chapter 1 review
Michelle
said:
"
omg!! thats so amazing; i was practically crying! and you said you were wondering how this would turn out...
"
chapter 1 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
omigodddd SELLAAAAA!!! i was like not even BREATHING that entire time!! you must write more or DIEEEE!! >< oh yes, i love it btw. lol
"
chapter 1 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
OH MY GOSH!!! This is amazing!!! Very descriptive, I cant wait to read more!!!!!
"
chapter 1 review
Kelsey
said:
"
Wow. Simply astonishing.
"
chapter 1 review
♥ Rachel♥
said:
"
...omg. WOW. THIS IS AMAZING!!! ur best so far!!!!
"
chapter 1 review
Marley
said:
"
OMG...SELLA, I saw realistic fiction and wanted to pounce on you, nobody ever writes Realistic fic. on here! I love it! You..write more..NOW! And tell
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"
chapter 1 review
Carly
said:
"
O_O
O.M.G.
That was amazing!!!!!! The detail, the discription! Even before i read the story, the discription had me hooked! I could picture
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"
chapter 1 review
Domerin
said:
"
It was alright but, despite the desprateness of the situation, I found my eyes slipping down the paragraphs. It took a little too long to discribe th
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"
chapter 1 review
Kenzie
said:
"
YES!! A NEW SELLA STORY!!!
I LOVE IT!!! How come you've never tried to write realistic fiction? You're REALLY good at it. :)
"
chapter 1 review
Shruti
said:
"
that was so sad!!omg!!
"
chapter 1 review
Jess
said:
"
YAY!!!!! A great start to your first (really???) realistic fic story!!!
"
chapter 1 review
~Clare~
said:
"
WOOOOW! this is gonna be good, i can just tell! :D MORE!
"
chapter 1 review
Ella
liked it
chapter 1 review
Seth
said:
"
Okay, okay, okay. That was AMAZING! you have no idea. this is SOOOO good. i love you!!! this might be your best yet!!!! gahhh!!!! so much emotion!!!!!
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"
chapter 1 review
Amy
said:
"
WOW!! This is realllly good!!!! .____. Can't wait until you write more! :)
"
chapter 1 review
Nikki
said:
"
AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!
"
chapter 1 review
Captain Rayana
said:
"
Oh my god...so amazing and intense!
"
chapter 1 review
Roni
said:
"
Quite the attention grabber of a start, I'd say. :) Great job!
"
chapter 1 review
Dee
said:
"
Prologue
You are such a "powerful" writer. I am so impressed with the passion of your words.
"
chapter 1 review
Mackenzie
said:
"
omg, this is sooo amazing. keep writing :)
"
chapter 1 review
Drizzleherb
said:
"
Wow, Sella! That's really descriptive! It actually gives me chills!
"
chapter 1 review
Silver
said:
"
...woah... that really does seem like a dream... good job!
"
chapter 1 review
Morgan
said:
"
how could you not love this!!! This is one of the most amazing things I've ever read!!!
"
chapter 1 review
Ellen ♥
said:
"
omigod Sella this is like amazing!!!
You must write more... its so amazingly good... Im almost crying =D
"
chapter 1 review
Margaret
said:
"
Wow. Can't wait to read more. :) Good job!
"
chapter 1 review
Alexis
liked it
chapter 1 review
Anna
said:
"
Wow. Seriously. Wow. So descriptive! I really like this!
"
chapter 1 review
Oceanwaves
said:
"
Very sad yet very descriptive!! Great work Sella! This looks really cool!
"
chapter 1 review
Madelyn
said:
"
this is great! it almost made me cry!
"
chapter 1 review
Della
said:
"
I know you probably get this alot--judging by the 217 people who liked this as well--but...
THAT WAS AWESOME!!! OMGEEZ YOU HAVE YOU WRITE MORE!!!
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"
chapter 1 review
Leah
said:
"
wow! that was sad but really good, you are an amazing writer!
"
chapter 1 review
Acacia
said:
"
Whoa. Just...whoa. Not much leaves me speechless. That left me speechless.
