When the Cobra Strikes. - Overwhelming of the heart. by I'amber
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Short stories that I'm working on, comments and tell me what you think!
- I'll name it for the short story I'm working on at the time.
chapters
chapter 1:
Overwhelming of the heart.
chapter 2:
Touched by an angel.
chapter 3:
God's gift, Devil's curse.
chapter 4:
When the Cobra Strikes.
chapter 5:
Caged bird.
chapter 6:
Wishing he was here.
chapter 7:
I miss you <|3
chapter 8:
I;am.
chapter 9:
This wall.
chapter 10:
The girl in the mirror.
chapter 11:
Like an anchor.
chapter 12:
Fragile soul
Overwhelming of the heart.
chapter 1
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updated Aug 22, 2009
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My hands run down, and over the little bump that is now taking form of my stomach. My heart overwhelms with this strong ease of love I’ve never quite felt before, a love so strong my heart aches with longing and disbelief. How could they think of this as awful? To think of giving another life, a chance to live, awful? How could they possibly except for me to kill it, or to even give it up? This little bump is now a part of me, a part of who I’ am. I won’t kill it, or give it up. I simply refuse.
They all look down on me, some with pity, some with self disgust, and some with disbelief. I know what their thinking, but I keep my head held high dispite it all. They all think the worse of me and they have yet to know me. Not taking the time to understand me, to know me, only to criticize, label and to judge me for what lies under my shirt.
I wish, wish they take a walk in my shoes, then maybe they'd understand. Understand that it was one night of weakness, a night they just felt right. I don't regert it, not at all, for this thing that lies under my shirt is not a mistake like they all think, but a miracle. A miracle that shall and will change my life, for better or for worst. Not only has this little miracle that lies under my shirt, in my belly, changed my life, but me, as a person.
"Abigail, your barely seventeen." Mom says. "You have the rest of your life ahead of you, do you understand that?"
Among all the other people, my mother is also another who looks down on me, never taking the time to listen, only to judge.
“Yes, mom. I understand.” I say. "But do you?"
And I do understand, but she doesn't. She never has, and she probably never will.
"Are you going to keep it?" Hartley asks, running his hand down and over my stomach.
I stare into his green eyes, and reply with a simple "Yes."
he nods at this, like he knew the answer all along.
And in a way I guess he did, just as I did. I knew from the start I wasn't going to kill or give our little miracle up. What right do I have to play God? To not give this baby inside of me a chance to live? None, none once so ever because everyone, everyone deserves a chance at life, to live, love, to hurt, to grow.
THE END!
Author's note:
Thanks for all the comments, and support! It makes me smile [:
However, I won’t be adding more, at least not now, maybe later after I get done with my other stories I might make another story of this but a longer one :D
MAYBE.
But this, this is a short story, I truthfully don’t know how to go with more of this because the whole idea of writing this was for everyone to understand that just because, um you know, she’s not a slut, and that everyone needs a chance at life, to live and grow. Because well if you had sex and got Prego, your fault, you shouldn’t kill it which is what I believe because what gives you the right to play god and such?
And no I’m not Prego or anything like that so don’t ask me: that’s why its called a story! But my 15 year old cuz is and she didn’t give hers up or anything so I was thinking about that when I wrote this, and also I got the ‘Prego teen’ topic offline, NOT the story lone, only ‘Prego teen’ because someone told me that’d make a good topic. [:
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They all look down on me, some with pity, some with self disgust, and some with disbelief. I know what their thinking, but I keep my head held high dispite it all. They all think the worse of me and they have yet to know me. Not taking the time to understand me, to know me, only to criticize, label and to judge me for what lies under my shirt.
I wish, wish they take a walk in my shoes, then maybe they'd understand. Understand that it was one night of weakness, a night they just felt right. I don't regert it, not at all, for this thing that lies under my shirt is not a mistake like they all think, but a miracle. A miracle that shall and will change my life, for better or for worst. Not only has this little miracle that lies under my shirt, in my belly, changed my life, but me, as a person.
"Abigail, your barely seventeen." Mom says. "You have the rest of your life ahead of you, do you understand that?"
Among all the other people, my mother is also another who looks down on me, never taking the time to listen, only to judge.
“Yes, mom. I understand.” I say. "But do you?"
And I do understand, but she doesn't. She never has, and she probably never will.
"Are you going to keep it?" Hartley asks, running his hand down and over my stomach.
I stare into his green eyes, and reply with a simple "Yes."
he nods at this, like he knew the answer all along.
