Destined - Chapter 15- Warehouse siege (chapter 16) by Rachel

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There’s a line between good and evil, but what happens when that line is blurred?

Roxi was a normal teenager up until two years ago when fate left her no choice but to become a vampire. Necessary for her to live; it wasn’t something she chose. Does that make her evil? Roxi doesn’t think so. With that choice taken out of her hands, she made the only one she could let herself make. She chose not to give into her nature, but to rise above it.
Despite having to hide, who and what she now is from the people who matter most, Roxi was living her life as best she could. That was until someone from her past resurfaced. Someone who wants Roxi to take a different path than the one she chose. Someone who won’t let her go.
Now Roxi is left with no choice but to work alongside her natural enemy, the very people who hunt her kind- Vampire Hunters. Embarking on a shared mission proves difficult as hunters and vampires clash. They say keep your friends close and your enemies closer, but how do you accomplish that when your enemies no doubt want you dead?
Throw in a supposed destiny that Roxi doesn’t believe in, and a hunter named Logan who may be more than he seems, life’s getting complicated. As Roxi fights to prove she’s more than the hunters think she is, Logan’s learning that not everything is black and white, and soon Roxi begins feeling things for him she knows she shouldn’t.
But when tragedy strikes and Roxi’s world is shattered, she must decide whether to give up, and lose all she is, or fight to complete the mission. Suddenly the stakes are higher, as the realisation that maintaining what’s left of her already broken world may come at a price. One that Roxi’s not sure she’s willing to pay, or even if her heart will allow her too.




**** SCHOOL HAS BEEN VERY BUSY LATELY, AND THAT IS WHY THE CHAPTERS AREN'T COMING OUT AS QUICKLY AS THEY USUALLY DO. I CAN'T SEEM TO FIND THE SPARE TIME TO WRITE. I'M SORRY IF THIS HAS BEEN DISAPPOINTING ANYBODY ****



chapters

chapter 1: Prologue

chapter 8: Chapter 7-Traitor

chapter 15: Chapter 14- Callie

chapter 16: Chapter 15- Warehouse siege

chapter 27: Chapter 26- The Order

chapter 39: Chapter 38- The Lodge

chapter 46: Chapter 45- Leaving

chapter 48: Chapter 47- Miracle

chapter 53: Chapter 52- The Plan

chapter 56: Chapter 55- Promises


Chapter 15- Warehouse siege
chapter 16   —   updated Oct 13, 2009   —   10291 characters   —   303 people liked this writing   —   220 reviews of this writing
The taste hit me like a truck. The salty, slightly sweet taste like fire flowed over my tongue and down my throat. Each gulp was like pure heaven. Like a summer breeze it wrapped around me and it was as though all my Christmas’s had come at once. If filled me with warmth and I could feel my strength growing with every sip I took. I let out a low moan and swallowed more.
“Maybe you should get a room.” Claudia’s sultry laugh broke through.
Looking up at her from my glass, I saw that she was standing up against the doorframe, her arms folded across her chest. I also saw that she was wearing her Death Walker gear.
“Maybe I will” I said, licking the last drops of blood off my lips. “What’s up?” I indicated her attire, leaning across the counter and placing my glass in the sink.
“We have some new information. Frank just passed it along to Quintenn.” She stood up straight, looking serious. “This could be the break we’ve been waiting for. The hunters believe that some major contacts of Micah’s are located in a warehouse just outside the city. Logan’s getting ready to lead a group of hunters there, and Quintenn wants us to go along. Ben’s waiting outside in one of the vans for us.”
“I need to get changed first.” I was still wearing the jeans and floral shirt I’d been wearing all day. I couldn’t fight in them, they’d slow me down.
“I figured” she started to walk away. “I’ll tell Ben and we’ll wait for you. We have to wait for the hunters to tell us where we’re going anyway.” She glanced back over her shoulder one more time before leaving. “Don’t be long.”
“I won’t be” I said following her out, heading towards my room. And I wouldn’t be.


