One Last Look - Prologue: Um, Hi? by Anna (Maxy)

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No one is completely normal, and Bethany Manson is anything but. At least she has an excuse. Since her sixteenth birthday last year, she's had visions come to her out of the blue, literally (she has blue flashes before the visions appear). As time passes, Bethany has a harder time keeping this secret, especially from her best friend Nathan, who she also happens to be in love with. Can she trust herself to tell him? To tell anyone? Is it really easier to keep a secret than it is to reveal the ugly truth?

Please read and comment! It's nice to know if you like my story, but I could really use some constructive criticism right now.

Note: I've been writing this story over a long period of time, so my style has changed (hopefully for the better) throughout. I'll fret about that more when I'm editing; same thing goes for grammatical and spelling errors. I'm not as worried about those things right now, unless they're really huge.

Here's a link to the cover (courtesy of Sella): http://www.goodreads.com/photo/user/2443...

Copyright 2009 by Anna Maxwell



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chapter 1: Prologue: Um, Hi?


Prologue: Um, Hi?
chapter 1   —   updated Dec 16, 2009   —   2790 characters   —   53 people liked this writing   —   38 reviews of this writing
You think your life is crazy, yes? Prepare to change your mind. I'm Bethany Manson, and my life is - well, to put it simply, insane.

Most stories start with a pretty normal person. I could tell you that mine is the same way, make it easier for you, but that would be an almost complete lie. I don't need another whopper like that in my life. But I only lie to protect myself. I know it's so cliché, but just because it's cliché doesn't mean it's not true. If I told everyone how I was different... Let's just say that's not a good idea. I'd rather not spend the rest of my life in an insane asylum.

I know what you're thinking, too. If I'm so scared to tell everyone, why am I pouring my feelings into a book? The answer? A teenage girl has to have someplace to vent her feelings, especially when they're as complicated and unheard of as mine.

Ever since my sixteenth birthday, I've had these mysterious blue flashes. And no, they're not some cool coming-of-age gift or something. These flashes are accompanied by visions of things that haven't happened yet, which really creeps me out, to be totally honest with you.

They weren't always visions; they started out as dreams. The first time I dreamed one of these things up, I just thought it was pretty cool. I mean, it was pretty great to know that my brother Spencer was planning a prank on me before I found out the hard way. Anyway, the next few times, I just thought, Hmm. Weird, but still cool. Well, imagine my thoughts when the dreams began happening regularly. Basically, they involved wondering if I was going totally insane. Who knows? Maybe I was. This could just be the story of a mad woman.

After a month or two, the dreams went away. Good, right? Wrong. Now, instead of visiting me in my sleep, these little flashes decided they weren't nocturnal anymore and crept their way into my daily life. Well, maybe not daily, but either way, I've had enough of those things.

I'll admit it: sometimes these visions can be a blessing. I mean, who wouldn't mind knowing that Mr. Drall is handing out one of his terrifying pop quizzes on Tuesday? But - I swear there's always a "but" - lately, I've had visions that no one would want to see, especially not me. These kinds of images aren't meant to be going around in someone's head. Again, let me be honest; they scare me.

The visions take me by surprise every time, no matter how much I've seen one.

"Oh, please," I plead when that blue flash enters my mind's eye and clouds the vision of my regular ones. "Not again. Not now."

But of course, the vision goes on anyway. It's not like it would ever listen to me.


Give me advice on this, please! I've redone the prologue quite a few times but I'm still not totally happy with it.
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" Darlin', the prologue is just fine, I think. It explains what's going on very clearly while leaving room for the reader to wonder what's going to happ…more "
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" i was worried at first;D "
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♫Huneeya♥ said:
" i love the way u describe his eyes :) but maybe u shud describe the blue flash in more detail, bcaz its her first? "
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Debzi said:
" ok so they remind me of HE and I soo muchXD "
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