"
chapter 1 review
Diana
liked it
chapter 1 review
♫Huneeya♥
said:
"
wow sella!! omg!! this is amazing i love all the description and everything!! it was so sad as well, i rly felt for her :'(
"
chapter 1 review
Wendy
said:
"
You're an amazing writer!!!
"
chapter 1 review
Book3
liked it
chapter 1 review
Hope
liked it
chapter 2 review
~Clare~
said:
"
wow!! amazing! :D oooh, his dad is sooo mean :(
"
chapter 2 review
call me crazy and be done with it.
said:
"
this is SOO good!! They do swear alot and most books do but the f bomb took me by surprise. I feel bad for the main character! his dad and mom are so
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"
chapter 2 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
*dies* ahhhh SO AMAZING!!! wow it's sooo well-written!! which of course isn't a surprise coming from you :] but i mean, you're writing out of your ele
...more
"
chapter 2 review
Carly
said:
"
Oh my gosh. Poor Jonah.... that was a compleatly amazing chapter! you are SUCH an amazing writer, i love this story and can't wait to read the next ch
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"
chapter 2 review
♥ Rachel♥
said:
"
awww poor jonah....
"
chapter 2 review
ScreamSunshine
said:
"
This is great!
You NEED to write more!
"
chapter 2 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
Wow!!! Realistic fiction, I think you've got that covered, it was absolutly amazing! Great job!!!!
p.s. I LOVE IT!!!
"
chapter 2 review
Amy
said:
"
I love it! Keep writing. :)
"
chapter 2 review
Captain Rayana
said:
"
Gah! So great (but not the fact that Jonah's dad is slapping him). One question: is Jonah's family Orthodox? or do they just speak Hebrew?
"
chapter 2 review
Halli
said:
"
I liked it a lot. :] Please keep writing.
"
chapter 2 review
Jess
said:
"
=)
This is VERY interesting. I still can't believe this is your first realistic fic...
it's just too good...
"
chapter 2 review
Seth
said:
"
Sella! :) This is amazing! BUT *cringe* i hate the f word :P not telling you to like not use it, just saying. thats the ONE thing i didn't like in the
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"
chapter 2 review
Kenzie
said:
"
Awe, I feel so bad for your M.C. His parents are so mean. :(
"
chapter 2 review
♫♪ Olivia ♪♫
said:
"
this is so good! i want to read more!
"
chapter 2 review
Marley
said:
"
I wanna know more!!! First, what language is that. OMG, I wanna know MORE!
"
chapter 2 review
Domerin
said:
"
This was actually quite impressive; it is almost to the point where you need a professional editor to look over it.
However you need to pro
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"
chapter 2 review
Dee
said:
"
Chapter 1
I remember when I was five and falling in love with a guitar. A beautiful Gibson. Nice writing.
"
chapter 2 review
Shruti
liked it
chapter 2 review
Drizzleherb
said:
"
OMG, just awesome! Abba is SO MEAN!
"
chapter 2 review
Gabichelle
said:
"
Wow! That's really really good!!
"
chapter 2 review
chris
said:
"
Man, that was deep, sad, and deppressing all at the same time, I loved it.
"
chapter 2 review
Tia
liked it
chapter 2 review
Ella
liked it
chapter 2 review
Oceanwaves
said:
"
Really good!! Keep going!!!! Poor Jonah!
"
chapter 2 review
Michelle
said:
"
wow, for an eight year old, this guy had been really dedicated. lol. arent you glad i finally got to reading it?
"
chapter 2 review
Napoda
said:
"
wow, this is amazing!!! i love it.
"
chapter 2 review
Acacia
said:
"
Oh, poor Jonah!! You most certainly definitely absolutely can write realistic fiction, m'dear.
"
chapter 2 review
Bookworm!!!
said:
"
Good. I was spellbound throughout the whole thing. Especially at the part when Jonah is playing the guitar.
"
chapter 2 review
Courtney
said:
"
Wow, I think I'm hooked! Haha, good job! Really awesome description! :)
"
chapter 3 review
Marley
said:
"
I can tell this story is going to break my heart several times. I think I'm going to keep track of ur write in '09 thread!