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Once I was dressed, I met Claudia and Ben near one of the many black van’s parked outside the Manor. We all pilled into the backs and before I knew it, we were pulling up outside a warehouse located just off the interstate.
As I jumped out the back of the van, landing with a soft thump on the gravel, I was surprised by the sight of the warehouse. It was massive and completely run down. It looked as though it hadn’t been in use for years. It didn’t strike me as a place Micah would have his contacts stay at. Maybe he was more desperate that usual.
It was separated into two sections and we were quickly divided into two groups. Each group was set to survey one section. I was assigned to Quintenn’s group but Claudia asked me to swap with her and being the good friend I am, I agreed. That left me with Logan, Greg and the majority of the hunters.
I sighed, hoping that the hunters wouldn’t take the time to get rid of one extra vampire. The last thing I needed was a stake through the heart.
My group’s job was to check out the main section of the building, where the largest amount of vampires was believed to be.
As we approached the building, one of the many loose planks that boarded up the windows, fell and almost hit me. I jumped out of the way at the last moment. “This place’s a death trap” I muttered.
Logan, walking a few feet away, nodded. “You better watch yourself” He turned and included everyone. “That goes for everybody. We don’t know exactly what we’re about to walk into, so I expect that everyone watches their back very carefully.” He said it so loudly that even Greg, who stood the farthest away at the front door, heard.

Standing outside the entrance, we once again went over our plan of attack. We were to burst in and take down any vampires in the main rooms, while Quintenn’s group scoped out and took out any others throughout the house.
“It’s important that we’re able to capture some alive. The information we could get out of them could be invaluable. But know; if they pose an immediate threat to you or your life, don’t hesitate to take them out. It’s not worth it” Logan glanced around the entire group and I felt his eyes settle on me. “Okay?” He and other hunters were wearing head to toe black clothing, their weapon belts slung across their bodies. They looked deadly.
Everyone nodded, including me, answering Logan’s question. Then he stepped up, opened the door, and then we were in.
The moment we stepped over the threshold the atmosphere changed. The hunters slipped into their business modes and you could practically taste the tension in the air. The hunters hadn’t overestimated the amount of vampires that were waiting for us. We entered the room and, once over their initial shock, the vampires pounced, fangs bared, and our battle begun.
Slipping down into my own zone, I easily vanquished the first vampire that came at me. Instinctively he went for my throat; giving me an easy opportunity to reach out and grabbing his arm flip him over onto his back. I reached back, pulled my knife out from my own belt and thrust it down into his chest.
Yanking it out, I turned and kicked the vampire who had just come at me from behind flat in the stomach. And that’s pretty much how it went from there.
Inside, the warehouse was as same as it was from the outside. Every part looked like it was ready to fall apart. Many support and ceiling beams were only held up by rope. The doors were splintered and broken down.

All around me the hunters were busy facing off against vampires of their own. Most of the vampires were already dead. I noticed that the vampires weren’t giving the hunters any chance or reason to take them alive. They were fighting to the death, they wouldn’t be taken alive.
Everyone around me was in an almost identical position. Vampires were coming out of no where and I realised we were in over our head. We didn’t have the right number of fighters. As we took them down more arrived to take their place.
A vampire slammed a piece of wood against my head, hissing, and made me fall backwards. As I landed, I rolled and was back on my feet in the same movement.
A few feet away, wrestling with a vampire of his own, Logan gave me a look. I noticed that he was both sweaty and bloody, but otherwise appeared unhurt.
I shook my head, meeting his eyes, and indicating I was okay, threw a hit at the vampire. He staggered backwards and as he fought to compose himself I attempted to vanquish him. But he caught my knife in his hands, in between his two palms, and threw it onto the floor. He continued to throw hits at me, but I blocked each one, occasionally getting in one of my own.
He was fast becoming the most difficult one I’d faced this evening. He was smarter than the others I’d sparred with and he met me, kick for kick, and punch for punch.
Around me I was vaguely aware of the other confrontations going on. Logan was slightly to my side and was having some difficulty with the two vampires that were currently coming at him. I couldn’t count how many he’d already vanquished.
I saw him stake one of them, and then watched as the other brought its fangs dangerously close to his throat. I considered interfering, but while I was momentary distracted, the vampire I was sparring with took the opportunity to reach out and rake his fingernails across my face, slicing the skin and whipping my head to the side.

