Story is impressive. Ngunit maraming flaws. Tulad nang nabanggit ng iba, GRAMMAR, sentence construction, choice of words, inconsistency, and vagueness. Maaring ang writer ay Chinese, na ang English language ay second language lang pero naiindindihan naman ang thought.
Not Specific lalo na sa geography. Where is Chatterton Town, and Beaford City? Sa China ba ito or sa England? "9 dollars" (ref chapter 1)maybe USA?hmm. May mga pagkakataon na ang setting ay confusing.
Kailangan pa ng masusing pag research like for fashion. Tulad noong New Year gathering, Karen wears a dress with boots. Doesnt sound appealing in my opinion para sa elite gathering.
Stretchy. Lalo pang humahaba ang kwento na nakakalimutan na ang SMART (specific, measurable, achievable, relevant, time-boxed) pati rhythm. Division of chapters ay halatang gawa para kumita ng malaki. It is very unreasonable price. We can buy brand new books $7 to $15 ng wellknown author like Dan Brown, Paulo Coelho etc. Complete! You will spend more than this and you will never hiw much more you need to pay. Just saying. If you want to spend money go for it