Chana, I'm not so good at critiquing people, mainly because I think everyone has their own style and thoughts, so who would anyone else be to tell them they're wrong, etc But I absolutely loved this, it's very beautiful.

I met love at electric lady land
her words of steel dynamited my soul
she flipped me forward in time
I watched life bend and sway
lady closed my eyes, opened
my mind, through lives of
candy coated dreams of places
I have been, through dream states
long ago and far away and once
once upon a time there was this woman
her eyes shined bright with the knowledge of
the mission
a world to behold of life in the heart of things
come to see my lady, listen to her steely words, so
just, so mighty, so filled with love, lady
take me by the hand and fly me away to the place
the place I want to be
love is a blessing, it's always a joy
life is to be lived for everyone gets to see
the beauty

C: JACM 02.12.2009