Poetry - first date by Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ oıɔoɹ/rocio Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ pronounced row-see-oh♥

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a little bundle of some random poems i sometimes write. hope u like!



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chapter 1: first date

chapter 2: Pesadillas

chapter 3: Diamond Ring

chapter 4: Sé Bella Guatemala


first date
chapter 1   —   updated Aug 14, 2009   —   752 characters   —   16 people liked this writing   —   15 reviews of this writing
A/N: just a poem i came up with just now. i wrote it just for fun. :) any suggestions? please write!

the girl stood frozen
she had no idea what to say
he was so beautiful
standing there, so perfect in every way

she thought about her hair,
her shoes, her dress
they were all so wrong,
in so many ways

she wished she could be as perfect,
as flawless as him,
as beautiful as her first date
who she could feel was her soulmate

the boy stood frozen
she was completely beautiful
the way her eyes shined
so brightly in the moonlight

he said shall we go
and the girl said ok
and off they went
both nervous, in a secret way

and so they went
towards the moonlit night
full of brightly shining stars
onto their very first date
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RoSaDbAsSgUaRdAiNs said:
" wow,this is really good. and you said you couldn't write. :P good job "
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Naomi said:
" This is amazingly cute,
-D.N.V "
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Phoenix loves the Phantom of the Opera said:
" VERY cute! "
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RedPath ~Enna-girl~ said:
" I love it! "
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Music Lover ♥ Taylor Swift Fanatic ♥ HP Rox said:
" That is SO GOOD! "
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Mizla said:
" wow... very nice!! i hope u'll mine too :)

i love goodreads!! "
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HorrorChick said:
" RLLLY GOOD!!!! "
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Snowsong said:
" Really cool! I like how sometimes it rhymes and sometimes it doesn't. "
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Emily said:
" that was really good. you captured the feeling of nervousness on a first date. "
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MAGGIE=) said:
" this really really good!!! "
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Cara said:
" This was so cute and sweet. And bonus it made totally sense! "
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Leah said:
" good job, your a good poet. "
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Trixie said:
" AMAZING!
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" awesome good job rocio!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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Trixie said:
" AWESOME, I LOVE IT ^^ "
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