I grunted and felt the blood run down my neck. My head was still turned to the side and it was looking in that direction, that way, that I saw my answer. There was a sharp piece of narrow metal poking out of a pillar off to the side the room. I reached out, grabbed the vampire and, giving him a swift kick which sent him flying, smacked him back first into the pillar. He let out a surprised cry and blood oozed from the spot where the metal stuck out.
I stood staring at him for a second before someone slammed into me. I turned around ready to strike and realised it was Logan. Logan had the vampire by the forearm and was trying to prevent him from driving the sword he held, into his chest. The vampire broke free of Logan’s grip, and with a huge force plunged the sword towards Logan’s heart.
Logan spun at the last second, and as I quickly moved out of the way, the sword instead struck the pillar. As he spun, Logan pulled out his own dagger from the belt on his waist and sank it into the vampire’s chest, cutting him off.
The sword cut the rope that was wrapped around the pillar, and both Logan and I looked up in time to see one of the support beams from the ceiling come crashing down.
I barely had time to blink before Logan grabbed me and swinging me around, slammed me up against the wall. I let out a gasp, more from shock than pain, as the wall collided with my back. I heard the swish as the beam swung down and then a crash as it hit the floor, missing us by inches.
Then everything seemed slow. Logan had me pressed between him and the wall, our legs pressed together. We were both breathing heavily. I could hear my heart speeding in my ears and feel his beating up against my shirt.
We were still in the middle of a battle, but all my attention was on him. He was looking down at me, his eyes intense and I felt something sizzle deep inside me. It was a feeling I’d never experienced and it was not something I’d ever expected him to make me feel. Staring up into his blue eyes, I could see that he felt something too, but whatever that was, it ended. The next moment he stepped back, away from me, and shouting instructions to people, joined the battle again.

I stood, still standing up against the wall, panting. I touched my fingers to my cheek and saw that my gash was gone, already healed. I looked, and seeing more vampires arriving I jumped back into the fight, confused and unsure about what had just happened between Logan and I.
Soon almost all the vampires were dead. Quintenn’s group had showed up, finished with their task and between the two groups we had made short work of the remaining vampires.
Everything fell silent as the last vampire was vanquished. We all stood there, breathing heavily and counting our numbers. Some hadn’t made it. Logan and Ben walked over and stood near where Claudia and I stood. Silence drowned on until a voice broke through, booming throughout the entire warehouse.
“Hello Roxanne. What a lovely surprise.”
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" This, is TORTURE, you are torturing us, stop torturing us post the next chapter
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" they were about to kiss weren't they? "
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Sophie said:
" omg i thaut they were gonna kiss at the car..
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Rebecka said:
" dun dun dun =))
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Catie said:
" Love the new chapter. Bad Micah:) "
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" :O wow. is she ok? "
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" Awww! I love Logan!!! And I hate Micah! "
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" revenge on micah!!!
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XXmelancholyXX said:
" ok, i am officialy sure that im addicted to your story so post hte next chapter or else...
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Rebecka said:
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" OMG. They finally kissed. woooooo. "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" YAY!! Im sooo happy!
The wait was longm, but so worth it! =P
I want more Logan and quickly! "
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Mindy said:
" FINALLY!!!!! Keep it coming girly!!!! "
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XXmelancholyXX said:
" THANKYOU!!!!!! but dont think your done yet, oh no, we need more "
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Sarah said:
" :D "
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chapter 33 review
Mindy said:
" PLEASE tell me that Logan DOESN'T DIE!!!!! I honestly don't think I could stand it if he did. It would almost be like Dimitri dying again. :-( "
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Catie said:
" Oh my!!! They finally kissed, but I am scared about that last pharagraph. What does that mean? Is he going to die? No please no!! "
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Sophie said:
" OMG logan cannot die!!
bloody micah, go find sumone hu actually likes u!!
i hope things go well with roxi and logan :) "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" YAY!!!
=D
I am now one very happy girl only one thing is missing.... the next chapter!!! "
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chapter 34 review
Sophie said:
" AHHHHH!! how can it be empty.. oh my god, its a trap isnt it??
DONT KILL LOGAN!! "
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Mindy said:
" Keep it up girl!!!! "
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*HaYlEy*WoOdLoNe rOcKz!!:))) said:
" i agree with sophie!!
PLEASE DONT KILL LOGAN!!:( "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" Kill Logan and I will seriously kill you!! I mean it, you cannot kill him! D= "
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Rebecka said:
" i think micah planned them to go there. so he can take Roxi and kill logan. if u kill logan i will fly to australia, and strangle u and then i will pu…more "
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Kim said:
" Great!!
you had to leave it on a cliff hanger didnt you! :L
cant wait to read more. "
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XXmelancholyXX said:
" hurry up Rach!!!!!!!!!!! i understand u have school but still, WE NEED MORE!! "
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Abbee said:
" awesome. ur story sucked me right in. i LOVE IT! "
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chapter 35 review
Rebecka said:
" not nice mannn i wanna know "
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Sophie said:
" aww rach u didnt tell us anything abt her and logan :(
ah well, i will be hounding u for the next chapter :) "
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Mindy said:
" LOVE IT!!!!

