Life in D Minor - PROLOGUE by Sella

by Sella
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Jonah Kimel has a life that can't get much worse than it already is. He lives with abusive parents and uncaring siblings in a tiny apartment that can barely fit a few people, let alone seven. His parents don't have paying jobs, are are constantly borrowing money from the bank. His family is on the brink of losing their home and everything else they've ever known.

Casey Palmer is another teenager living in the gates of hell. At sixteen, she's already pregnant, anorexic, and kicked out of her mother's house. She refuses to tell anyone the horrifying story of how she got pregnant - even her caring dad doesn't have the liberty of knowing the secret. It's something she intends to take with her to the grave.

The two teens don't even know each other ... but that is about to change.

Suddenly, Jonah begins having nightmares of a little girl being tortured in a cage. At the same time, Casey starts to hear what she thinks is a ghost playing music in her dad's living room.

It only takes a simple guitar to make their horrible lives intersect.


**Author's Note: Wow. This is the first time I've attempted to write a realistic fiction novel; I've always just done fantasy. I've decided to try something new this time. I'm interested to see if it will go very far, lol. So, let's see how it goes! :)**



chapters

chapter 1: PROLOGUE

chapter 2: CHAPTER ONE

chapter 3: CHAPTER TWO

chapter 4: CHAPTER THREE

chapter 5: CHAPTER FOUR

chapter 6: CHAPTER FIVE

chapter 7: CHAPTER SIX

chapter 8: CHAPTER SEVEN

chapter 9: CHAPTER EIGHT

chapter 10: CHAPTER NINE

chapter 11: CHAPTER TEN

chapter 12: CHAPTER ELEVEN


PROLOGUE
chapter 1   —   updated May 11, 2009   —   4417 characters   —   306 people liked this writing   —   247 reviews of this writing

There is no light. A raging sea of cold darkness is everywhere. The world looks empty and miserable. A harsh, bitter, chilling feeling is in the air.

In the middle of the blackness, there is a girl. Her wide, huge gray eyes are gazing out into the darkness, clouded with pain. Her pale, sweaty, tiny hands are gripping the bars in front of her, the bars which go all around her and surround her in every direction. The girl's thin fingers cling to the frigid, rusty metal as though she is holding for her life.

The enclosed, minuscule place which the girl is trapped in looks like a jail cell, but it is much too small and bare to be one. It is more like a cage than anything else, except the bottom is simply dirt.

There is nothing in this enclosure, but for the girl. She is pressed up against one side of the square, her delicate, petite body almost one with the iron bars.

She appears to be no older than six years old. She is short, her figure young and undeveloped, her body yet to mature. Her hands are the size of two small cup bottoms, and her bare feet are no bigger than two bars of soap.

The features touching her face are soft and innocent. The dirty-blonde feathery strands that hang just below her chin are silky and light and pin-straight. A gentle trickle of freckles splashes across her cheeks in a golden line. Her lips are small and pouty.

The only thing that doesn't match the quiet sweetness of her face is the big, squashed potato nose that rests between her porcelain cheeks. It is a bit crooked and off-center.

There are a few more signs which show that she is not the perfect, untroubled, worriless china doll she seems to be at first. Her eyebrows are bothered, mushed together, her forehead creased with wrinkles. Her mouth is turned down with a distressed frown. Her complexion is pale, devoid of color, the roses drawn out of her cheeks. Her features are knitted tight with worry and stress - things too big for a six-year-old to handle.

She is wearing an expression of confusion and frustration. The emotion is displayed across her face in a childish, immature way, but the anguish shining in her eyes is worth an adult's lifetime of suffering.

The girl is terribly, unhealthily skinny. It is possible to see her little ribs through the flimsy fabric of her thin clothing. It looks like she hasn't eaten anything in months.

Her body is frail and weak - she looks less heavy than a feather, and most likely wouldn't be able to support one. She looks horrible.

The six-year-old's short flowery dress ruffles gently in the slight cold draft that blows through the room. Suddenly, her fingers tighten around the bars, her knuckles glowing white as she grips them hard. Then, her hands disconnect from the metal. She begins to pound on the iron furiously, passionately, desperately. A moroseful, hopeless, almost mocking clang rings through the air.

