Straight

by Seth King

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“You are like the sun. You are all I see,”

Oddly formal, grammatically correct dialogue for a southern gay guy who is adamant about "gay language". A lot of the dialogue feels overly stiff and formal.

But wherever you go, I will follow.”

This feels very off to me, like the author is trying to make these profound, meaningful statements but that don't really fit. Ty has already professed and shown to be sensitive and moody, so would he really make a statement like this (especially this over the top cheesy) right after Henry has denied them being a couple?

“I guess I kind of hated myself and my life, and I didn’t even know it. I was depressed.”

What? This is getting very contradictory, he was happily straight, loved, etc...and now he was depressed his whole life? And if him and Caro have been together since elementary school what about other women? He said he had a steady stream of girlfriends and hookups. Talked about a brunette earlier.

“I don’t want some public declaration,” he says. “You know I’ve let you move at your own pace. But I don’t want to feel like I’m sneaking around with anyone, either. And I don’t want to feel like our lives don’t intersect. I’m an all-or-nothing kinda guy, and you haven’t gone to a drag show with me.”

Letting him move at his own pace, but then forcing him out on the same paragraph is so contradictory. And that last line...I'm an all our nothing guy and you haven't gone to a drag show with me. Um completely confusing, how does a drag show relate to being all or nothing? Is that his breaking condition, going to a drag show?

Ty.”

Henry

We could officially move into my parents’ townhouse together,

I thought his parents refused to give him any money and would only let him stay there temporarily?