Adventures of a Wayward Witch - Prologue: Ready or Not... by Holly
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I am Morgan McAllister. To most, the name means nothing. But to the few, the elite, it identifies me as a member of the most powerful magical family on earth. It tells them I am not to be trifled with, that I could kill them without so much as blinking an eye. It tells them that I was raised to fight, to survive. It tells them that my childhood was narrated by stories of the Roderick warlocks, instead of fairy tales. Hell, who needs them? My entire life is a fairy tale.
I was born to hate the Rodericks. And I did.
Until I met one.
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chapters
chapter 1:
Prologue: Ready or Not...
chapter 2:
Chapter One: Roderick Down
chapter 3:
Chapter Two: Winner, Winner, Chicken Dinner
chapter 4:
Chapter Three: Babysitting Gone Sour
chapter 5:
Chapter Four: Orpheus Merlin, All Grown Up
chapter 6:
Chapter Five: It's Heaven...Almost
chapter 7:
Chapter Six: Pants on Fire
chapter 8:
Chapter Seven: What the Cat Dragged In
chapter 10:
Chapter Nine: Sanity, Party of One
chapter 11:
Chapter Ten: The Not-So-Wonderful Wizard
chapter 13:
Chapter Twelve: Young and in Love...Again
chapter 14:
Chapter Thirteen: Happy Birthday to Me!
chapter 15:
Chapter Fourteen: My Very Own Goldilocks
chapter 16:
Chapter Fifteen: Rest in Peace, Little Squirrels
chapter 17:
Chapter Sixteen: The Truth Comes Out to Play
chapter 18:
Chapter Seventeen: Speed Bumps on Morgan Lane
chapter 19:
Chapter Eighteen: Once Upon a Big Mistake...
chapter 20:
Chapter Nineteen: Drug Dealing Witches
chapter 21:
Chapter Twenty: You're Killing Me, Roderick
chapter 22:
Chapter Twenty-One: What the Hell Am I Doing?
chapter 24:
Chapter Twenty-Three: Burn, Baby, Burn
chapter 25:
Chapter Twenty-Four: Wherefore Art Thou, Ryder?
chapter 27:
Chapter Twenty-Six: Get Your Umbrella Ready
chapter 28:
Chapter Twenty-Seven: One, Two, Three!
chapter 31:
Chapter Thirty: Closet Family
chapter 32:
Chapter Thirty-One: Momzilla Makes Nice
chapter 33:
Chapter Thirty-Two: Daddy Drops By
chapter 34:
Chapter Thirty-Three: Caught With Our Pants Down
Prologue: Ready or Not...
chapter 1
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I was ten years old when I realized there was evil in the world. Real evil, not that fairy-tale wicked stepmother crap. This evil could murder, burn, and destroy. It didn’t go away when you waved a magic wand. You didn’t wake up with true love’s first kiss. You didn’t wake up at all. You were dead and you stayed that way.
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“Morgan,” Grandma Marley said, clapping me on the shoulder. Her voice was soft, gentle. With anyone else’s grandma, that wouldn’t be a big deal. With Marley, it was unnatural. Frightening, even. She’d always been so gruff. “Get your sister and go hide upstairs. Someone’s in the house.”
I nodded and ran off, knowing better than to disobey Grandma Marley. Madison, my eight-year-old sister, was playing with her Barbies. She sat there, methodically dressing and undressing each of them. Their outfits matched perfectly, down to their tiny plastic shoes.
I grabbed her hand and tugged her along. “Come on,” I whispered, pulling her up the marble staircase. “Grandma said to hide.”
We ran into my bedroom, slithering under my double bed. We lay there on our stomachs, our little fingers intertwined. Madison’s palm was sweaty, but I was beyond caring.
A crash echoed up to us, accompanied by a shriek. It sounded like Marley, but it couldn’t have been her. My grandmother didn’t scream. Not even when she saw that giant, hairy spider in the bathroom.
Madison’s hand tightened. “Morgan?” she whispered. “What’s happening?”
“I don’t know.” I threw my arm around her shoulders. It was my job to protect her. Even if I didn’t like her. “It’s okay, Mad.”
Another bang sounded, much closer to my room. It was probably just down the hall. Tears started to drip down Madison’s cheeks. “We’re going to die, Morgan.” Her warbling voice was almost inaudible.
“No, we’re not,” I said forcefully. “Grandma Marley will save us.”