The girl tries once more, with renewed strength. She smacks her hands against the bars again and again, harder and harder. Her breathing becomes labored and ragged, uneven, panting. She hits with even more force, as if she is trying to get out, to escape - to make the bars break, to have them disappear.

Her fingers begin to bleed, red spilling onto white. But she does not stop.

She continues to pound, until, eventually, she realizes it is no use. Finally, she gives up and halts her beating. She slowly tears her bloody hands away from the bars. A moment later, her arms flail wildly, and she sinks to her knees, her forehead pushed onto the iron.

"Please," she whispers to nobody. Her voice is hoarse and croaky with disuse. "Please ...help ...me." It is a struggle for her to get each word out. The syllables are raspy and short of breath.

Nobody listens. No one is around to hear. She is alone.

Moisture fills her eyes.

"No," she cries with devastation. "Someone! Help!" Her voice has started to rise with hysteria and fear.

She smashes her head against the bars. The next words come out as a bloodcurdling scream.

"HELP ME!"

Sobs start to wrack her body.

It is then that the blackness begins to get stronger, bigger, thicker. It spreads from corner to corner, covering up any hints of sight.

Soon it has swallowed the girl whole.

And all that is left are the bars- and the dark.


I wake up with tears streaming down my face.

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Michelle said:
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" omigodddd SELLAAAAA!!! i was like not even BREATHING that entire time!! you must write more or DIEEEE!! >< oh yes, i love it btw. lol "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" OH MY GOSH!!! This is amazing!!! Very descriptive, I cant wait to read more!!!!! "
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Kelsey said:
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" ...omg. WOW. THIS IS AMAZING!!! ur best so far!!!! "
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Marley said:
" OMG...SELLA, I saw realistic fiction and wanted to pounce on you, nobody ever writes Realistic fic. on here! I love it! You..write more..NOW! And tell...more "
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That was amazing!!!!!! The detail, the discription! Even before i read the story, the discription had me hooked! I could picture...more "
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" It was alright but, despite the desprateness of the situation, I found my eyes slipping down the paragraphs. It took a little too long to discribe th...more "
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Kenzie said:
" YES!! A NEW SELLA STORY!!!

I LOVE IT!!! How come you've never tried to write realistic fiction? You're REALLY good at it. :) "
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Shruti said:
" that was so sad!!omg!! "
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Jess said:
" YAY!!!!! A great start to your first (really???) realistic fic story!!! "
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~Clare~ said:
" WOOOOW! this is gonna be good, i can just tell! :D MORE! "
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Seth said:
" Okay, okay, okay. That was AMAZING! you have no idea. this is SOOOO good. i love you!!! this might be your best yet!!!! gahhh!!!! so much emotion!!!!!...more "
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Amy said:
" WOW!! This is realllly good!!!! .____. Can't wait until you write more! :) "
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Nikki said:
" AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!! "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Oh my god...so amazing and intense! "
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Roni said:
" Quite the attention grabber of a start, I'd say. :) Great job! "
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Dee said:
" Prologue
You are such a "powerful" writer. I am so impressed with the passion of your words. "
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Mackenzie said:
" omg, this is sooo amazing. keep writing :) "
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Drizzleherb said:
" Wow, Sella! That's really descriptive! It actually gives me chills! "
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Silver said:
" ...woah... that really does seem like a dream... good job! "
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Morgan said:
" how could you not love this!!! This is one of the most amazing things I've ever read!!! "
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" ok i didnt actually read this yet but it must be good considering that u only wrote 5 chapters and about 100 people like it already "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ said:
" OOOOO! I'm sobbing right now! Poor little girl! Awesome beginning though! "
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Ellen ♥ said:
" omigod Sella this is like amazing!!!
You must write more... its so amazingly good... Im almost crying =D "
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Margaret said:
" Wow. Can't wait to read more. :) Good job! "
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" great!!! only the nose thing kinda confused me "
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Anna said:
" Wow. Seriously. Wow. So descriptive! I really like this! "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Very sad yet very descriptive!! Great work Sella! This looks really cool! "
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Madelyn said:
" this is great! it almost made me cry! "
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Della said:
" I know you probably get this alot--judging by the 217 people who liked this as well--but...
THAT WAS AWESOME!!! OMGEEZ YOU HAVE YOU WRITE MORE!!!...more "
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Leah said:
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" Amazing!! "
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" wow sella!! omg!! this is amazing i love all the description and everything!! it was so sad as well, i rly felt for her :'( "
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" You're an amazing writer!!! "
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~Clare~ said:
" wow!! amazing! :D oooh, his dad is sooo mean :( "
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call me crazy and be done with it. said:
" this is SOO good!! They do swear alot and most books do but the f bomb took me by surprise. I feel bad for the main character! his dad and mom are so ...more "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" *dies* ahhhh SO AMAZING!!! wow it's sooo well-written!! which of course isn't a surprise coming from you :] but i mean, you're writing out of your ele...more "
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Carly said:
" Oh my gosh. Poor Jonah.... that was a compleatly amazing chapter! you are SUCH an amazing writer, i love this story and can't wait to read the next ch...more "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" awww poor jonah.... "
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" This is great!

