false 29 275 242 true 5648092 read 2 true 1392944 currently-reading 31 true 1392943 to-read 106 false 1402010 poetry 40 false 1393364 favorites 32 false 1426654 natives 17 false 1402021 books-on-writing 15 false 1430830 read-between-fifth-and-tenth-grades 6 false 1438068 screenplays 1 false 1450935 must-read 1 false 1393263 books- http://www.goodreads.com/group/show/18423.A_Brief_History_of_Time_with_Shaindel_Beers Jerry joined the A Brief History of Time with Shaindel Beers group. ]]> http://www.goodreads.com/topic/show/124145-raking-blueberries Jerry made a comment in the ¡ POETRY ! group:

lol. no.

thank you. its a good poem. ]]> http://www.goodreads.com/topic/show/119621-schizophrenia Jerry made a comment in the ¡ POETRY ! group:

how about

Unhappy with its concrete mediums:
building happiness, seperating truth
from walking barefoot through wrecked streets.

Emotionally stumbling, shouting
at unseen shadows.

His alone to bear. ]]> http://www.goodreads.com/review/show/10798779 to: Culture Warrior (Paperback) by Bill O'Reilly
bookshelves: to-read
Fucking (**Man Crush Alert**Man Crush Alert**)Asshole!!! ]]> http://www.goodreads.com/topic/show/74322-raw-language-need-help-shaping Jerry made a comment in the ¡ POETRY ! group:

tighten, definitely tighten. don't worry about limiting to just adjectives or adverbs though. I've made some changes to show you some thoughts, or ways of tightening.

Lyric Fragment

shark-like scene ruined, harkened,
shells in a white kissed hand.
Still
plugged into that ripe dream
with woozy logic.
returned
to the Hotel Awake
with California no longer a theory
about surfaces,

and love only

obliging with a multiplied
banana (night) or
swathed in white.

I would never
use that word without
wearing gloves and a mask.
Which explains your urgent fecundity?
Dripping static
I wonder
wonder if the architecture
could bear
the wrong paint job.
Could we
marshal the effect
of so many stupid nights.


Aren't these indolent days?
Or tedious like
flux white.
Tree asunder and folly
tract -filled but no
coordination in the tongue.

Soul got kindled
backwards through a foxhole.
From Sweden on this is called
common agency.

I
cannot stop
kissing this book
nor Take it all
to the ocean
]]> http://www.goodreads.com/topic/show/76681-goodreads-monthly-newsletter-poem-contest Jerry made a comment in the ¡ POETRY ! group:

Love Rearranged

And that is how I consider Mother,
our drag-length driveway calling me
home with the sputtering of truck back-
fire, rocks clanking metal of auto-
mobile, rocks spurting from the balding tires.

Rocks, the decadent gray loosely gathered,
always called gravel, are making those occuring
cadences, sometime during a golden August afternoon,
sometime after the convecting winds
die, sometime before the evening
blue settles into dust. ]]> http://www.goodreads.com/topic/show/42251-stacking-things-for-neatness Jerry made a comment in the ¡ POETRY ! group:

However, I prefer the rhyming... the way it moves the poem. I would suggest gutting out some of the non-rhyming parts or add some non "or" rhymes.
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