Marley would always be able to protect us. Always. She was magic. We all were, but Marley was the best. Our line of the McAllister family had the ability to control darkness and shadow. We were able to become almost invisible; we could trap someone in his own shadow; we could cloak the world in darkness.
I was just learning to use my powers, but Marley was an expert. Good enough to fight off some filthy trespasser, surely.
Madison and I listened, hidden under the bed, as our grandmother shouted at someone. “Give it up, Roderick,” she said. “You were never a match for me.”
“I beg to differ,” a harsh, male voice yelled. The crackle of flames punctuated his statement.
Marley let out a bad word, one that Madison and I were never allowed to use. I heard the characteristic whoosh of her magic. There was a crunch, as someone was thrown into the furniture. I hoped it wasn’t Grandma.
And then, so loud that my eardrums popped, a blood-curdling screech. The thump of heavy feet descending the stairs, the slam of the front door. The squeal of tires against our driveway. After that, it was silent. Eerily, terrifyingly, unnaturally silent.
Madison’s tears were coming faster now, and I had to work at pulling her out from under the bed. We were both shaking. I inched towards the door, opening it carefully, and let out a scream of my own.
In the middle of the hallway, not three feet from my door, was Grandma Marley.
Dead.
I fought to keep my dinner down, pushing Madison back into the bedroom. She didn’t need to see our grandma’s body. I hadn’t needed to see our grandma’s body. She was charred and shriveled, her skin black and crisp. Her only recognizable feature was her spiky hair.
I was crying just as hard as my sister now—clutching her arm and weeping into her shoulder. We didn’t dare come out of the bedroom, not until our mother returned home.
Madison held me tighter, burying her head in my neck, as we heard Mom ascending the stairs. “Girls,” she called. “Where—”
Her words were cut off with a shriek, an indecipherable cry of anguish. There was too much screaming in this house. At that moment, it felt like those shouts would echo in the manor’s halls forever, haunting our every step.
I didn’t know then that my grandmother was not the first to be murdered in this house.
“Morgan!” Mom yelled, as soon as she regained her voice. “Madison! Girls!”
“We’re in here,” I whispered, my throat constricting. “In here.”
The door burst open. In a whirlwind of black hair and thin arms, Mom swept us into a hug. She pressed her face into Madison’s hair and cupped my cheek with her hand. She murmured into our ears, her words drowned in a layer of tears.
“Who was that?” I finally asked. “Why did he kill Grandma Marley?”
My voice cracked on the last syllable, but Mom pretended not to notice. She led us to the bed, scooping Madison into her lap and holding me close against her side.
“Have you ever heard the name Roderick,” she asked softly, stroking my hair.
“That’s who…” I trailed off, unable to continue.
Mom nodded. “Our family, the McAllister Coven, is magical. We’re witches.”
“I know,” I snapped impatiently.
“Many years ago, back in the dawn of the twentieth century, there were three sisters.” Her voice had that quiet, well-practiced air of a fairytale. A legend. Combing her willowy fingers through my hair, she continued. “Mauve, Maura, and Marnie McAllister were the most powerful witches the world had ever known. Each had a different gift, a different element they could control.
“Mauve, our ancestor, was a master of shadow and darkness. Maura, whose line died out with her only daughter, controlled ice. Marnie, your cousins’ predecessor, had dominion over water.
“There were three brothers—Remus, Raoul, and Reginald Roderick. They were nearly as powerful as the McAllisters. Somehow, no one knows exactly why, the two families got into a fight, an epic battle. From then on, we have carried on their war.”
“Is that why that man killed Grandma?” Madison asked softly. “Because of the fight?”
“Yes, honey, it is,” Mom whispered, pressing a kiss to Madison’s cheek.
“Will they kill us?” I wrapped my arms tight around myself, trying not to shiver.
“If you give them a chance,” Mom said. “That’s why you girls have to practice hard, become the best witches you can be. You have to be able to kill them before they kill you.”
I took her words to heart.
For the next eleven years, I did everything I was supposed to. I believed what Mom had told me that day. I trained like no one had trained before. I hated the Rodericks with every fiber of my being.
Until I met one.
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“Morgan,” Grandma Marley said, clapping me on the shoulder. Her voice was soft, gentle. With anyone else’s grandma, that wouldn’t be a big deal. With Marley, it was unnatural. Frightening, even. She’d always been so gruff. “Get your sister and go hide upstairs. Someone’s in the house.”