You NEED to write more! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Wow!!! Realistic fiction, I think you've got that covered, it was absolutly amazing! Great job!!!!


p.s. I LOVE IT!!! "
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Amy said:
" I love it! Keep writing. :) "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Gah! So great (but not the fact that Jonah's dad is slapping him). One question: is Jonah's family Orthodox? or do they just speak Hebrew? "
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" I liked it a lot. :] Please keep writing. "
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Jess said:
" =)
This is VERY interesting. I still can't believe this is your first realistic fic...
it's just too good... "
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" Sella! :) This is amazing! BUT *cringe* i hate the f word :P not telling you to like not use it, just saying. thats the ONE thing i didn't like in the...more "
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Kenzie said:
" Awe, I feel so bad for your M.C. His parents are so mean. :( "
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" This was actually quite impressive; it is almost to the point where you need a professional editor to look over it.

However you need to pro...more "
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Dee said:
" Chapter 1
I remember when I was five and falling in love with a guitar. A beautiful Gibson. Nice writing. "
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" THIS IS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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" Man, that was deep, sad, and deppressing all at the same time, I loved it. "
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" wow, for an eight year old, this guy had been really dedicated. lol. arent you glad i finally got to reading it? "
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Acacia said:
" Oh, poor Jonah!! You most certainly definitely absolutely can write realistic fiction, m'dear. "
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Bookworm!!! said:
" Good. I was spellbound throughout the whole thing. Especially at the part when Jonah is playing the guitar. "
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Courtney said:
" Wow, I think I'm hooked! Haha, good job! Really awesome description! :) "
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Marley said:
" I can tell this story is going to break my heart several times. I think I'm going to keep track of ur write in '09 thread! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" I love David! He is sooooo sweet to Jonah! Thank goodness for that! Oh I can wait to read more! "
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ThatStalkerGirlBehindYouWhoIsAlsoACreeper said:
" AHHHHHHH! This is amazing beyond words!!! KEEP WRITING!!!!!!! By the way, do you play an instrument? "
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Domerin said:
" If social services ever had a purpose.

I enjoyed this. I liked how you made it so that the oldest sibling got whatever she wanted (typical...more "
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~Clare~ said:
" good! :D "
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Captain Rayana said:
" You. Must. write. more. now :D "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" awww, what did i ever do 2 u? nah, i'm kidding.

lol how did u know i was going 2 make a new email that had something 2 do with music_is_life ...more "
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Seth said:
" I really like this Sella! :) It is awesome! Please write more. Why are Davids always amazing in books? "
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Carly said:
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Drizzleherb said:
" Really imformative. I love David! "
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Dee said:
" Chapter 2

I am glad that you introduced David to the mix, as there is a lot of pent-up anger in that small apartment. "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ said:
" This is so freakin' amazing! Stella, you are stellar at writing! (no pun intended) keep going! "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Oh my god! Really good descriptions!! Really good book overall!! KEEP WRITING!! "
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Michelle said:
" wow, most of his family are so horrible! and he's eight? thats like scarred for life kinda thing! "
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Leah said:
" wow UR AMAZING, BUT THAT WAS REALLY LONG, I LOVE DAVIS TOOO! I love anyone with the name DAVID (thats my dads name) "
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Acacia said:
" Grr...I don't like Rachel already. "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" OMG IMA IS SO CRUEL!!!

and jackie is so nice!!!