"
chapter 3 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
I love David! He is sooooo sweet to Jonah! Thank goodness for that! Oh I can wait to read more!
"
chapter 3 review
Domerin
said:
"
If social services ever had a purpose.
I enjoyed this. I liked how you made it so that the oldest sibling got whatever she wanted (typical
...more
"
chapter 3 review
~Clare~
said:
"
good! :D
"
chapter 3 review
Captain Rayana
said:
"
You. Must. write. more. now :D
"
chapter 3 review
♥ Rachel♥
said:
"
awww, what did i ever do 2 u? nah, i'm kidding.
lol how did u know i was going 2 make a new email that had something 2 do with music_is_life
...more
"
chapter 3 review
Seth
said:
"
I really like this Sella! :) It is awesome! Please write more. Why are Davids always amazing in books?
"
chapter 3 review
Jess
liked it
chapter 3 review
Carly
said:
"
this is awesome! Sella your such an amazing writer and sorry i didnt comment earlier! this is amazing and i really love Rabeka's insight to how Jonah
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"
chapter 3 review
Shruti
liked it
chapter 3 review
Ella
liked it
chapter 3 review
Drizzleherb
said:
"
Really imformative. I love David!
"
chapter 3 review
Dee
said:
"
Chapter 2
I am glad that you introduced David to the mix, as there is a lot of pent-up anger in that small apartment.
"
chapter 3 review
Oceanwaves
said:
"
Oh my god! Really good descriptions!! Really good book overall!! KEEP WRITING!!
"
chapter 3 review
Michelle
said:
"
wow, most of his family are so horrible! and he's eight? thats like scarred for life kinda thing!
"
chapter 3 review
Leah
said:
"
wow UR AMAZING, BUT THAT WAS REALLY LONG, I LOVE DAVIS TOOO! I love anyone with the name DAVID (thats my dads name)
"
chapter 3 review
Napoda
liked it
chapter 3 review
Acacia
said:
"
Grr...I don't like Rachel already.
"
chapter 4 review
♥ Rachel♥
said:
"
OMG IMA IS SO CRUEL!!!
and jackie is so nice!!!
(and, i h8 2 say this, sella, but 8-year-olds wouldn't think their life was meaningl
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"
chapter 4 review
Kenzie
said:
"
Ugh! Ima is SO mean! How could she do that to her son?!
"
chapter 4 review
Carly
said:
"
That's so awesome Sella! Definetly worth the wait!
*sigh* it's so amazing, your such a great writer and that scene between ima and Jonah was inten
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"
chapter 4 review
Drizzleherb
said:
"
Oh, Jackie's so nice! Keep writing, Sella!
"
chapter 4 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
AWW Jackie is soooo sweet!!! Im hooked to this story, keep writing!!!! I love it!!!
"
chapter 4 review
Saved By Grace
said:
"
Awww. ^^ Well, I didn't like the first part. :/ But the second part was really cute.
"
chapter 4 review
Shruti
said:
"
Jackie is soooo AWESOME
"
chapter 4 review
Marley
said:
"
It seems a bit like he is looking back at his life, is he? It is very good.
"
chapter 4 review
Domerin
said:
"
Not bad ...
"
chapter 4 review
call me crazy and be done with it.
said:
"
wow!!! i love this story!!! AWESOME characteration!!!!!amazing!!! i really feel for Jonah and actually hate Im and Adda and Rachel!!!it feels like I w
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"
chapter 4 review
Sandy
said:
"
Good job!
"
chapter 4 review
~Clare~
said:
"
its cute! he seems to talk and think really intelligently for a little boy though? Only once in a while though. anyway, can't wait to read more!
"
chapter 4 review
Jess
said:
"
awww... thats cute.
You do such a nice job making us not like Ima and like Jackie. I do agree though, that an eight year old would not call his
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"
chapter 4 review
Dee
said:
"
Chapter 3
Interesting plot twists
"
chapter 4 review
Silver
liked it
chapter 4 review
♫♪ Olivia ♪♫
said:
"
when is casey coming in?