I nodded and ran off, knowing better than to disobey Grandma Marley. Madison, my eight-year-old sister, was playing with her Barbies. She sat there, methodically dressing and undressing each of them. Their outfits matched perfectly, down to their tiny plastic shoes.
I grabbed her hand and tugged her along. “Come on,” I whispered, pulling her up the marble staircase. “Grandma said to hide.”
We ran into my bedroom, slithering under my double bed. We lay there on our stomachs, our little fingers intertwined. Madison’s palm was sweaty, but I was beyond caring.
A crash echoed up to us, accompanied by a shriek. It sounded like Marley, but it couldn’t have been her. My grandmother didn’t scream. Not even when she saw that giant, hairy spider in the bathroom.
Madison’s hand tightened. “Morgan?” she whispered. “What’s happening?”
“I don’t know.” I threw my arm around her shoulders. It was my job to protect her. Even if I didn’t like her. “It’s okay, Mad.”
Another bang sounded, much closer to my room. It was probably just down the hall. Tears started to drip down Madison’s cheeks. “We’re going to die, Morgan.” Her warbling voice was almost inaudible.
“No, we’re not,” I said forcefully. “Grandma Marley will save us.”
Marley would always be able to protect us. Always. She was magic. We all were, but Marley was the best. Our line of the McAllister family had the ability to control darkness and shadow. We were able to become almost invisible; we could trap someone in his own shadow; we could cloak the world in darkness.
I was just learning to use my powers, but Marley was an expert. Good enough to fight off some filthy trespasser, surely.
Madison and I listened, hidden under the bed, as our grandmother shouted at someone. “Give it up, Roderick,” she said. “You were never a match for me.”
“I beg to differ,” a harsh, male voice yelled. The crackle of flames punctuated his statement.
Marley let out a bad word, one that Madison and I were never allowed to use. I heard the characteristic whoosh of her magic. There was a crunch, as someone was thrown into the furniture. I hoped it wasn’t Grandma.
And then, so loud that my eardrums popped, a blood-curdling screech. The thump of heavy feet descending the stairs, the slam of the front door. The squeal of tires against our driveway. After that, it was silent. Eerily, terrifyingly, unnaturally silent.
Madison’s tears were coming faster now, and I had to work at pulling her out from under the bed. We were both shaking. I inched towards the door, opening it carefully, and let out a scream of my own.
In the middle of the hallway, not three feet from my door, was Grandma Marley.
Dead.
I fought to keep my dinner down, pushing Madison back into the bedroom. She didn’t need to see our grandma’s body. I hadn’t needed to see our grandma’s body. She was charred and shriveled, her skin black and crisp. Her only recognizable feature was her spiky hair.
I was crying just as hard as my sister now—clutching her arm and weeping into her shoulder. We didn’t dare come out of the bedroom, not until our mother returned home.
Madison held me tighter, burying her head in my neck, as we heard Mom ascending the stairs. “Girls,” she called. “Where—”
Her words were cut off with a shriek, an indecipherable cry of anguish. There was too much screaming in this house. At that moment, it felt like those shouts would echo in the manor’s halls forever, haunting our every step.
I didn’t know then that my grandmother was not the first to be murdered in this house.
“Morgan!” Mom yelled, as soon as she regained her voice. “Madison! Girls!”
“We’re in here,” I whispered, my throat constricting. “In here.”
The door burst open. In a whirlwind of black hair and thin arms, Mom swept us into a hug. She pressed her face into Madison’s hair and cupped my cheek with her hand. She murmured into our ears, her words drowned in a layer of tears.
“Who was that?” I finally asked. “Why did he kill Grandma Marley?”
My voice cracked on the last syllable, but Mom pretended not to notice. She led us to the bed, scooping Madison into her lap and holding me close against her side.
“Have you ever heard the name Roderick,” she asked softly, stroking my hair.
“That’s who…” I trailed off, unable to continue.
Mom nodded. “Our family, the McAllister Coven, is magical. We’re witches.”
“I know,” I snapped impatiently.
“Many years ago, back in the dawn of the twentieth century, there were three sisters.” Her voice had that quiet, well-practiced air of a fairytale. A legend. Combing her willowy fingers through my hair, she continued. “Mauve, Maura, and Marnie McAllister were the most powerful witches the world had ever known. Each had a different gift, a different element they could control.
