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message 1: by Melissa (new)

Melissa Laura kind sounds like Jyn Urso from Rouge One. Someone we just had to believe was a fugitive or had done some bad things, but the audience really doesn't see anything to back it up. Just the author or character telling you so. Show! Don't tell!


message 2: by Kim (new)

Kim M Melissa wrote: "Laura kind sounds like Jyn Urso from Rouge One. Someone we just had to believe was a fugitive or had done some bad things, but the audience really doesn't see anything to back it up. Just the autho..."

YEAH! YOU TELL 'EM!


message 3: by Grace (new)

Grace Love the review just thought you should maybe check out the author's note? It explains why the subjugator was added and gives some more context to everything!


message 4: by Kim (new)

Kim M Grace wrote: "Love the review just thought you should maybe check out the author's note? It explains why the subjugator was added and gives some more context to everything!"

Hi Grace! Yes, the author's note is great! I love the idea of the subjugator and I wouldn't actually want it to be taken out of the story. My point is just that, if it's going to be there, it's got to have consequences. I wanted the subjugator to force Laura to do something that would have devastating results. As it is, the subjugator doesn't do any real harm, so the powerful effect it could have had on the story is downplayed.

Thanks for reading my review!


message 5: by Grace (new)

Grace Kim wrote: "Grace wrote: "Love the review just thought you should maybe check out the author's note? It explains why the subjugator was added and gives some more context to everything!"

Hi Grace! Yes, the aut..."


Ah, I understand what you mean! Also no problem! I'm still trying to figure out what to rate it.


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