Good rhymes! I particularly like the part: "In the fields of battle of my mind/Can you see the ragged
men standing in a line?/Can you hear them calling for relief?/ They fight for only one belief./That I may find a love again."
You should probably work on grammar, capitalization, etc, only because that kind of ruins the overall look and feel of the poem. You know?
Or maybe that's just me - unintentional bad grammar gets under my skin. Deliberate bad grammar and punctuation...now that's something else entirely. :)

Thank you.

I like it, very much...

Here's another piece.
This is not meant as a threat to anyone.LOL
Its just the feelings the heart goes through
When a love gets destroyed
Plz Comment and let me know if you like it

Dealing with the loss I feel Forever shall Tear me apart.
Told you goodbye Felt as if I had lost a piece of my heart.
Couldn't say the words I felt But if you had looked you
would have seen me Crying.
If I said I was Sorry no longer You know I would be lying.

In the fields of battle of my mind Can you see the ragged
men standing in a line?
Can you hear them Calling for relief? They fight for only one belief.
That I may find a love a again.

But my heart So like a Fortress Dark, Destroys every chance it gets
to light another Spark.
It rains on every flame that Glows. And all the while my hatred grows.
WHY!? Why did we have to say goodbye?

You said you loved me What a lie You turned your back and left me to die.
But I'm still here and made of stone. Go on now and Leave I walk alone.
For its Alone I belong But this hatred I feel is feeding me and making me strong.
Someday when your all alone You'll turn and see me. Then you'll pay for what you have done.

Oh why did you go???