“Mauve, our ancestor, was a master of shadow and darkness. Maura, whose line died out with her only daughter, controlled ice. Marnie, your cousins’ predecessor, had dominion over water.
“There were three brothers—Remus, Raoul, and Reginald Roderick. They were nearly as powerful as the McAllisters. Somehow, no one knows exactly why, the two families got into a fight, an epic battle. From then on, we have carried on their war.”
“Is that why that man killed Grandma?” Madison asked softly. “Because of the fight?”
“Yes, honey, it is,” Mom whispered, pressing a kiss to Madison’s cheek.
“Will they kill us?” I wrapped my arms tight around myself, trying not to shiver.
“If you give them a chance,” Mom said. “That’s why you girls have to practice hard, become the best witches you can be. You have to be able to kill them before they kill you.”
I took her words to heart.
For the next eleven years, I did everything I was supposed to. I believed what Mom had told me that day. I trained like no one had trained before. I hated the Rodericks with every fiber of my being.
Until I met one.
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chapter 1 review
♫Krista♫
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WHOA!!!!!! I love this one soooo much more! And hehe, I am sooo hooked! :D
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Danielle "The Book Huntress"
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This is really awesome. I can't wait to read more!
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Acacia
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Finally got around to reading your rewritten prologue, and SO GLAD I DID. :D
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Aly ♫SOCCER GOALIE♫SOFTBALL CATCHER♫
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I LOVE THE NEW VERSION OF THE PROLOGUE!!!
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Aria
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omgoodness, i have only time to read chapter one, but'll get on as soon as i can to read more! eeeeeeeee!!! i'm hooked!
i just joined goodre...more "
i just joined goodre...more "
chapter 1 review
Angee
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Wow! I am really impressed! I am totally captivated! I wish I could buy this story to put on my shelf! Very good! I've gotta go... to continue reading...more
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Bry
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What a great start to the story. Can't wait to read the next chapter!
Love how all of the names start with M's and R's. "
Love how all of the names start with M's and R's. "
chapter 2 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
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Wow. This is great!!!
You need to write more, more, more! "
You need to write more, more, more! "
chapter 2 review
Hope
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OMGosh! I have to know what happens next! If you don't write more I might die!
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chapter 2 review
♥Jess♥
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"Aw, that’s sweet,” I said, tightening his dark restraints. “Did he mention that I was also the prettiest?"
Omg, that is so...more "
Omg, that is so...more "
chapter 2 review
Bethie
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first chapter amazing my friend, sorry it took me so long to comment!
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chapter 2 review
Ilana
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I believe at one point you said Ryder was a “wizard”. I thought he was a warlock?
Also, it says Slamming the book shut, I said, “Mad,...more "
Also, it says Slamming the book shut, I said, “Mad,...more "
chapter 2 review
Suna
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This is really good. You might want to take it down though, someone might steal it.
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chapter 2 review
Jack
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You write amazingly well! Morgan's powers are something I'd never considered before. I mean, we get the elements of fire and water and all that crap, ...more
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chapter 2 review
Bookworm!!!
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In the group, Writers that are Children or something along those lines. I heard of your story so many times and so many times I look at it briefly. ...more
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chapter 2 review
Oceanwaves
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I never got a chance to comment on the chapters. :) Awesome though!
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chapter 2 review
Riley
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I love this! It has great fluidity and I can't help but want to read more!
However, I think you could work on the sequence. There were some ...more "
However, I think you could work on the sequence. There were some ...more "
chapter 3 review
Kelsey
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I'm begging you, pleaze pleaze pleaze pleaze!!! Write More!!! I Luv it!!!
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chapter 3 review
♫Krista♫
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OHHHHH I LOVE IT! The reactions between Ryder and Morgan are just sooooo cute and oh I loved reading that! And the ending, always good to end with a l...more
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chapter 3 review
Sella
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this is really good! i'm intrigued to find out what happens next!! write more please :D
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chapter 3 review
Bethie
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this chapter is so funny, I loved it. I really liked the part about the diapers and tampons, it added nice voice to things.
