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message 1: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie Anyone have some criticism for me? I'd really like some feedback about how I can fix the stories mistakes.


message 2: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) hmmm....really nothing so far...eveything is extremely well developed


message 3: by [deleted user] (new)

Kenzie would be awesome in writing a complicated story about spies or the FBI or something like that.


message 4: by T.O.L.I. (new)

T.O.L.I. (taleoflostink) i know!! lol


message 5: by Violet (new)

Violet (violetspring) | 16 comments Nice twists and turns. At some parts though it was kind of boring. But I'll keep reading it no matter what. There better not be a crapy ending.......


message 6: by Rainy (new)

Rainy there is none, rewakened soul is text book profection.


message 7: by [deleted user] (new)

TOTALLY!


message 8: by Violet (new)

Violet (violetspring) | 16 comments Well come on guys there has to be something that you don't like. Nothing's perfect. Oh, not that I don't like the story. I love the story it's just that it's not the most perfect thing in the world.


message 9: by Rainy (new)

Rainy wrong, there is one thing that is prefect and that is.....REWAKENED SOUL!!!!!!!!!!!


message 10: by [deleted user] (new)

I haven't read a lot of it though. Once I start reading I might give some advice.


message 11: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie Whoa! Rainy, it's not perfect, I can say that for sure. Violet's right, some parts can get very boring, I'm sorry about that, I'm working on keeping it interesting.


message 12: by [deleted user] (new)

Go Kenz, go Kenz, go Kenz!


message 13: by Rainy (new)

Rainy whatever kenzie, still doubting your amazing talent.


message 14: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin Hmm, right now I don't have any critisim...I love it. :D Oh, maybe just one thing...Daniel's funny and all, but his long rants can get a bit tedious, because he repeats himself a lot. Just saying. :D Also, sometimes I think you switch from past tense to present tense in the middle of a chapter. For example, whenever Daniel does any action, it's always in past tense, but then whenever he is thinking about something or considering something, it's in present tense. That's bothered me sometimes...

Sorry that's all I can think of. Because it's amazing!!! :D


message 15: by [deleted user] (new)

I LOVED his prank call! Hilarious!


message 16: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie Hmmm ... I've never noticed that. Thanks, Sella. I didn't mean for it to seem that way.


message 17: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller I LOVE IT... I DON'T THINK I COULD CRITICIZE IT IF I TRIED!!!!



message 18: by Rainy (new)

Rainy I AGREE. IT WOULD BE DIFFICULT


message 19: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller Hmmm... yup, I got nothing.


message 20: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie Ah, well, thanks for trying. :)


message 21: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller *laughs*


message 22: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin Aaagh...now I feel guilty...I'm the only one who had any critisim. :( Now you're going to think I don't like it or something!! AAAAHH!! I FEEL SO BAD!! *bursts into tears*


message 23: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie No NO! It's fine, Sella. Really. I NEED some critisim. I need someone to help me fix things that are wrong.


message 24: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller I'm sorry! *feels guilty for the lack of criticism*


message 25: by Oceanwaves (new)

Oceanwaves (oceanwavesheartsoul) | 65 comments Not really! I luffles your story! :D


message 26: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller LOL


message 27: by [deleted user] (new)

*feels guilty with Paige*


message 28: by Rainy (new)

Rainy Kenzie, can't you except that your story is perfect!!!!!!!!!!!


message 29: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller Seriously.


message 30: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin Kenzie wrote: "No NO! It's fine, Sella. Really. I NEED some critisim. I need someone to help me fix things that are wrong."

Okay tankies. *wipes eyes and sniffles* I feel better now. :D


message 31: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie :)


message 32: by [deleted user] (new)

:P


message 33: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller *feels guilty again*

I seriously can't comment.


message 34: by [deleted user] (new)

STOP FEELING GUILTY!!!


message 35: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller *cringes*

Okay!


message 36: by [deleted user] (new)

THANKS PAIGE SO MUCH FOR READING TORN!!!!!!!!!


message 37: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller You're welcome!


message 38: by [deleted user] (new)

Have you read Chapters 6 and 7 because no one has!!


message 39: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller I just did AND commented!


message 40: by [deleted user] (new)

I REALLY need to start working on that again!!


message 41: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie Slacker, Kassy! Tsk, tsk, tsk!


message 42: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller KASSY! DON'T GIVE UP!


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