I can improve! (Please don't comment on this topic) http://www...."

For some reason, it's saying it couldn't find the story when I click the link. That's the second time that's happened. :/ Weird.


message 35: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Hey guys! It's been a while since I've written anything short though I have gotten four books written now, so here are two new things! Please check them out and comment on the stories please, not here.

A poem called "I am too happy to fall asleep"

and a short story in verse called A Boy Named Bailey .

Thank you guys so much! God bless!


message 36: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Another short thing, this time in the form of a letter.

Every Reason I Love You

Please let me know what you think and comment on the story please, not here. Thank you so much!


message 37: by Luigi (new)

Luigi Sperduti (weegster73gmailcom) | 6 comments Hi I'm new to this site. I just wrote a short poetry book called "Abandoned Puppets" it's on amazon.com I would love feedback and any suggestions on books to read. Thanks


message 38: by Grace (new)

Grace (fictionaladventures) | 34 comments Some of you may remember my book, Something Else Entirely, that I took down a few years ago. Hopefully, you'll be happy to hear that it is back up! Happy reading! https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...


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