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Beanbag Love
Beanbag Love is 25% done
I think there's going to be a twist at the end where the majority of characters, including the lead, are revealed to be robots. They rarely use contractions in the dialogue. Who talks like that? I do not. O_O
Feb 18, 2012 06:22PM 1 comment
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Denise Ordoyne
Denise Ordoyne is on page 221 of 237
Kind of a slow read!
Feb 26, 2012 01:51PM Add a comment
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Thalia
Thalia is on page 50 of 291
Mar 02, 2012 06:09PM Add a comment
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Thalia
Thalia is on page 14 of 291
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Beate
Beate is 21% done
Pretty good so far, some issues with info dumping, grammar and sentence structures.
Mar 02, 2012 11:37PM Add a comment
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Beate
Beate is 24% done
Characters do tend to get a bit wordy with their monologues in this one...
Mar 03, 2012 03:45AM Add a comment
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Beate
Beate is 31% done
Instead of repeating what happened and the dialogue, just say "and she told what had happened." So much better than being repetitive.
Mar 03, 2012 06:56AM Add a comment
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Beate
Beate is 47% done
Too much dialogue in several places. It's becoming an issue. Fade to black/giving the readers just the gist of what is going on is the better way to go. Too much yack-yack, and the reader starts skimming/skipping pages. Not. Good.
Mar 04, 2012 08:34AM 2 comments
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Ali
Ali is 20% done
loving this so far. has a sweet southern small town feel.
Mar 04, 2012 08:14PM Add a comment
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Beate
Beate is 53% done
This book is written in 3rd person. Instead of using monologue to recall a past experience, use "and then she told the court about how she had (insert here what, why, and outcome). Mix things up a bit. All the dialogue and monologue is getting a bit old.
Mar 04, 2012 10:03PM Add a comment
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