(and, i h8 2 say this, sella, but 8-year-olds wouldn't think their life was meaningl...more "
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Kenzie said:
" Ugh! Ima is SO mean! How could she do that to her son?! "
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Carly said:
" That's so awesome Sella! Definetly worth the wait!
*sigh* it's so amazing, your such a great writer and that scene between ima and Jonah was inten...more "
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ThatStalkerGirlBehindYouWhoIsAlsoACreeper said:
" ~GASP GASP GASP!!!!~
~SOB SOB SOB!!!~ so sad!!!!!! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" Oh, Jackie's so nice! Keep writing, Sella! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" AWW Jackie is soooo sweet!!! Im hooked to this story, keep writing!!!! I love it!!! "
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Saved By Grace said:
" Awww. ^^ Well, I didn't like the first part. :/ But the second part was really cute. "
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Shruti said:
" Jackie is soooo AWESOME "
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Marley said:
" It seems a bit like he is looking back at his life, is he? It is very good. "
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ScreamSunshine said:
" Awww! This is amazing! "
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Domerin said:
" Not bad ... "
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call me crazy and be done with it. said:
" wow!!! i love this story!!! AWESOME characteration!!!!!amazing!!! i really feel for Jonah and actually hate Im and Adda and Rachel!!!it feels like I w...more "
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Sandy said:
" Good job! "
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~Clare~ said:
" its cute! he seems to talk and think really intelligently for a little boy though? Only once in a while though. anyway, can't wait to read more! "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" YAAY!! XD "
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Jess said:
" awww... thats cute.
You do such a nice job making us not like Ima and like Jackie. I do agree though, that an eight year old would not call his ...more "
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Dee said:
" Chapter 3
Interesting plot twists "
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♫♪ Olivia ♪♫ said:
" when is casey coming in? "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ said:
" Coolio! I love it! "
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Estherthegirlthatdoesn'thavesomethingnexttohername said:
" awssssommmmeeee! "
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Oceanwaves said:
" How cute! He's still a little boy at heart! "
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Michelle said:
" XD nice. but what happens when he comes home?

youre really good at protraying the innocence of a kid, btw. amazing writing! "
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Napoda said:
" wow, this is really good!
"
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Acacia said:
" Don't worry, Jonah. I'll beat up Ima for you. *grumble grumble* "
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Lenalee said:
" SO CUTE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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Abbee said:
" omigosh. poor jonah. that srsly brought tears 2 my eyes. "
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Drizzleherb said:
" I can't believe Abba! At first I was surprised. Now, well..... "
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ThatStalkerGirlBehindYouWhoIsAlsoACreeper said:
" :) :) :) :) :) "
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ScreamSunshine said:
" Oh my god! This is so good! I love it! Keep writing! "
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Dee said:
" Chapter 4
I have a lot of questions, but I will hold off until I read the next chapter. "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Methinks he's going to get caught! "
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Carly said:
" love it sella!! cant wait for the next chappie <3 "
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Silver said:
" aww... "
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Saved By Grace said:
" It's so amazing! But sad at the same time. "
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Kenzie said:
" And just when you'd think things couldn't get any worse! His father is ... is ... a DIRTY WORD!! There, I said it!

I love where this story is...more "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" I love David!!! He is like one of my favorite characters besides Jackie and Jonah!!!!!!!! But gosh, I feel soooo sorry for Jonah cuz Ima is sooo soooo...more "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" awww i feel so bad for jonah. his parents are so awful! :( i'm glad he has jackie though ... and the guitar :D "
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Jess said:
" what the____ kind of parents does he have??? what kind of parent says that??? "
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~Clare~ said:
" omg! what his mom did was horrible! :*( I feel so bad for him!!! good chapter thou! "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" DAVID AND JACKIE R SO NICE!!!

AND I H8 HIS IMA!!! "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ said:
" AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Really good. Love every word of it! Keep writing. :D "
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Michelle said:
" omg this is so amazing! XD "
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Acacia said:
" I love Jonah!!! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" Wow. Extremly surprising chapter! "
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Carly said:
" Oh My God...

