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message 1: by Audrey (new)

Audrey Many excellent points here.


message 2: by Alexandra (new)

Alexandra Audrey wrote: "Many excellent points here."

There's a lot more. With quotes. LOL

Lots of telling, not showing. Some misused words. Confusing contradictions. Repeatedly telling us the same thing, then not explaining things when they should be explained. Writing is choppy in places. Etc.


message 3: by TL (new)

TL Great review hun


message 4: by Alexandra (new)

Alexandra TL wrote: "Great review hun"

Thank you! I hope some find it helpful :D


message 5: by TL (new)

TL Alexandra wrote: "TL wrote: "Great review hun"

Thank you! I hope some find it helpful :D"


I think they will.. it helped me decide it wasn't for me


message 6: by Alexandra (last edited Dec 13, 2017 03:10PM) (new)

Alexandra TL wrote: "Alexandra wrote: "TL wrote: "Great review hun"

Thank you! I hope some find it helpful :D"

I think they will.. it helped me decide it wasn't for me"


Yay! I know I was frustrated trying to figure that out when I was first looking at it. Was willing to take a chance since it was on a free promo, but it needs some more informative reviews (IMO), so, glad to help :D


message 7: by TL (new)

TL Alexandra wrote: Yay! I know I was frustrated trying to figure that out when I was first looking at it. Was willing to take a chance since it was on a free promo, but it needs some more informative reviews (IMO), so, glad to help :D

Least you tried :) It sounded more like an early draft of a novel from your updates.

*big hugs for you and cookies*

What I want in a blurb:

A good idea of what the book is about and what genre it is in.

What I turns me off in a blurb:

Telling me I'll like it. Telling me how awesome it is. Telling me how much other people have liked it.

Comparisons to very popular books. "For readers of....", "If you enjoyed...", "It's a cross between Book A and Book B..." Etc.


Same here..if my friends loved it, I may be tempted to give it a try but those types of things annoy me to no end.


message 8: by Audrey (new)

Audrey They annoy everybody. I don't know why publishers keep doing it.


message 9: by Alexandra (new)

Alexandra Audrey wrote: "They annoy everybody. I don't know why publishers keep doing it."

I know! Often they also end up just raising expectations which turns into disappointed readers, which turns in to unhappy reviews.


message 10: by Alexandra (last edited Dec 13, 2017 05:24PM) (new)

Alexandra TL wrote: "Alexandra wrote: Yay! I know I was frustrated trying to figure that out when I was first looking at it. Was willing to take a chance since it was on a free promo, but it needs some more informative..."

Thanks TL! It's really not as bad as some self-pubbed books I've taken a gander at (which is why it got 2 stars, not one), but I think the first person narrative was part of the problem. It really hurt the narrative, both with ability for worldbuilding, and ability to build up more emotional impact to the situations.

Remember how tense the scene in The Hunger Games felt, when the names were drawn? How weighty that felt? There was none of that here. None.

And I did often feel passages would have been better moved around - like some info given prior to a part rather than after. And things not explained! Then other things we're told twice in like 2 pages.

I think it's gone through some editing, I noticed a few others mentioned a lot of grammatical errors and things, and I didn't. But it was a bit of a mess in other ways.


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