Immortality- Book #1 - Chapter 11 (chapter 11) by Ellen ♥ Mwah!
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This is my story which I am working on over the holidays for something to do. the chapters may be abit long because i have first written it on word document.Be honest in the comments please. And its only a draft so if there are spelling mistakes sorry! =D
Alyson and her family have abandoned the immortal world when a war broke out among them. 16 years later the immortal world is starting to catch up with them, and there only chance to stay free is to leave.They move to a small town only to be introduced to bigger problems, ones that envolove Alyson's life and who she represents in the immortal world.
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chapter 1:
Chapter 1
chapter 2:
Chapter 2
chapter 3:
Chapter 3
chapter 4:
Chapter 4
chapter 5:
Chapter 5
chapter 6:
Chapter 6
chapter 7:
Chapter 7
chapter 8:
Chapter 8
chapter 9:
Chapter 9
chapter 10:
Chapter 10
chapter 11:
Chapter 11
chapter 12:
Dear Readers
Chapter 11
chapter 11
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I could faintly hear the background noises. People murmuring, somebody crying and whimpering, and somebody whispering things to my ear.
“Alyson everything is okay, but you need to wake up honey okay?” The person snuffled.”Please baby wake up”
I could hear her feet being shuffled away, and faintly hear her sobs. It was gut wrenching.
“Shhh dear. She will wake up okay; she just used a lot energy she needs to recover from it”
“But it has been two months and she is still asleep. She should have recovered by know”
My mind was too sleepy to process what the lady was saying. Two months, I have been asleep for two whole months? That couldn’t be right. What is happening to me?
“Nobody knows how long it could take. Nobody has this kind of power and she used a lot opening the wooden doors. Calm down she will be okay”
My mind felt groggy and heavy, like your eyes are when you haven’t had enough sleep.
Go to sleep Alyson, if we can’t have you nobody can. Sleep.
I obeyed the menacing voice in my head, and let the blackness take over me once again.
To Be Continued
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“Alyson everything is okay, but you need to wake up honey okay?” The person snuffled.”Please baby wake up”
I could hear her feet being shuffled away, and faintly hear her sobs. It was gut wrenching.
“Shhh dear. She will wake up okay; she just used a lot energy she needs to recover from it”
“But it has been two months and she is still asleep. She should have recovered by know”
My mind was too sleepy to process what the lady was saying. Two months, I have been asleep for two whole months? That couldn’t be right. What is happening to me?
“Nobody knows how long it could take. Nobody has this kind of power and she used a lot opening the wooden doors. Calm down she will be okay”
My mind felt groggy and heavy, like your eyes are when you haven’t had enough sleep.
Go to sleep Alyson, if we can’t have you nobody can. Sleep.
I obeyed the menacing voice in my head, and let the blackness take over me once again.
To Be Continued
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chapter 2 review
Mindy
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Ellen, wow.
I really, really like it.
Spelling mistakes aside ( ;-} ), it's awesome! It has a great plot and is well written. ...more "
I really, really like it.
Spelling mistakes aside ( ;-} ), it's awesome! It has a great plot and is well written. ...more "
chapter 5 review
Mindy
said:
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That whole dream-thing/memory-loss was totally unexpected but totally awesome!
Keep it up!
;-} "
Keep it up!
;-} "
chapter 6 review
Rebecka
said:
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keep writing,
i really like it,
hmm.
alyson and justin should be together,
i thought that at the beginning of this book. "
i really like it,
hmm.
alyson and justin should be together,
i thought that at the beginning of this book. "
chapter 7 review
Rachel
said:
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Wow, Ellen i really like this.
As long as u write more, i will read it LOL.
Love, love, love the Justin thing "
As long as u write more, i will read it LOL.
Love, love, love the Justin thing "
chapter 8 review
Mindy
said:
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Write faster!!!! I need to know how they react to her powers!!!! I need to know EVERYTHING!!!!
"
chapter 9 review
Rachel
said:
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Oh good chapter!!
I must say i was a bit peeved at Justin for lying but now i'm sorta 4giving him *smiles sheepishly*
Can't wait 4 mor...more "
I must say i was a bit peeved at Justin for lying but now i'm sorta 4giving him *smiles sheepishly*
Can't wait 4 mor...more "
chapter 10 review
Rachel
said:
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Wow cool :)
Let me guess.... is William gonna come and take her back?? is he, is he??
Quick write more lol "
Let me guess.... is William gonna come and take her back?? is he, is he??
Quick write more lol "
chapter 10 review
Mindy
said:
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I LOVED IT!!!! I hope that she can get both her family AND Justin back!!!!
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chapter 10 review
Sophie
said:
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cool, write more ellen!
i hope she stays with justin.. but doesnt go back to the castle with william "
i hope she stays with justin.. but doesnt go back to the castle with william "
chapter 12 review
Abbee
said:
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cool! we'll all be waiting altho i did like that u had loong chapters cuhz then the chapters seemed like chapters from a real book! =)
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