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The Pyromaniac00 (pyromaniac00) | 7 comments added a new one please review all of them what you like what you don't like any suggestions http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


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The Pyromaniac00 (pyromaniac00) | 7 comments I gotz seven topic views
And still zero reviews!
I know they can't lose
So help calm my blues
Tell me what you think
If they rock or they stink
If my rhymes swim or sink
Ill blow your mind before you can blink!


message 3: by The (new)

The Pyromaniac00 (pyromaniac00) | 7 comments Oh wait I think I figured it out! None of y'all like horrorcore rap! Y'all don't like a ghetto boy who is true to himself! I got it


message 4: by Alicia (Lav) (new)

Alicia (Lav) | 22636 comments Mod
Hey, we actually have a topic where people can share their writing. It's called Story Feedback. If you want to post a link to your writing in that topic, that'd be awesome. But I'm going to delete this topic in a couple of hours.


message 5: by Baxter, butts butts butts (new)

Baxter (julietrocksmysocks) | 2455 comments Mod
Lavender the modder
There's nobody hotter
When she drops the hammer
You bourgeosie better scatter
To the hills of your fascist capitalist regime
Got no time for your 'pinions or your power dreams
Word up!
Bumbumbadabadabumbadum Lav!


message 6: by Jo (new)

Jo (Penname8) | 1574 comments Baxter, that was really witty!


message 7: by The (new)

The Pyromaniac00 (pyromaniac00) | 7 comments The last part didn't rhyme. Also that topic is for story writing. This is musical writing. It's where it belongs


message 8: by Baxter, butts butts butts (new)

Baxter (julietrocksmysocks) | 2455 comments Mod
I take my inspiration from the classic old school rapper Andre 3000.

Do you ever feel like a paper bag
Drifting through the wind, wantin' to start again
Do you ever feel so paper thin
Like a house of cards, one blow from cavin' in


message 9: by Baxter, butts butts butts (new)

Baxter (julietrocksmysocks) | 2455 comments Mod
Post script: you could, alternatively, make your own topic in the Your Writing folder, where you can post WHATEVER YOU WANT.


message 10: by Alicia (Lav) (new)

Alicia (Lav) | 22636 comments Mod
Baxter wrote: "Lavender the modder
There's nobody hotter
When she drops the hammer
You bourgeosie better scatter
To the hills of your fascist capitalist regime
Got no time for your 'pinions or your power dreams
W..."


This makes me sound like a really mean person. I must admit that I enjoy this.

BUT YES. You can make your own writing topic! Those are always insanely fun. LISTEN TO BAXTER.


message 11: by The (new)

The Pyromaniac00 (pyromaniac00) | 7 comments Just click the link and review the stuff I posted -.-


message 12: by Alicia (Lav) (new)

Alicia (Lav) | 22636 comments Mod
Um, excuse me? There are rules in this group. And I quote: "DON'T SPAM. And by spam, we mean create unnecessary topics, advertise your book in a topic that is obviously not meant for advertising books, and things of that nature." If all 1,299 people posted their own topics in the wrong section of the group, this group would be a MESS. I'm sure your writing is great and I know you want people to read it. We all do. But there's a place for self-promotion, and this is not it.


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The Pyromaniac00 (pyromaniac00) | 7 comments Grrrr shut the fuck up you all are a bunch of bullshit piece of shit motherfuckers who should burn in Hell all I fuckin wanted was someone to tell me whether it's good or not but I guess you bitches ain't gunna be nice enough to do it! FUCK OFF!


message 14: by Jayda (new)

Jayda | 2760 comments Andy *Megans Dork!* wrote: "Grrrr shut the fuck up you all are a bunch of bullshit piece of shit motherfuckers who should burn in Hell all I fuckin wanted was someone to tell me whether it's good or not but I guess you bitche..."

Woooow Andy. Way to make us want to read and review your stuff.

So unnecessary. You want nice? Maybe you should try being nice, and try following the rules. That'll get you a lot better feedback than telling us we should burn in hell and calling us names.


message 15: by Baxter, butts butts butts (new)

Baxter (julietrocksmysocks) | 2455 comments Mod
I was going to delete it when Andy posted that, but this topic is too beautiful for an irresponsible mod like me to get rid of. I am sorry, world. I can't do it.


message 16: by Alicia (Lav) (new)

Alicia (Lav) | 22636 comments Mod
But... but... the principle of the thing! The clutter! The spam!


message 17: by The (new)

The Pyromaniac00 (pyromaniac00) | 7 comments I'm wicked! Evil at heart!
I'm wicked! Just check the chart!
I'm wicked! I'll rip your head apart!
I'm wicked! Don't even try to start!

I'm wicked! Evil sick insane!
I got cobwebs inside my brain
I live my life in the fast lane
And ram y'all off like a train
I cut throats and bash heads
And finish you off wit a bowl of lead
I'm sick! that's what the doctor said
When I hopped offa my death bed
Ima killa to the core
And rep the hardcore
So don't even approach my front door!

I'm wicked! Evil at heart!
I'm wicked! Just check the chart!
I'm wicked! I'll rip your head apart!
I'm wicked! Don't even try to start!
I'm wicked! Evil at heart!
I'm wicked! Just check the chart!
I'm wicked! I'll rip your head apart!
I'm wicked! Don't even try to start!

Ima murderin crazy wicked clown
Straight out from the underground
I made it big with this demonic sound
And now my purpose I have found
I'm true to the hatchet
I'm crazy bat shit
Y'all can't match it
So just listen to this fat shit
Y'all know I'm the fittest
You'll just be another witness
When I move y'all with this!

I'm wicked! Evil at heart!
I'm wicked! Just check the chart!
I'm wicked! I'll rip your head apart!
I'm wicked! Don't even try to start!

I'll keep spitten raps til the day I die
Wanna beat my flow? don't even try!
You say I'm nothin but that's a lie
And for it in hell you'll fry!
My legend will live on
With just this crazy song
I don't care if it's right or wrong
Now hurry up and pass dat bong!

I'm wicked! Evil at heart!
I'm wicked! Just check the chart!
I'm wicked! I'll rip your head apart!
I'm wicked! Don't even try to start!


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