Damn. It's about time!!! Bring on the next PLEASE!!!! "
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XXmelancholyXX said:
" its about time!!! u really need to speed it up. we need more(again)!!!!!! "
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Kim said:
" This is a great story :)
as good or even better that some of the books out now days! "
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Abbee said:
" AHHH! CLIFF HANGER! stop this torture. "
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*HaYlEy*WoOdLoNe rOcKz!!:))) said:
" LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!KEEP WRITING PPLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:D "
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chapter 36 review
Sarah said:
" :O :O :O "
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Mindy said:
" I loved it!!!

This is going to sound so wrong, but I'm glad you put the fire in there. Logan and Roxi are both still alive.

Tha…more "
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Kim said:
" That was so sweet then *sniff* it got s-so sad and i was *sniff* actually crying :( "
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Sophie said:
" OMG a fire!! theyre all dead, claudia and callie..
thank god logan didnt die!! YAY! and they r together :D
but that was soo sad wen the mano…more "
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*HaYlEy*WoOdLoNe rOcKz!!:))) said:
" omg Rach!!!that is sooooo sad :'(!!im glad Logan wasnt in the Manor!!!!please keep writing "
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Rebecka said:
" omg no no no no no not dead, cant be dead!!! "
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Medina said:
" OMG!Rachel, awesome story, loved it like Hell, totally in love with Logan. NNNNOOOOO, they cant all be dead! By th way, if you Kill off Logan I will p…more "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" =O

OMG! RACHEL! I NEED MORE AND QUCIK! *snaps fingers* GET TO IT!

-Excuse the captials "
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ayundabhuwana said:
" Really, you should publish it or something. It's awesome!!! "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" =O
I was definitly not expecting that! "
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Mindy said:
" Okay. WOW. Love it Girl!!! ;-} "
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*HaYlEy*WoOdLoNe rOcKz!!:))) said:
" this is hella good!!!!!!!!!!!!PLEASE KEEP WRITING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:D "
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Sophie said:
" aww she took all her abger out on logan.. but its good he knew she was sad
it so cute how he knew she was there and he waited for her :D
"
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Medina said:
" Honey...Im gonna cry if you dont continue soon, and i just finished crying from Blood Promis...Tear "
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Abbee said:
" cool! "
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Kim said:
" within the first paragragh i was crying again.. "
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XXmelancholyXX said:
" more?? pwetty pwease?? "
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Raylene said:
" so awesome write more plz come on! "
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chapter 38 review
Sophie said:
" FINALLY!!! yay!@! this chapter wanst boring, despite ure qualms :D
and it was more roxi and logan time.. but he was acting a bit strange..?
…more "
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Mindy said:
" EEEPP!!! You FINALLY got it up!!! ;-} "
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*HaYlEy*WoOdLoNe rOcKz!!:))) said:
" LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!…more "
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Abbee said:
" where is she? "
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Kim said:
" thanks for writing the next chapter!
i was dying from waiting!
great chapter btw :) "
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chapter 39 review
Sophie said:
" YAY! a new chapter, finally :P
aww her and logan r sharing a room, how cute ~~
screw micah, they need to kill him once and for all!! "
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chapter 39 review
Kim said:
" aaaw.