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chapter 3 review
Mira
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I totally love it. I've read lots of fantasy books in my day but this makes my top 10 you should so get it published. Word of advice though don't post...more
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chapter 4 review
Kelsey
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This is great! I'm sorry, but you have to write as fast as you can! :-)
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chapter 5 review
♫Krista♫
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I can't believe Orpheus would just drop Morgan on the side of the road?! Who does that???????????????? Eek, I do not like Orpheus, do not, do not. Gre...more
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chapter 5 review
Bethie
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I wish I could dry my hair that way, loved the way you bring out the characters in such a relatable way. You have talent my friend!
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chapter 6 review
♫Krista♫
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OMG!!!! I love it!!!! And that doesnt even describe the half of it! Ryder and Morgan are sooo cute together! This is my favorite chapter yet!!!! Keep ...more
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chapter 6 review
Sella
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omg! WOW!!! this is SOOO FREAKING AMAZING!!! you are SOOO talented with romance, it's unbelievable!! and i LOVE the relationship between ryder and mor...more
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chapter 6 review
Kelsey
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Ok, I know it hasn't been that long since you've written, but i HAVE to know what happens, I'm addicted, WRITE FASTER!!! :-)
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chapter 6 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
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oooooooooo i love it holly!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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chapter 6 review
Bethie
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It made me smile that Morgan is a feminist. Can't wait to read the next chapter :)
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chapter 7 review
♫Krista♫
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Thank you sooooooooooooo soooooooooooo soooooooooooo much for updating this!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love it!!! Absolutly amazing!!!!!!!!! Plz write more and q...more
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chapter 7 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
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kool... happy holly? i comented!
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chapter 8 review
♫Krista♫
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Ahhh love it!!!!! Please write more and quick! The waiting is horrible!!!
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chapter 8 review
Catie
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Wow this is so good!! You are such a good writer. Please keep writing. Its awesome!
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chapter 8 review
Sella
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Haha! I love Morgan! She's such a cool narrator, she has great voice. And sarcasm. :D
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chapter 8 review
Gabby
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I really do love Madison, hon. Maybe because she was based on me....
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chapter 8 review
Music Lover ♥ Taylor Swift Fanatic ♥ HP Rox
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aww! Ryder and Morgan would be such a good couple!
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chapter 8 review
Bry
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Still enjoying the story, but am getting a bit thrown off by the inconsistencies. Like how old is Madison? 18 or 19And then Morgan goes from 20 to 2...more
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chapter 9 review
♥Jess♥
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Aww!!!! I so knew that was coming, but AWWW!!!! I'm a sucker for a good romance novel. So sue me. :)
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chapter 9 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
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heeeee i love this soooo much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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chapter 9 review
Music Lover ♥ Taylor Swift Fanatic ♥ HP Rox
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OMG! i'm gonna cry! this is too good!
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chapter 10 review
♫Krista♫
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Awww Ryder and Morgan!!! So adorable!!!!!! You should really get this published once your done. I love it!
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chapter 10 review
♥Jess♥
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Come on, write more, PLEASE!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!? If you don't, I think I might just very well die. And between Forever: The Story of an Immortal ...more
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chapter 10 review
Jen→
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Love the story so far but I need more now..lol. How long til you post more?
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chapter 10 review
Aly ♫SOCCER GOALIE♫SOFTBALL CATCHER♫
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Wow. This is amazing! Keep writing!
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chapter 10 review
Sella
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GAH! You are SUCH an amazing romance writer! And I love the witty dialogue! Dang, you were BORN to be a best-selling author! XD
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chapter 10 review
Music Lover ♥ Taylor Swift Fanatic ♥ HP Rox
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OMG! OMG! OMG! RYDER AND MORGAN ARE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOO PERFECT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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chapter 11 review
Jen→
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Loved it, hate how it always leaves you hanging...but I guess thats kinda the point lol. More?
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chapter 11 review
♫Krista♫
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1. I was LOLing most of the chapter!
2. HOLY CRAP!!!!!!!! Im ready to go and kill Orpheaus!!! Like Sella said, Morgan is Ryders girl!!!!!!!!
...more "
2. HOLY CRAP!!!!!!!! Im ready to go and kill Orpheaus!!! Like Sella said, Morgan is Ryders girl!!!!!!!!
...more "
chapter 11 review
Sella
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NOOO!!!!!!!!!! ORPHEUS MERLIN, YOU BIG FAT ASSHOLE!!!!!!!!! HOW DARE YOU TOUCH MORGAN!!!!!!!! SHE'S RYDER'S GIRL!!!!!!! GRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!! >...more
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chapter 11 review
♥Jess♥
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NOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I HATE Orpheus!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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chapter 11 review
Kelcie
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You are a good writer. Sometimes with the stories on here I get lost in the poor grammar and bad flow, but you are doing a great job. I just wish it...more
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chapter 11 review
Aly ♫SOCCER GOALIE♫SOFTBALL CATCHER♫
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OMG! I love this! That leaves you hanging! Keep writing so I don't go insane. I thought about this story for like two days straight after reading it.