"
chapter 4 review
Ella
liked it
chapter 4 review
Oceanwaves
said:
"
How cute! He's still a little boy at heart!
"
chapter 4 review
Michelle
said:
"
XD nice. but what happens when he comes home?
youre really good at protraying the innocence of a kid, btw. amazing writing!
"
chapter 4 review
Napoda
said:
"
wow, this is really good!
"
chapter 4 review
Acacia
said:
"
Don't worry, Jonah. I'll beat up Ima for you. *grumble grumble*
"
chapter 4 review
Lenalee
said:
"
SO CUTE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"
chapter 5 review
Abbee
said:
"
omigosh. poor jonah. that srsly brought tears 2 my eyes.
"
chapter 5 review
Drizzleherb
said:
"
I can't believe Abba! At first I was surprised. Now, well.....
"
chapter 5 review
ScreamSunshine
said:
"
Oh my god! This is so good! I love it! Keep writing!
"
chapter 5 review
Dee
said:
"
Chapter 4
I have a lot of questions, but I will hold off until I read the next chapter.
"
chapter 5 review
Captain Rayana
said:
"
Methinks he's going to get caught!
"
chapter 5 review
Carly
said:
"
love it sella!! cant wait for the next chappie <3
"
chapter 5 review
Silver
said:
"
aww...
"
chapter 5 review
Saved By Grace
said:
"
It's so amazing! But sad at the same time.
"
chapter 5 review
Kenzie
said:
"
And just when you'd think things couldn't get any worse! His father is ... is ... a DIRTY WORD!! There, I said it!
I love where this story is
...more
"
chapter 5 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
I love David!!! He is like one of my favorite characters besides Jackie and Jonah!!!!!!!! But gosh, I feel soooo sorry for Jonah cuz Ima is sooo soooo
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"
chapter 5 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
awww i feel so bad for jonah. his parents are so awful! :( i'm glad he has jackie though ... and the guitar :D
"
chapter 5 review
Shruti
liked it
chapter 5 review
Jess
said:
"
what the____ kind of parents does he have??? what kind of parent says that???
"
chapter 5 review
~Clare~
said:
"
omg! what his mom did was horrible! :*( I feel so bad for him!!! good chapter thou!
"
chapter 5 review
♥ Rachel♥
said:
"
DAVID AND JACKIE R SO NICE!!!
AND I H8 HIS IMA!!!
"
chapter 5 review
Ella
liked it
chapter 5 review
Oceanwaves
said:
"
Really good. Love every word of it! Keep writing. :D
"
chapter 5 review
Michelle
said:
"
omg this is so amazing! XD
"
chapter 5 review
Acacia
said:
"
I love Jonah!!!
"
chapter 6 review
Drizzleherb
said:
"
Wow. Extremly surprising chapter!
"
chapter 6 review
Carly
said:
"
Oh My God...
That was...intense, I really can't discribe the amazing detail and well developed characters you created...it's jus so realistic
...more
"
chapter 6 review
Saved By Grace
said:
"
So much drama and stuff. ... :(
But so good!
"
chapter 6 review
Ella
liked it
chapter 6 review
♥ Rachel♥
said:
"
omg wow...i wonder...y did ima leave?
"
chapter 6 review
Kenzie
said:
"
Finally out of his little kid years. :D I kind of feel bad for Ima in this chapter. What's up with her?
"
chapter 6 review
~Clare~
said:
"
good! more please ;)
"
chapter 6 review
call me crazy and be done with it.
said:
"
There's that f bomb again... *winks* this is FABULOUS!! Amazing, really amazing!! You have beyond talent: you were BORN to write. If I could bring out
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"
chapter 6 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
WOW!!!!!! Where the heck did Ima go? I have an idea. . .
I LOVE it!!!!!!! Great job, and I can't wait to read the next chapter!!!!!