And in a way I guess he did, just as I did. I knew from the start I wasn't going to kill or give our little miracle up. What right do I have to play God? To not give this baby inside of me a chance to live? None, none once so ever because everyone, everyone deserves a chance at life, to live, love, to hurt, to grow.
THE END!
Author's note:
Thanks for all the comments, and support! It makes me smile [:
However, I won’t be adding more, at least not now, maybe later after I get done with my other stories I might make another story of this but a longer one :D
MAYBE.
But this, this is a short story, I truthfully don’t know how to go with more of this because the whole idea of writing this was for everyone to understand that just because, um you know, she’s not a slut, and that everyone needs a chance at life, to live and grow. Because well if you had sex and got Prego, your fault, you shouldn’t kill it which is what I believe because what gives you the right to play god and such?
And no I’m not Prego or anything like that so don’t ask me: that’s why its called a story! But my 15 year old cuz is and she didn’t give hers up or anything so I was thinking about that when I wrote this, and also I got the ‘Prego teen’ topic offline, NOT the story lone, only ‘Prego teen’ because someone told me that’d make a good topic. [:
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chapter 1 review
Rita
said:
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Your first sentences are excellent. That's about what it feels like to be pregnant.
An interesting twist when you add the second paragraph. "
An interesting twist when you add the second paragraph. "
chapter 1 review
♫Huneeya♥
said:
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love the ending it rly makes u think about how each and evry life is a miracle and should be given a chance and everything.
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chapter 1 review
Jenna
said:
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you are a really good writer. i felt like i was really a pregnant teen. i think you should keep everything you've typed out so far!
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chapter 1 review
ScreamSunshine
said:
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Keep that part.
AND YOU ABSOLUTELY NEED TO ADD MORE! :D
Your an amazing writer, Amber. Keep it up! "
AND YOU ABSOLUTELY NEED TO ADD MORE! :D
Your an amazing writer, Amber. Keep it up! "
chapter 1 review
Kevis
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This is the first piece of your writing that I have read so far. If the rest of your work is half as good as this one, I'm going to be in for a treat!…more
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chapter 1 review
♥ Tink ♥ (Paige)
said:
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Good work! I like the emotion. Try to limit the redundant sentences, and you'll have an excellent short story.
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chapter 1 review
Siera
said:
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This was fantastic! I loved it, but I also think that adoption is fantastic. I have aunts, friends, etc who couldn't have kids and who adopted. But yo…more
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chapter 1 review
JustAnotherConverseLovinGurl
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wow wow wow really good
definetly makes me see things differently
(: "
definetly makes me see things differently
(: "
chapter 1 review
Baxter
said:
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It's pretty good. Great language. I'd like to say that there are a few spelling errors here and there that you may want to correct though.
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chapter 2 review
Kevis
said:
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I am impressed by how emotional your work is. It's hard to read this story without being moved. One thing is for certain. You know how to create drama…more
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chapter 2 review
♥ Tink ♥ (Paige)
said:
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That was incredible. I absolutely loved it! Good work. :) I can't criticize it at all, because it rocked.
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chapter 2 review
ScreamSunshine
said:
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Oh my god! I love that! It's probably my favorite so far :D
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chapter 2 review
Siera
said:
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Now I'm commenting on Chapter Two ... sorry, it may be creepy that I'm reading these, but they're so good! I loved this one, fantastic short story.
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chapter 2 review
Mindy
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I really love this. It's amazingly sweet. Keep up the awesome work!
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chapter 2 review
JustAnotherConverseLovinGurl
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omg i loovee it!
ur really really good at short stories! "
ur really really good at short stories! "
chapter 4 review
Mindy
said:
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PLEASE try not to get writer's block on this one! I want to see what you do with this mysterious topic.
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chapter 4 review
Trixie
said:
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Um,,,, I'm scared when a cobra strike... Many lost lives, ya know?
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chapter 4 review
♫Huneeya♥
said:
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this is rly great :D
but just a suggestion: when u do end it maybe u shud save the "each time the cobra strikes" part for last? it would…more "
but just a suggestion: when u do end it maybe u shud save the "each time the cobra strikes" part for last? it would…more "
chapter 5 review
Trixie
said:
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Freedom is a very good thing. I also wanna be free. Free from my studies for only 1 day.
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chapter 7 review
Anna
said:
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Amber, I love this. This really captures the feeling of missing someone so well. I'm sorry for your loss.
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