The Night He Left Me

by Charlotte Erickson
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genre: Poetry
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This is a poem about one of my greatest fears.


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chapter 1: The Night He Left Me


The Night He Left Me
chapter 1   —   updated 11/17/08   —   971 characters   —   56 people liked it   —   34 reviews
I was so proud of him.
He was my hero,
my savior,
my lover,
my best friend.
He was a brand-new policeman
with a gun
and a future.
He was a brand-new adult
with a one-bedroom apartment
and a fiancée to share it.
We were planning a wedding;
we were planning a trip to Europe;
we were planning a date for tomorrow night.
Tomorrow night never came;
neither did the trip to Europe
or the wedding.
Plans changed.
It took one short phone call,
one swift ambulance ride,
one well-placed shot.
Lives changed.
His mother came to hold his hand;
she held mine too
because he wasn’t there to do it any more,
the brand-new policeman
with a wound
and a memorial,
the brand-new adult
with a coffin
and a fiancée
who wanted to share it.
Time has passed,
plans have changed,
life has changed,
but it has also moved on.
I was so proud of him.
He was my hero,
my savior,
my lover,
my best friend.
That’s all I remember
of the night he left me.
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" omg that is soooooo sad but sooooooo good i wouldn't be able to survive if any thing like that ever happened to me so i give u props on being able to ...more "

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" So sad and so beautiful poet. "

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" Very deep and touching. Thank you for sharing. "

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" Omg!! very deep and so beautiful, thanks 4 sharing ^_^ "

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Bebe said:
" this is beautiful but truly sad!!

you express the feelings so clearly, the environment, recreating what you lived in such a touching way

blessings :...more "

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laura said:
" the passion was very strong and it gave a lot of feeling "

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" it was awesome, sad too, but very well written "

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Chadpennington10 said:
" I reccomend people who lost their relitaves or something to it. I really think this is a great poem. I could not belive your fiancee got killed. I bet...more "

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" awwwww.... dont feel bad.... we all pass these times too! "

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" deep I like that! keep writing please! "

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IMelda BravO said:
" Yup, evrything bout death is not only your greatest fears but also ours.. But still, Life must go on, please "out with the old, in with the new&q...more "

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Willie said:
" Thank you for sharing beautifully written and a proud way to remember some one dear. "

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" A woman who could survive such tragety and still live knows how to love life even more. I was in tears while reading this and thought to myself that y...more "

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Natasha said:
" I am a young widow, and you have captured much of how we feel.

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" Your poem is simply written yet profound. Your words can be understood by the most basic of readers but the themes of loss, heartache and sadness are ...more "

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" So beautiful, and sad. I love it. "

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" lovely "

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" Such a sad, but meaningful poem. I think that you have a great potentional. "

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" It's a lovely poem. "

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" Well done!!! "

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" Thank you for sharing a part of your life. I loved it's beauty of truth in words. Please keep writing more. "

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" wow, I love its simplicity. Thanks for sharing. "

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" Wow. I'm almost speechless. "

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Melissa Grace said:
" tragically beautiful....love it "

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Whitney said:
" This poem shows a lot of feeling, and it tells a lot about the pains that that person felt. Very good, though. I liked it a lot. "

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" very good...so deep "

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" This is just prose split up into short lines, not a poem. "

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" Wow. Beautiful poem. "

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Elijah said:
" Your words remind me so much of Sylvia Plath and her style. But you gave used such a poignant event in life and made it--beauty. "

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