"
chapter 6 review
Sarah
liked it
chapter 6 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
gaahh omg this is so depressing but IT'S SO AMAZING!!! WRITE MORE
"
chapter 6 review
Jess
liked it
chapter 6 review
Shruti
liked it
chapter 6 review
Marley
said:
"
MORE! OhMyGosh, Sella, you literally had me eating up this entire chapter. I'm glad I started reading writing on here, because you are amazing! *waits
...more
"
chapter 6 review
Domerin
said:
"
Okay, this is interesting to no end, but a couple of remarks:
'I'm instantly translating it into English in my head as I hear it.'
...more
"
chapter 6 review
Alexis
said:
"
wow this is incredible! keep writing this.
"
chapter 6 review
ScreamSunshine
said:
"
This sooooooooo AMAZING, Sella! I love it!
"
chapter 6 review
♫♪ Olivia ♪♫
said:
"
ahh!!!! i so LOVE it!!!
when's casey coming in???
"
chapter 6 review
Oceanwaves
said:
"
Harsh. Did their mom go to rehab or something? Quite odd...Keep writing!!
"
chapter 6 review
Michelle
said:
"
well, who said she didnt go to and AA meetings? lol
"
chapter 6 review
Acacia
liked it
chapter 7 review
Ella
liked it
chapter 7 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
OHMYGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! First Ima then the guitar is gone??? No way it cant be!!!! Gah! I have an idea who has it, but stil
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"
chapter 7 review
Sisi the Magical Flute Player!
said:
"
NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! The guitar CAN'T be gone!!! Sad, very sad...I liked it when Jonah's Ima came out. I hated her beofre but now I really pity her. Oh an
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"
chapter 7 review
Drizzleherb
said:
"
Oh no! Did someone buy it? And I can't believe what happened with Ima and Abba!
"
chapter 7 review
Shruti
liked it
chapter 7 review
ScreamSunshine
said:
"
Oh my god. That chapter is so sad in so many ways! I love the story, though! Keep going.
"
chapter 7 review
Carly
said:
"
SELLA!!! Your back! Yaay!! This chapter was amazing, breath taking! Your such an amazing writer! Where is the guitar?!?!?! ahhh!!!!!!! The suspense is
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"
chapter 7 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
noooo! not the guitar! D:
"
chapter 7 review
Oceanwaves
said:
"
Oh wow. I wish she knew she beat Jonah! Ugghhh!!!! Poor Ima!
"
chapter 7 review
Jess
liked it
chapter 7 review
~Clare~
said:
"
O.O holy s***!!!
"
chapter 7 review
Michelle
said:
"
i had a really good idea for a comment, but i forgot it...
and btw: omg the guitar is gone?!
"
chapter 7 review
Kenzie
said:
"
What?! Gone?!!!
"
chapter 7 review
Acacia
said:
"
I DEMAND THAT WHOEVER TOOK THE GUITAR GIVE IT BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
"
chapter 7 review
♫Huneeya♥
said:
"
whoa
whoa
i feel so sorry for Ima..or Yael..
and jonah
poor jonah
its strange rly, caz i was thinking that, i was thiking wha
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"
chapter 8 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
Yay Casey, is finally here!
And wow, awesome! I mean it so sucks for Casey, but it's greatly written!
"
chapter 8 review
Drizzleherb
said:
"
OMG, poor Casey!
"
chapter 8 review
Ella
liked it
chapter 8 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
awesome! i love the second perspective :D
"
chapter 8 review
Oceanwaves
said:
"
Oh my gosh!!! That's terrible. Poor guitar!!
"
chapter 8 review
Jess
said:
"
wait... why can't she talk?
"
chapter 8 review
Shruti
liked it
chapter 8 review
Morgan
said:
"
wow. this is one of the best thing i've ever read. don't doubt yourself at all. and please, don't ever stop writing!!!i cried so much, this is real st
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"
chapter 8 review
~Clare~
said:
"
: O
"
chapter 8 review
Michelle
said:
"
and now she's going to buy the one in the store, no?
"
chapter 8 review
Kenzie
said:
"
Did her mom do that?
"
chapter 8 review
Acacia
said:
"
And now she buys Jonah's guitar...
"
chapter 9 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
Awww!!!!!! That sucks for Casey!!!!!!! No voice, I would go insane!
