After you - .

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Winner of the Goodreads Poetry Contest, August 2009
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Published on 2009-08-03 · 21 total people like it


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Chapter 1   —   Updated Aug 03, 2009   —   371 characters
Now that you are gone, I wipe
mango juice from my table,
fold up the crinkled stories

Three potatoes on the windowsill
begin to send out roots
from their sleeping eyes

I dream that I begin to travel
but the moon stops me, flicking
its bright coins against my mirror

Poems litter the path
where we walked, and all my clothes
are stained with your laughter



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message 1: by Danielle (last edited Aug 13, 2009 12:20pm) (new)

Danielle "...but the moon stops me, flicking its bright coins against my mirror"


An absolutely lovely line.


message 2: by Radha (last edited Aug 17, 2009 10:34pm) (new)

Radha beautiful poem


message 3: by Rence (last edited Aug 19, 2009 08:20pm) (new)

Rence Short, but I like- 'all my clothes are stained with your laughter' Really nice- where did they go...sorry the stories got crinkled, I was kinda hoping they wouldn't...


message 4: by Maryam. (last edited Aug 20, 2009 09:07am) (new)

Maryam. Wow, amazing!!:D


message 5: by Claudia (last edited Aug 22, 2009 09:20pm) (new)

Claudia sparse and beautiful, exactly how I like them!


message 6: by Linda E. (last edited Aug 22, 2009 09:53pm) (new)

Linda E. Beautiful and imaginative, esp the last verse.


message 7: by Lawanica (last edited Aug 24, 2009 04:14pm) (new)

Lawanica Lovely.


message 8: by Girma (last edited Sep 16, 2009 05:07am) (new)

Girma Mengiste yes, for its excessive details os "objects" of (may be)" romance". The other quality is . . .


message 9: by ayundabs (last edited Nov 04, 2009 05:11am) (new)

ayundabs cute!


message 10: by Linda (last edited Nov 05, 2009 06:33am) (new)

Linda lovely.


message 11: by Ayesha (last edited Dec 12, 2009 11:33am) (new)

Ayesha I'm such a sucker for metaphors:D Beautiful!


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