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message 1: by Irene (new)

Irene (WingdeSilverII) | 2500 comments Write a poem about something or someone you lost and be sure to show instead of tell. It can be any style you choose.


message 2: by Lucinda (new)

Lucinda :)


message 3: by Gabrielle (new)

Gabrielle (gabshi) the kids at school look my way
they laugh and tease and joke away
they never seem to see my pain
my tears, heavier than rain

you took away my dignity
i lost sight of things i once could see
you told them all maybe in a rush
that i was the one on which you had a crush

afterwards they laughed and teased
i just wanted it to stop, oh please
they made us dancing partners in class
i couldn't look at myself in the glass

the air didn't feel so right anymore
i lost sight of what i saw before
you took away my dignity
i went blind from what i couldn't see

i couldn't see happiness or hope
all i could do was hide and mope
no longer did i feel all great in me
you took away my dignity


message 4: by Irene (new)

Irene (WingdeSilverII) | 2500 comments Gabrielle wrote: "the kids at school look my way
they laugh and tease and joke away
they never seem to see my pain
my tears, heavier than rain

you took away my dignity
i lost sight of things i once could see
you to..."


Well done Gabrielle. You have grasped the concept of rhyme very nicely and the poem is fluid with a nice rythm. Somthing I would suggest is looking into more powerful words in substitute for plainer ones to give your poems a little more impact.


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