"
chapter 9 review
Drizzleherb
said:
"
Wow, Casey! I have no idea what I would do if I were in her shoes!
"
chapter 9 review
Ella
liked it
chapter 9 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
awww that's sad that she doesn't have a voice :(
"
chapter 9 review
~Maia~The Jesus Freak~Lover of Books~
said:
"
Sella, I love how your so passionate about writing. Your descriptive words suck me in, and won't let me out! Hurry up and write!
"
chapter 9 review
Oceanwaves
said:
"
Oh tis terrible. Poor Casey!! Keep writing!
"
chapter 9 review
Jess
liked it
chapter 9 review
Shruti
liked it
chapter 9 review
~Clare~
said:
"
saddd :*(
"
chapter 9 review
Michelle
said:
"
le gasp!!
haha, this girl sounds kinda like me...
"
chapter 9 review
Carly
said:
"
awww...poor casey
"
chapter 9 review
Kenzie
said:
"
So she bought his guitar then. Awe. :'(
"
chapter 9 review
Acacia
said:
"
Awwww!!! What happened to Casey??
"
chapter 9 review
♫Huneeya♥
said:
"
omg i feel so sorry for casey :( BUT OMG SHE BOUGHT JONAHS GUITAR!!! OMG!!!!!!
"
chapter 10 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
OHMYGOSH!!!!!!!!! *freaks out* already getting kicked out!!!!! Where are they going to live????
Write more please!!!!!!!
"
chapter 10 review
Sarah
said:
"
I love it!!!
"
chapter 10 review
call me crazy and be done with it.
said:
"
*GASP*!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OH NO!!!!! poor Casey!!!! she's so tough though!!!! I think I would've bawled my eyes out personally but she really keeps it toge
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"
chapter 10 review
Drizzleherb
said:
"
Poor Jonah! What's he going to do without the guitar!
"
chapter 10 review
Ella
liked it
chapter 10 review
♫♪ Olivia ♪♫
said:
"
CANT wait til the the next chapter!!!
it's absolutely amazing.
"
chapter 10 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
oh noooo!!! so sad ... but such amazing new chapters!!! can't wait for more! :D
"
chapter 10 review
Oceanwaves
said:
"
Oh no! What are they gonna do? I can't wait till he finds Casey! *gasp* What if they're neighbors???
"
chapter 10 review
♥ Rachel♥
said:
"
I'd comment, but I wouldn't be able to describe what I'm thinking half-properly...but it was so much more than amazing!!!!!!!!!
"
chapter 10 review
Hasna
said:
"
I Love it. write more please.
"
chapter 10 review
Jess
liked it
chapter 10 review
Shruti
liked it
chapter 10 review
Madelyn
said:
"
PLEASE write more! this is awesome!
"
chapter 10 review
~Clare~
said:
"
whoooa! gah, i need moreee! one note though, u should title the chapter with who is telling it or something maybe...
"
chapter 10 review
Michelle
said:
"
its been a week already?
omg he was so mean to jackie! its not her fault the guitar got sold.
its hard to believe that he's still so innoce
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"
chapter 10 review
Carly
said:
"
oh no...sella this is amazing
"
chapter 10 review
Kenzie
said:
"
Of course they are. Abba's such a horrible role model. GAH.
"
chapter 10 review
Domerin
said:
"
This is becoming very interesting.
"
chapter 10 review
Lauren
liked it
chapter 10 review
Marley
said:
"
OH! Jeez Sella, you enjoy making me depressed. Readitall! Brilliant my dear! <3
"
chapter 10 review
Alexis
liked it
chapter 10 review
Apoorva
said:
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THIS IS AMAZING!!!
I mean, Your main characters are so real, they're practically walking off the page...;)
I was crying though half of it, it'
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chapter 10 review
Cassi
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oh no, write more! that's not the end, right?
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Acacia
liked it
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♫Huneeya♥
said:
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omigosh
thats so sad
both the kicked out part AND the jackie part :'(
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chapter 11 review
Drizzleherb
said:
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Aw!!!! Rachel does care! That's so sweet!
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chapter 11 review
Hasna
said:
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whoa!!!! please keep posting more chapters!
