Blackout - Prologue: Whiteness by Sella

by Sella
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It's been sixteen years since Alicia Seel's old best friend, Jonathan Reilly, died. Now she's twenty-six, working as a literary agent in the City of Angels, and she's managed to make herself forget the childhood friend whose death crushed her so many years ago.

Well, she's mostly managed to forget ... other than the fact that she refuses to read fantasy or listen to music because it reminds herself of him. But never mind that; Alicia is convinced that after sixteen years, she's definitely over it.

So why is she suddenly having vivid flashbacks of their friendship? And why is Jonathan's ghost beginning to haunt her?

It's only going to be a matter of time before Alicia will be forced to confront her best friend's death – something she's been unwilling to do for sixteen years. And when she does, she will have to face the consequences of her refusal to let Jonathan Reilly go.

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((A/N: I'm playing around with switching between persons in this story. To clear up any confusion: when it's in first person, it's in Alicia's view. When it's in third person, it's in Jonathan's view. Hopefully it will make sense. :D))



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chapter 1: Prologue: Whiteness


Prologue: Whiteness
chapter 1   —   updated Sep 13, 2009   —   1969 characters   —   121 people liked this writing   —   94 reviews of this writing

Death wasn't at all like he had expected.

It wasn't painful. It wasn't scary. It wasn't terrifying. It wasn't horrible.

It was the opposite: relaxing, peaceful, calm. Pleasant, even. Everything was so much easier when he didn't have to struggle with the blackness anymore. The moment he gave in and let it take over, everything felt so much lighter, like a huge weight lifted from his shoulders.

At first, there was nothing but black, blackness that pressed down upon him, blackness that swirled all around him. It was so dark, he couldn't tell if his eyes were open or closed.

But then, the darkness started slowly disappearing, and beams of light were replacing it. Suddenly, harsh, painfully bright whiteness was hitting him full in the face.

What is this? he thought, bemused. Heaven or something?

It took a few minutes of blinking the spots away from his eyes to realize that he was back in the place he had just left: the hospital room. Except this time, he was watching the scene from the sidelines. This time, he was standing at the edge of the room instead of lying in the hospital bed.

What's going on? Did I not die, then? Am I somehow still alive? It wasn't making any sense. He was positive he had been dying.

But then he really saw the scene in front of him. Alicia was standing by the hospital bed he had occupied minutes before, just like she'd been doing before the blackness had overtaken him. And she was staring with utter shock at his body.

His body.

His body, which was still in the hospital bed, cold and still and clearly dead.

It was over there, but he was standing across the room. He wasn't attached to his body anymore.

That could only mean ...

The thought was too crazy to complete.

But one glance down at himself was enough to prove the unbelievable idea right.

He was looking down – and he could see right through himself.

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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" awww :( sad. but TOTALLY AMAZINGGG!!! (of course) WRITE MORRREEE!! XD XD XD "
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Kendall said:
" That is SO GOOD! Please write more! "
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Acacia said:
" Sellaaaaa. Write moooooooore.

:D :D :D "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" *sucks in deep breath* THAT WAS OMGOSH, AMAZIN'! I feel so sooo sorry for Jonathan! Great job! I love it and cant wait to read more! "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Oooh "
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Annie said:
" oooh "
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Drizzleherb said:
" This is so good, Sella! "
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Kenzie said:
" Awe. *sniffles* "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Freaky!! And sad!! D: But very good!! "
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Esther GIRL WITH MAD NINJA SKILLS!! HIYA!! said:
" wow!!! "
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Seth said:
" :) "
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♥Hima the Grape♥ said:
" Whoa! Coolz! More! "
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Apoorva said:
" WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I <3 the prologue. Really makes me wanna read more.
*goes to Chapter 1* "
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~Clare~ said:
" awesome :) "
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call me crazy and be done with it. said:
" awesome opening!! "
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Shruti said:
" interesting...very interesting... "
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Madelyn said:
" whoa...creepy. "
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Anna said:
" Ah! Must read more! "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Awwww, poor John. You must write more! "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" awwww :( write more!!! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Pretty much what I said in my first comment, it was SOOOO AWESOME!!!!!!! Keep going, this sounds like a really good story!!!!! "
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Acacia said:
" See above review. :D :D :D "
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Allie said:
" Oh my gosh sella!!! That's freaking amazing!! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" Sella, you have to write more! "
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Kenzie said:
" Alicia's kind of mean. Whoa. I like Jonathan, though. :D "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Awww!! Tis sad!!! But so cute!! I love you Jonathan!!! "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" lol alicia reminds me of me ... because she talks to herself and yells at coffeemakers. O_o i love this so far!! eeep can't wait for morreee!! :D "
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Niki said:
" This is really good, Sella. No offense, but I like it a TON better than Outcast! I can't wait to read more! "
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Esther GIRL WITH MAD NINJA SKILLS!! HIYA!! said:
" awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww i think im going to cry.,.......... actually i am *breaks down sobbing* "
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Seth said:
" so good :) "
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Angel♥ said:
" awww.... too sweet.... "
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~Clare~ said:
" sad :( GOOD! :D "
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Hasna said:
" awwww..... "
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Teehee said:
" The writing is great. I'm just having a confused moment. The description says that the girl is now 26. The death was 16 years ago. But in the first ch…more "
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Anna said:
" I love how Alicia talks to herself.

Poor Jonathan! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" Alicia doesn't have to be so mean to the readers! I wasn't juding her about not being married!

