Dark themed Outlaw MC - Solid story w storyline discrepanies
Start of a new series set in the Outlaw MC genre. There are multiple triggers with examples included below.
⛔️ Contains references to, or scenes detailing subject matter that may be a trigger or offensive to some, including: adut language; derogatory terms; mental health issues such as anxiety, black out episodes, PTSD, depression, etc.; semi-steamy adult intimate scenes; violence some stereotypical of the MC genre such as kidnapping, abduction, rape, murder, death, torture, coercion, blackmail, drug use, drug distribution, gun running, money laundering, domestic abuse, child abuse, etc.
** Caution contains multiple references to and/or scenes with the mental, physical and sexual abuse of a female AND of children **
There are multiple grammatical issues throughout the story. None are difficult to interpret, but they distract from the overall storyline. These include incorrect word choice (e.g. tense, piece vs peace), missing punctuation, missing words, and extra inserted words.
Repo’s past, some of which he doesn’t remember, makes it difficult for him to tolerate physical touches (there are also some discrepancies with this, as sometimes he is able to pick her up or touch her without an issue).
There were also two timeline issues for me that I can list without revealing any spoilers. Kennedy started dancing for money at eighteen after her Dad went AWOL, but there is one scene that hinted she was sixteen. The other was Repo’s birthday. In the beginning he is twenty-eight and at the end they are celebrating his thirtieth birthday, without enough timeline to cover over a year.
Not sure why my brain tracks this … I am mentioning these things for readers such as myself that visualize the story as it is read, because errors interrupt the flow.
The first story focuses on Kennedy, an exotic dancer and forced club “girl” for the Red Riot (RR) MC. It shows how she was manipulated into becoming the property of their MC in order to save her little sister. She is beaten frequently and forced to service “customers” between dancing and waitressing (there are some graphic scenes detailing some of the hits and kicks).
The anti-hero is Repo, the Enforcer for the Brothers By Blood (BBB) MC in their Phoenix chapter. He was convicted when he was seventeen of murder when he walked in on the pastor of his family’s church sexually abusing his brother and blacked out. The pastor had done things to Repo as well, but he doesn’t remember the details of that or what he did to him. He had multiple people testify at his trial about the things done to them, so he was only given 5 years.
While Repo was in jail, he met a man doing life that helped him and this led to him joining the BBB MC when he was released. He moved up the ranks and now he was the Enforcer. In the years since, Repo works with his brother (and others) to take care of those that abuse children and he feels no guilt.
Repo’s BBB MC becomes aware of the RR MC running “things” through their territory without paying any fees or asking permission. Both of which are not tolerated. So the BBB MC sets it up where they can deal with the RR MC carriers on an isolated road and send a message. Crow, the leader of the RR MC, decides to reply and brings a group plus 2 club girls to Phoenix.
What happens when they realize that their message was ignored and then compounded when they brought two innocent females as shields?