great chappy as always.

youve gotta love logan

i feel really sorry for roxy "
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Mindy said:
" Damn. PLEASE get the next chapter up ASAP!!! "
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chapter 40 review
Sophie said:
" aww, Logan is so caring and sweet- bringing her blood even tho he hates the thaut of it
please let her hav a damn shower :P "
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chapter 40 review
Kim said:
" great as always.
i wish that you hadnt killed off the conavent :(
anyways good job "
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Mindy said:
" LOVE IT!!! Hey, the ASAP thing worked! Maybe you can do another ASAP job? "
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*HaYlEy*WoOdLoNe rOcKz!!:))) said:
" this is soo good!!i feel so bad for Rox though!!Keep writing!!! "
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Sophie said:
" oh no, the first body.. i bet she will crumble
will she loose it Rach? lol
write more :P "
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chapter 41 review
Mindy said:
" PLEASEPLEASEPLEASE get the next chapter up!!!!! ;-} "
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Kim said:
" thats certianly gunnu dampen her already dreary mood

great description in this chapter ;) "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" =(
This is going to be hard for her! "
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Sophie said:
" awww! that last part is so cute ;)
she is gonna go mental wen they find claudia.. poor roxi, i hope logan can handle her outbursts
write mo…more "
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chapter 42 review
Mindy said:
" They haven't found Claudia. Could it be that she's still alive?! PLEASE hurry with the next chapter!!! ;-} "
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ayundabhuwana said:
" oooh, can't wait for the next chapter, please update soon!!! "
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Kim said:
" Break the Kleenex out again

Im going to start sending you the bill :L

isnt there going to be any happiness in her life any time …more "
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Ellen ♥ liked it
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chapter 43 review
Sophie said:
" NOOO! STOP PUSHING LOGAN AWAY!
Rach i swear if u dnt hav them making up the next time they talk i will hunt u down!!
next chapter! "
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chapter 43 review
Mindy said:
" Okay, please, PLEASE tell me they eventually work this situation out!!!!???? "
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Kim said:
" Roxi should listen to Logan..