That was...intense, I really can't discribe the amazing detail and well developed characters you created...it's jus so realistic...more "
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Saved By Grace said:
" So much drama and stuff. ... :(
But so good! "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Le gasp! "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" omg wow...i wonder...y did ima leave? "
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ThatStalkerGirlBehindYouWhoIsAlsoACreeper said:
" oooooooh, ouch "
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Kenzie said:
" Finally out of his little kid years. :D I kind of feel bad for Ima in this chapter. What's up with her? "
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~Clare~ said:
" good! more please ;) "
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call me crazy and be done with it. said:
" There's that f bomb again... *winks* this is FABULOUS!! Amazing, really amazing!! You have beyond talent: you were BORN to write. If I could bring out...more "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" WOW!!!!!! Where the heck did Ima go? I have an idea. . .

I LOVE it!!!!!!! Great job, and I can't wait to read the next chapter!!!!! "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ said:
" SELLA, THIS IS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" gaahh omg this is so depressing but IT'S SO AMAZING!!! WRITE MORE "
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Marley said:
" MORE! OhMyGosh, Sella, you literally had me eating up this entire chapter. I'm glad I started reading writing on here, because you are amazing! *waits...more "
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Domerin said:
" Okay, this is interesting to no end, but a couple of remarks:

'I'm instantly translating it into English in my head as I hear it.'

...more "
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Alexis said:
" wow this is incredible! keep writing this. "
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ScreamSunshine said:
" This sooooooooo AMAZING, Sella! I love it! "
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♫♪ Olivia ♪♫ said:
" ahh!!!! i so LOVE it!!!
when's casey coming in??? "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Harsh. Did their mom go to rehab or something? Quite odd...Keep writing!! "
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Michelle said:
" well, who said she didnt go to and AA meetings? lol "
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Ella liked it
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♫Krista♫ said:
" OHMYGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! First Ima then the guitar is gone??? No way it cant be!!!! Gah! I have an idea who has it, but stil...more "
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Sisi the Magical Flute Player! said:
" NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! The guitar CAN'T be gone!!! Sad, very sad...I liked it when Jonah's Ima came out. I hated her beofre but now I really pity her. Oh an...more "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ liked it
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Drizzleherb said:
" Oh no! Did someone buy it? And I can't believe what happened with Ima and Abba! "
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Shruti liked it
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call me crazy and be done with it. said:
" NOOOO!!!!! his guitar is gone?!?!?! Who took it?! gagh!!!!!! "
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ScreamSunshine said:
" Oh my god. That chapter is so sad in so many ways! I love the story, though! Keep going. "
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Carly said:
" SELLA!!! Your back! Yaay!! This chapter was amazing, breath taking! Your such an amazing writer! Where is the guitar?!?!?! ahhh!!!!!!! The suspense is...more "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" noooo! not the guitar! D: "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Oh wow. I wish she knew she beat Jonah! Ugghhh!!!! Poor Ima! "
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Jess liked it
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Captain Rayana said:
" Le gasp! "
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~Clare~ said:
" O.O holy s***!!! "
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Michelle said:
" i had a really good idea for a comment, but i forgot it...

and btw: omg the guitar is gone?! "
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Kenzie said:
" What?! Gone?!!! "
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Acacia said:
" I DEMAND THAT WHOEVER TOOK THE GUITAR GIVE IT BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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♫Huneeya♥ said:
" whoa
whoa
i feel so sorry for Ima..or Yael..
and jonah
poor jonah
its strange rly, caz i was thinking that, i was thiking wha...more "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Yay Casey, is finally here!
And wow, awesome! I mean it so sucks for Casey, but it's greatly written! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" OMG, poor Casey! "
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Ella liked it
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" awesome! i love the second perspective :D "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ said:
" Oh, poor Casey! This is awesome! You better keep writing! "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Oh my gosh!!! That's terrible. Poor guitar!! "
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Jess said:
" wait... why can't she talk? "
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Captain Rayana said:
" AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH "
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Shruti liked it
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Morgan said:
" wow. this is one of the best thing i've ever read. don't doubt yourself at all. and please, don't ever stop writing!!!i cried so much, this is real st...more "
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~Clare~ said:
" : O "
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Michelle said:
" and now she's going to buy the one in the store, no? "
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Estherthegirlthatdoesn'thavesomethingnexttohername said:
" awwww is that the other guitar??? "
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Kenzie said:
" Did her mom do that? "
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Acacia said:
" And now she buys Jonah's guitar... "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Awww!!!!!! That sucks for Casey!!!!!!! No voice, I would go insane! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" Wow, Casey! I have no idea what I would do if I were in her shoes! "
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Ella liked it
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" awww that's sad that she doesn't have a voice :( "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ said:
" Sella, I love how your so passionate about writing. Your descriptive words suck me in, and won't let me out! Hurry up and write! "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Oh tis terrible. Poor Casey!! Keep writing! "
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Jess liked it
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Captain Rayana said:
" Le gasp! "
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Shruti liked it
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~Clare~ said:
" saddd :*( "
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Michelle said:
" le gasp!!

