The Night He Left Me - The Night He Left Me by Charlotte Erickson
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The Night He Left Me
The Night He Left Me
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updated Apr 26, 2009
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I was so proud of him.
He was my hero,
my savior,
my lover,
my best friend.
He was a brand-new policeman
with a gun
and a future.
He was a brand-new adult
with a one-bedroom apartment
and a fiancée to share it.
We were planning a wedding;
we were planning a trip to Europe;
we were planning a date for tomorrow night.
Tomorrow night never came;
neither did the trip to Europe
or the wedding.
Plans changed.
It took one short phone call,
one swift ambulance ride,
one well-placed shot.
Lives changed.
His mother came to hold his hand;
she held mine too
because he wasn’t there to do it any more,
the brand-new policeman
with a wound
and a memorial,
the brand-new adult
with a coffin
and a fiancée
who wanted to share it.
Time has passed,
plans have changed,
life has changed,
but it has also moved on.
I was so proud of him.
He was my hero,
my savior,
my lover,
my best friend.
That’s all I remember
of the night he left me.
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He was my hero,
my savior,
my lover,
my best friend.
He was a brand-new policeman
with a gun
and a future.
He was a brand-new adult
with a one-bedroom apartment
and a fiancée to share it.
We were planning a wedding;
we were planning a trip to Europe;
we were planning a date for tomorrow night.
Tomorrow night never came;
neither did the trip to Europe
or the wedding.
Plans changed.
It took one short phone call,
one swift ambulance ride,
one well-placed shot.
Lives changed.
His mother came to hold his hand;
she held mine too
because he wasn’t there to do it any more,
the brand-new policeman
with a wound
and a memorial,
the brand-new adult
with a coffin
and a fiancée
who wanted to share it.
Time has passed,
plans have changed,
life has changed,
but it has also moved on.
I was so proud of him.
He was my hero,
my savior,
my lover,
my best friend.
That’s all I remember
of the night he left me.
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Patty
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omg that is soooooo sad but sooooooo good i wouldn't be able to survive if any thing like that ever happened to me so i give u props on being able to ...more
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Bebe
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this is beautiful but truly sad!!
you express the feelings so clearly, the environment, recreating what you lived in such a touching way
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you express the feelings so clearly, the environment, recreating what you lived in such a touching way
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Chadpennington10
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I reccomend people who lost their relitaves or something to it. I really think this is a great poem. I could not belive your fiancee got killed. I bet...more
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IMelda BravO MarPaung
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Yup, evrything bout death is not only your greatest fears but also ours.. But still, Life must go on, please "out with the old, in with the new"...more
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Willie
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Thank you for sharing beautifully written and a proud way to remember some one dear.
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Cassidy
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A woman who could survive such tragety and still live knows how to love life even more. I was in tears while reading this and thought to myself that y...more
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Natasha
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I am a young widow, and you have captured much of how we feel.
Very nice. "
Very nice. "
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Valerie
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Your poem is simply written yet profound. Your words can be understood by the most basic of readers but the themes of loss, heartache and sadness are ...more
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Princess Jen Jen
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Such a sad, but meaningful poem. I think that you have a great potentional.
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Chasidy
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Thank you for sharing a part of your life. I loved it's beauty of truth in words. Please keep writing more.
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Whitney
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This poem shows a lot of feeling, and it tells a lot about the pains that that person felt. Very good, though. I liked it a lot.
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Elijah
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Your words remind me so much of Sylvia Plath and her style. But you gave used such a poignant event in life and made it--beauty.
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Elizabeth
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Wow. What can I say? It's funny (or NOT funny) how things can just change, things that took forever to build. Thank you.
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Chhaya
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Very touching poem. Reflects the pain of losing someone so close and also the fact that everything in life is perishable. Everyone we know and hold cl...more
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Eccentric Muse
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this poem broke my heart. esp:
"the brand-new adult / with a coffin / and a fiancée / who wanted to share it."
thank you so much f...more "
"the brand-new adult / with a coffin / and a fiancée / who wanted to share it."
thank you so much f...more "
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Virginia
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Wow! Right to the core of feeling and the experience, the horrible experience.
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Barbara
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My husband is a police officer, and I worry about this every day, this was a beautiful poem and made me cry, god bless you.
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Lakeesha
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Simple yet complex. Just like death. I really appreciate your work. I like this piece.
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Shai'ann
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i just didnt like it 2 me it was meaningful i mean you cant find writing like that anymore it was awesome read my poetry u might wanna go 2 my profile...more
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Bella
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That was really good. Really good imagery.
I loved how you weren't just like, "my fiancee died. I was sad." Very good :) "
I loved how you weren't just like, "my fiancee died. I was sad." Very good :) "
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Mary
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Got chills as I finished reading this. Very sad, but loss like that always is.
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Mindy
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Made me cry. Extremely well written. The "fiance wanting to share it" parallel was moving.
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GERSHON...
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TOO MUCH LIKE A NOVEL AND FLOW AND STREAM OF CONSCIOUSNESS.... BUT GOOD...
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Perdomo
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I can feel the passion in your words and like you I fear that this will never be your reality.
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Louvaine
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I love poetry like this--cuts thru the crap to the searing emotion underneath.
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Chreslyn
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It is so beautiful that it made me almost cry. And a little sad too.
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Melanie
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This poem is very well writing and structured, with a tragic ending...:(
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Miranda
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"With a coffin and a fiancee who wanted to share it"... Beautiful. Timeless. Sad. Sould shattering. Amazing. You wrote a beautiful peice
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