I hope Claudia managed to escape the fire somehow.
if shes dead then i think roxi will completely lose i…more "
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♥Jess♥ said:
" This ought to be interesting. Keep writing! I really love this! "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" Lol. I hate that when that happens. People having a convo about you when you're right there and they have forgotten! "
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Sophie said:
" yay, she is finally gonna go and tell Logan she needs his help :) "
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Mindy said:
" Please, PLEASE tell me that they work it out and then they get put into some kind of danger where they have to be completely in sync to get out of!!!!…more "
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♥Jess♥ said:
" Luv this so much! Plz write more soon! "
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chapter 45 review
Sophie said:
" YAY! they made up.. and we a juicy make-out scene.. finally!! hahaha
oh no, they are hiding things from him coz they noe he is with Roxi- but wat…more "
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sMiLeY!! said:
" Write More!!! "
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♥Jess♥ said:
" Uh-oh.... I love this! And happy birthday! "
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Mindy said:
" COME ON!!!!! PLEASE WRITE MORE SOOOOON!!!!!! ;-} "
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Kim said:
" aaww. leave it on a cliffhanger why dont you.
at least roxi is a little happier now.. "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" Ooh! A mystery! "
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chapter 46 review
Medina said:
" Rachel, As always, this is awesome! i say do wat ever you want. You are the writer. But in my POV, i would like to read about how Logan feels....hope …more "
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chapter 46 review
Sophie said:
" NOOOO!! he has to find her.. but how? oh this is so sad :(
and YES Rach, post the chapter that is in his POV.. coz we never relli noe how he feel…more "
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chapter 46 review
Sarah said:
" post it!!!!!! that sounds awesome! :D "
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Ana Lucia said:
" port it!! love this story...=) "
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Abbee said:
" Yea, I"d like to hear his side! :) love ur story as usual. "
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ayundabhuwana said:
" I think it's ok. Can't wait for the next chapter! "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" OMG! That is just pure evil. I love where this is heading though! "
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chapter 47 review
Sophie said:
" yay! aww, i liked this chapter, coz it finally gives us an insight to Logan :)
good on ya Rach ;) "
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Mindy said:
" I am SO FREAKING GLAD you posted this chapter!! It seems like Destined is starting to wind down. I REALLY hope you make us ALL happy with what we kno…more "
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♥Jess♥ said:
" Love love love this, Rachel! Keep writing, this rocks! "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" I like his POV. "
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chapter 48 review
ayundabhuwana said:
" wow, i can't believe claudia's alive!! good for roxi! "
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chapter 48 review
Mindy said:
" Eeeeeppppp!!! love it Girly!!! ;-} "
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Medina said:
" AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA, they are alive!!!!YAY "
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Sophie said:
" ohmygod! they r alive! yayyyy :)
aww, this is relli good, n ow she isnt alone- they will help her :)
good on ya with that Rach ;) lol "
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chapter 48 review
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Ellen ♥ said:
" I am soooooo glad you didnt kill everybody off! "
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chapter 49 review
Mindy said:
" Love it Girly, as always! I can totally understand about family drama, so don't fret about complaints from this corner. Take YOUR story at YOUR own pa…more "
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chapter 50 review
Mindy said:
" Love it Girly!!! PLEASE get the next chapter up sooner than soon!!! ;-} "
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chapter 51 review
Ellen ♥ said:
" Awww. I thought it was Micha! Lol. "
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Mindy said:
" Amazing, as always! Just PLEASEPLEASEPLEASE don't let that darkness get out of controll!! Remember how I like mostly-happily-ever-afters???!!! ;-} "
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ayundabhuwana said:
" yay! and cute! "
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chapter 52 review
Ellen ♥ said:
" =O
I wonder what Claudia is keeping secret? "
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chapter 52 review
Mindy said:
" Hmmm...You do realize that now you HAVE to update, like, now. As soon as now as now can get. Sooner, even. Pwease? (Big Puppy Dog Eyes) "
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chapter 53 review
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chapter 53 review
Mindy said:
" WHAT!!!!!!! NO!!!!! PLEASEPLEASEPLEASE TELL ME THAT LOGAN DOES NOT DIE!!!!!!!!! IF YOU KILL HIM OFF, I SWEAR I WILL NEVER FINISH MY OWN STORY!!!! HOW …more "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" =O
Oh my God! "
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Lauren liked it
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Mindy said:
" Can you PLEASE get the next chapter up, like, NOW!!!!!!!!! ;-} "
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chapter 55 review
Mindy said:
" YAY!!! YOU LISTENED!!! Now that you wrote that, Logan and Roxi WILL have a happy ending. And, yes, there IS an implied threat in there somewhere... ;-…more "
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Aileen said:
" Aww!! I love it!! =D<3 "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" Awww!! "
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ayundabhuwana said:
" aw, what a cute chapter :) "
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*HaYlEy*WoOdLoNe rOcKz!!:))) said:
" OMFG LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!KEEP IT UP PWETTY PWEASE!!:)))) "
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chapter 56 review
Rebecka said:
" Luuv it "
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