haha, this girl sounds kinda like me... "
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Carly said:
" awww...poor casey "
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Estherthegirlthatdoesn'thavesomethingnexttohername said:
" WOW!!! "
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Kenzie said:
" So she bought his guitar then. Awe. :'( "
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Acacia said:
" Awwww!!! What happened to Casey?? "
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♫Huneeya♥ said:
" omg i feel so sorry for casey :( BUT OMG SHE BOUGHT JONAHS GUITAR!!! OMG!!!!!! "
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chapter 10 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" OHMYGOSH!!!!!!!!! *freaks out* already getting kicked out!!!!! Where are they going to live????
Write more please!!!!!!! "
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Sarah said:
" I love it!!! "
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call me crazy and be done with it. said:
" *GASP*!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OH NO!!!!! poor Casey!!!! she's so tough though!!!! I think I would've bawled my eyes out personally but she really keeps it toge...more "
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ScreamSunshine liked it
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Drizzleherb said:
" Poor Jonah! What's he going to do without the guitar! "
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Ella liked it
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♫♪ Olivia ♪♫ said:
" CANT wait til the the next chapter!!!
it's absolutely amazing. "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" oh noooo!!! so sad ... but such amazing new chapters!!! can't wait for more! :D "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ said:
" This is ah-mazing! I really like it! Sella, you HAVE to keep going! Or I will dieeee!!!! "
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Oceanwaves said:
" Oh no! What are they gonna do? I can't wait till he finds Casey! *gasp* What if they're neighbors??? "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" I'd comment, but I wouldn't be able to describe what I'm thinking half-properly...but it was so much more than amazing!!!!!!!!! "
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Hasna said:
" I Love it. write more please. "
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Jess liked it
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Captain Rayana said:
" Oh noez! "
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Shruti liked it
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Madelyn said:
" PLEASE write more! this is awesome! "
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~Clare~ said:
" whoooa! gah, i need moreee! one note though, u should title the chapter with who is telling it or something maybe... "
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Michelle said:
" its been a week already?
omg he was so mean to jackie! its not her fault the guitar got sold.
its hard to believe that he's still so innoce...more "
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Carly said:
" oh no...sella this is amazing "
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Estherthegirlthatdoesn'thavesomethingnexttohername said:
" great!!!!!!!!!!! youve got to write more nowz!!!!!! "
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Kenzie said:
" Of course they are. Abba's such a horrible role model. GAH. "
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Domerin said:
" This is becoming very interesting. "
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Lauren liked it
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Marley said:
" OH! Jeez Sella, you enjoy making me depressed. Readitall! Brilliant my dear! <3 "
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Cashew Chick!! WHAT!! said:
" WOW!!!! This is for all the chapters :) "
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I'amber liked it
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Alexis liked it
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Victoria liked it
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Apoorva said:
" THIS IS AMAZING!!!
I mean, Your main characters are so real, they're practically walking off the page...;)
I was crying though half of it, it'...more "
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Cassi said:
" oh no, write more! that's not the end, right? "
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Acacia liked it
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♫Huneeya♥ said:
" omigosh
thats so sad
both the kicked out part AND the jackie part :'( "
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Drizzleherb said:
" Aw!!!! Rachel does care! That's so sweet! "
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Estherthegirlthatdoesn'thavesomethingnexttohername said:
" awww finally you wrote more!!! "
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Hasna said:
" whoa!!!! please keep posting more chapters! "
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Shruti liked it
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" THANK U!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *hug* "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" awww!!! :'( she DOES care ...
lol AMAZING CHAPTERRR!!! :D :D "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" OMGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Great job, wonderful chapter, I mean not as in oo what a happy book this is, wonderful, but wonderful as in wonderfully written...more "
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Cashew Chick!! WHAT!! liked it
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Acacia liked it
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Oceanwaves said:
" Awww!! Tis so cute and awesome!! I love you now rachel!! But why didn't youz tell someone? D: "
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ScreamSunshine said:
" AWH! D:
That's so sad. But it's really sweet that his sister cared. :)

