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Kira
Kira is on page 12 of 468
Marcus, Haru isn't the only one who doesn't get your jokes.
Apr 23, 2012 02:58PM
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Kira
Kira is on page 25 of 468
I'm enjoying the dialogue, but the huge infodumps that keep nudging their way in there are really distracting. Ah, well. At least I have a character to root for, now. Jayden's fun.
May 06, 2012 08:10AM
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Kira
Kira is on page 20 of 468
"Kira didn't speed up, watching Jayden's face as she walked casually to the wagon. He looked so much like Madison." That's such an awkward sentence, I don't even know where to begin. There is absolutely no rhythm, and what's with the sudden reminder that he's Madison's brother? We know! You told us in the last chapter!
May 06, 2012 08:01AM
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Kira
Kira is on page 17 of 468
Here's an infodump, but at least it's creatively camouflaged. I like that.
Apr 23, 2012 05:22PM
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Kira
Kira is on page 13 of 468
If Jayden and Madison are the only living relatives in the world, and hailed as proof that immunity is inherited, what are they doing wandering around in suburbia? Why aren't they being probed like lab rats by the authorities? It seems these supposedly dedicated scientists are ignoring a lead dangling right under their noses. Fail #1, my dear Kira.
Apr 23, 2012 03:02PM
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