And, OMG!!!! SARAH KIMEL???!!!!!! OMG, SELLA…more "
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Esther GIRL WITH MAD NINJA SKILLS!! HIYA!! said:
" ooooooooo... that story description is good! you should atually write a story off of that "
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♥Hima the Grape♥ said:
" Coolz! "
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Acacia said:
" Whoa, whoa, whoa! What's so wrong about that query?!?! "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! write more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" O_O !!!! eeek!!! SELLAAAA I LOVE THIS AND I LOVE YOUUUU!!!! RAWWWRRR!!! haha the dialogue is great. :D and CLIFFHANGER ENDING!! ACCK! i can't wait for…more "
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Niki said:
" The ending confuses me. I want more. Probably because the ending won't confuse me once I read the next chapter.

Anyway, I LOVE IT! It's …more "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Oooh "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Like Holly said, this is much better than Outcast! (no offense!) What happens next? What happened to Alicia??????? WHAT WHAT WHAT?????????????? EEEEEE…more "
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Oceanwaves said:
" LOLZ! Sarah Kimmel wrote the query! Sooooooo good so far Sella!! Mez loves it!! What's wrong with the query though? :) "
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~Clare~ said:
" OMG! Sarah Kimel! Total twister! ak >.< love it XD and lol Clare Mayne! I feel special cuz you spelled it my way! :D thanks!!! "
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Kenzie said:
" Ooh. Great chapter! Very exciting cliffhanger. I love her attitude toward her boss. Very funny. :D "
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Seth said:
" wow. :) are you gunna write that book? "
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Hasna said:
" Now do we get the full story? Yay! "
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Shruti said:
" AWESOME!!! isn't sarah kimel from life in d minor???? "
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Madelyn said:
" Ohhhh, AWESOME! "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Awww! Their grammar is so cute! And Alicia, it's okay! Calm down! "
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~Clare~ said:
" lol good! nice ending! but um the whole super bad grammer thing for the kids?? well i think maybe u should tone it down a bit, using less 'wrong tense…more "
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Esther GIRL WITH MAD NINJA SKILLS!! HIYA!! said:
" eeeeeeeee love it! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" AMAZINGNESS! Totally awesome! Definitely can't wait for the next chapter!!! "
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Angel♥ said:
" AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH "
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Kenzie said:
" Flashbacks? Ooooh! "
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Hasna said:
" Awww....poor Alicia, but how did he die? "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Haha. You're great with five year old dialogue!
Great job! This is amazing! But now I'm very curious, how did Jon die?! "
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Niki said:
" Very nice, very nice. It's really good! I want more from Mr. Ghostie's POV! And I don't think 5 yr olds use THAT bad of grammar. "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" sella, it was good, but, like other people have mentioned, 5-year-olds use better grammar than that. actually, they use proper grammar, or make very, …more "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" AWESOMESAUCE. this is intense ;D "
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Acacia said:
" Awww... "
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" This is so great! "
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chapter 5 review
Niki said:
" Okay, this chapter was really good. I do have a few suggestions though.

1) It's odd that Alicia has no problem saying swear words out loud…more "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" LOL. wow, i love this :D
the only thing i notice is that the characters kind of talk like teenagers, you know? but other than that, awesome :] "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Woo! Go Alicia! In your face, Stephen! Muahahaha! XD "
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Angel♥ said:
" lawl. LOL. man, I think she's starting to become crazy. lawl. xD "
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~Clare~ said:
" um she seems to get really worked up over things... lol "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Lol, wow. Nice Ms.Seel. Hehe, she's so funny! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" lol, wow! I love Alicia's relationship with George! He's like her best friend! "
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Snuffleupagus! said:
" haha i love this. alicia is just like me! except im not always that mad :) "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Alicia has anger issues . . .

Great job, but what's up with the meany butts and female dog comments when she's narrating? Maybe touch up t…more "
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Esther GIRL WITH MAD NINJA SKILLS!! HIYA!! said:
" tehehee! if you did a view from errrrmmm Jonathin it would be soooooo funny after this!! he'd be cracking up and probably be soooo happy!! "
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Kenzie said:
" Wow. Alicia's kinda mean. :P "
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Cassi said:
" heh. alicia's funny. xP "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" XD i love alicia "
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Shruti said:
" lol...alicia has a very STRONG personality "
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Madelyn said:
" I love this. "
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chapter 6 review
Drizzleherb said:
" Totally awesomeness!!! I can see what you mean about Jonathon, though. Like, it's obvious that he has a few likes and dislikes, but he is a little fla…more "
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Madelyn said:
" Awwwwwwww! "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" :D yaaay!!! i love it!!! no, i don't think jonathan is boring … of course, it's early in the story and you probably don't know him very well yet. h…more "
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Acacia said:
" Awwwwwwww! "
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~Clare~ said:
" keep going! i want more! "
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Niki said:
" I don't think Jonathan's flat at all!

You, my dear darling friend, are paranoid. "
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Oceanwaves said:
" I don't think Jonathan's boring. You'll probably just be able to develop his characteristics later on in the story. Love the chapter. "
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Snuffleupagus! said:
" awwwww i feel bad for both of them :( "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" jonathan isn't flat. he's as well-developed as he can be, actually. he would be flat if he didn't have to always be around alicia, but as he does, the…more "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Jonathan is not flat! He is great, and like many ppl have already have said it is early in the story, he is not completely developed yet. As the story…more "
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ChElSeA cLaRiSsE said:
" I love this!! and I don't think jonathan is flat. "
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Kenzie said:
" Jonathan's not flat. He's actually pretty well developed for having his part in a third-person sort of setting. He's a ghost who is doomed to follow s…more "
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Ashlynnd said:
" This is really good!
You really should add more :)
I want to know what happens.
And if you want you can check out my writing.
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5315... "
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Esther GIRL WITH MAD NINJA SKILLS!! HIYA!! said:
" ohhhhhhhhh did he drown or something?? "
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Shruti said:
" Of course Jonathan is NOT flat...and don't forget that he will keep developing as the story goes on :) "
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