I love it, Sella! It's amazing! "
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Apoorva said:
" sweeeeet! "
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Domerin said:
" Not bad, and the story is engaging for certain. One of your main problems is encumbersome redundancy. Redundancy is necessary to be both comprehensi...more "
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Napoda liked it
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Madelyn said:
" oh, goody. I knew she couldn't be that heartless! "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Awww, how sweet that Rachel actually cares. "
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call me crazy and be done with it. said:
" WHAT?! Rachel CARED?!?! Holy Hannah!! "
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Kenzie said:
" Awe, I was hoping you'd show her nice side. :D I wonder if she'll realize the pages are missing and go looking for them later.... "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ said:
" AHHHHHHHHHH! THIS IS FRICKIN' AH-MAZING!!!!! "
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♫Huneeya♥ said:
" wow
that is so freakin' touching and emotional
rachel actually cared, she actually cared
wow "
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~Clare~ said:
" omg! Sad :( please write more! "
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ScreamSunshine said:
" D: D: D: D: D: D:
That's so saaaaad!
What's with David. God, I want to punch him in the face! :@ "
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Sarah liked it
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Oceanwaves said:
" Awww!! David is such a jerk now!! He could at least give them some money or something! Don't worry Jonahm tis okay. "
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Napoda said:
" omg, so sad!!! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" OMG, so sad!!! What's wrong with David? What changed him? I mean, Rebeka gets nicer and David becomes impassive? "
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Estherthegirlthatdoesn'thavesomethingnexttohername said:
" ahhhhhhhhhh "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" OMGOD!!!!!!!! I dunno why, but in this chapter I actually liked Rachel better! I liked her more than David!!!! That's not right! What happened to Davi...more "
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Kenzie said:
" HOLY CRAPTOIDS!! How can he just let them walk away? I get why Rachel did, she wasn't always the most caring and all. But DAVID?!! That's messed up. "
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Cassi said:
" ohmygod how could david do that??? that is so terrible! what happens? "
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Acacia said:
" Stupid David. What's wrong with him?! "
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~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~ liked it
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Madelyn said:
" SAD! "
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Ella liked it
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" ohh this is sooo sad :( !!! it's sad that their own siblings won't take care of them – WHAT POOPY HEADS!!! "
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Domerin said:
" This is best written chapter yet. I don't have time to nitpick and there are no obvous problems, so ou'll have to do with another "It was good."...more "
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Hasna said:
" Jeez, how could David do that!? Thats not right at all! "
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" OH NO!! WHAT HAPPENED 2 DAVID??!! "
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call me crazy and be done with it. said:
" evil siblings.... "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Le gasp! "
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Abby said:
" wow really amazing! "
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Shruti said:
" David...that was DAVID!?!?!?!? "
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Jessika said:
" That was sooo sad! I wanted to cry for everyone! Rachel is more nicer, David.. freakin David CHANGED!!! AHHH! WHAT HAPPENED!!! I still hate Abba and I...more "
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Cashew Chick!! WHAT!! said:
" OMG!!!! I love this!!!! "
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♫♪ Olivia ♪♫ said:
" Oh no! Why did David DO that?!?!? "
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Alexis liked it
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♫Huneeya♥ said:
" :'( thats rly rly sad
david is a JERK
i like rachel so much better now
r u going 2 post more chapters? "
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Yiffee said:
" WOW! I think that I am in love with it, write MORE! "
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