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Shruti
liked it
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♥ Rachel♥
said:
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THANK U!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *hug*
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♥ Brigid ♥
said:
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awww!!! :'( she DOES care ...
lol AMAZING CHAPTERRR!!! :D :D
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chapter 11 review
♫Krista♫
said:
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OMGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Great job, wonderful chapter, I mean not as in oo what a happy book this is, wonderful, but wonderful as in wonderfully written
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Acacia
liked it
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Oceanwaves
said:
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Awww!! Tis so cute and awesome!! I love you now rachel!! But why didn't youz tell someone? D:
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ScreamSunshine
said:
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AWH! D:
That's so sad. But it's really sweet that his sister cared. :)
I love it, Sella! It's amazing!
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chapter 11 review
Apoorva
said:
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sweeeeet!
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chapter 11 review
Domerin
said:
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Not bad, and the story is engaging for certain. One of your main problems is encumbersome redundancy. Redundancy is necessary to be both comprehensi
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Napoda
liked it
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Madelyn
said:
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oh, goody. I knew she couldn't be that heartless!
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chapter 11 review
Captain Rayana
said:
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Awww, how sweet that Rachel actually cares.
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chapter 11 review
Kenzie
said:
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Awe, I was hoping you'd show her nice side. :D I wonder if she'll realize the pages are missing and go looking for them later....
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chapter 11 review
♫Huneeya♥
said:
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wow
that is so freakin' touching and emotional
rachel actually cared, she actually cared
wow
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chapter 12 review
~Clare~
said:
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omg! Sad :( please write more!
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chapter 12 review
ScreamSunshine
said:
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D: D: D: D: D: D:
That's so saaaaad!
What's with David. God, I want to punch him in the face! :@
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Sarah
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Oceanwaves
said:
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Awww!! David is such a jerk now!! He could at least give them some money or something! Don't worry Jonahm tis okay.
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chapter 12 review
Napoda
said:
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omg, so sad!!!
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chapter 12 review
Drizzleherb
said:
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OMG, so sad!!! What's wrong with David? What changed him? I mean, Rebeka gets nicer and David becomes impassive?
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chapter 12 review
♫Krista♫
said:
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OMGOD!!!!!!!! I dunno why, but in this chapter I actually liked Rachel better! I liked her more than David!!!! That's not right! What happened to Davi
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Kenzie
said:
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HOLY CRAPTOIDS!! How can he just let them walk away? I get why Rachel did, she wasn't always the most caring and all. But DAVID?!! That's messed up.
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chapter 12 review
Cassi
said:
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ohmygod how could david do that??? that is so terrible! what happens?
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chapter 12 review
Acacia
said:
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Stupid David. What's wrong with him?!
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chapter 12 review
Madelyn
said:
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SAD!
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chapter 12 review
Ella
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♥ Brigid ♥
said:
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ohh this is sooo sad :( !!! it's sad that their own siblings won't take care of them – WHAT POOPY HEADS!!!
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chapter 12 review
Domerin
said:
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This is best written chapter yet. I don't have time to nitpick and there are no obvous problems, so ou'll have to do with another "It was good."
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Hasna
said:
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Jeez, how could David do that!? Thats not right at all!
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chapter 12 review
♥ Rachel♥
said:
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OH NO!! WHAT HAPPENED 2 DAVID??!!
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chapter 12 review
Abby
said:
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wow really amazing!
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chapter 12 review
Shruti
said:
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David...that was DAVID!?!?!?!?
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chapter 12 review
Jessika
said:
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That was sooo sad! I wanted to cry for everyone! Rachel is more nicer, David.. freakin David CHANGED!!! AHHH! WHAT HAPPENED!!! I still hate Abba and I
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♫♪ Olivia ♪♫
said:
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Oh no! Why did David DO that?!?!?
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Alexis
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♫Huneeya♥
said:
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:'( thats rly rly sad
david is a JERK
i like rachel so much better now
r u going 2 post more chapters?
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chapter 12 review
Yiffee
said:
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WOW! I think that I am in love with it, write MORE!
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