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chapter 12 review
Mindy
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Love it!!!! It like a magical Romeo and Juliet where the girl won't just give up. THIS Juliet kicks ass.
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chapter 12 review
♫Krista♫
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OH YEAH!!!! GO MORGAN! WOOT!
Ok as usual amazing, and so far no criticisms, you'll just have to deal with that! :P
And the ending, so aweso...more "
Ok as usual amazing, and so far no criticisms, you'll just have to deal with that! :P
And the ending, so aweso...more "
chapter 12 review
Sella
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Ryder is amazing! I love him! :D This chapter is sooo good, I can't wait for more. XD There's just one thing, though. You keep saying that Ryder has "...more
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chapter 12 review
♥Jess♥
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Yeah!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Whoo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! MORGAN, U ROCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! And Ryder rox, too!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...more
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chapter 12 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
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AWWWWWW!!!!!! I THINK THIS MIGHT BE THE BEST CHAPTER YET!!!!
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chapter 12 review
Ursina
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Please more. You're a great writer. This is my perfect mix of humour and suspense. Great work!
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chapter 12 review
Margaux
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LOVED IT!
I noticed a few areas where it seemed small bits were missing, only noted by reference, so it might be good to make them more evi...more "
I noticed a few areas where it seemed small bits were missing, only noted by reference, so it might be good to make them more evi...more "
chapter 13 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
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nice! you're finally back!
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chapter 13 review
Mindy
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Damn girl. You have GOT to write more often. I LVOED it but I'm dying here!!!! Damn. Writers are the best at torture. ;-{
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chapter 13 review
Sophie
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aww i like ryder, i hope he takes her sumwhere nice for her bday
oh and ure new intro was relli good :) "
oh and ure new intro was relli good :) "
chapter 13 review
Sella
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OMG!! THANK YOU!! I CHECK THIS FOR UPDATES EVERY SINGLE DAY AND FINALLY YOU POST MORE!! YAAAYY!!! And now I need even MORE. Haha, you've got me addict...more
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chapter 13 review
♫Krista♫
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YAY. YAY. YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You posted more, finally! And great job too, its fantastic! And lol, Madison cracks me up! Write more soon, I'm addicte...more
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chapter 13 review
Kim
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Great :) I cartainly wouldnt be that objective to a suprise party. :L
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chapter 13 review
♥Jess♥
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So much for a surprise! =D i'm so happy ur back, Holly! We've all missed u TERRIBLY!!!
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chapter 14 review
Sophie
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aww thats so cute, i like these scenes where the tough guys let their guards down
keep it going :) "
keep it going :) "
chapter 14 review
♫Krista♫
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YAY!YAY!YAY!YAY!
THAT IS SOOOOOOOOOO SOOOOOOOOOO SOOOOOO SWEET!!!!!!!!!!!! Awwwww this chapter makes me LOVE Ryder even more. And Morgan is my FA...more "
THAT IS SOOOOOOOOOO SOOOOOOOOOO SOOOOOO SWEET!!!!!!!!!!!! Awwwww this chapter makes me LOVE Ryder even more. And Morgan is my FA...more "
chapter 14 review
Abbee
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awww they're cute together and kinda scary. morgans funny when she's drunk.
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chapter 14 review
Acacia
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AWWWWW! So cheesy but so sweet!! Morgan's hilarious when she's drunk. :D :D
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chapter 14 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
YAAY! look i finally read the whole thing! haha. wowww so good! i love it! please post more. :)
"
chapter 14 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
Aww!!!!!!! I really LOVE this!!!!!!!!!! PLZ write more soon!!!!!!!!!!!! You've been gone for SO SO SO long!!!!!!!!!!! ANd this is SOO SO SO SO SO SO S...more
"
chapter 14 review
Sella
said:
"
awwwwwwwwww :D i love this so much!! post more!! haha, i think it's hilarious how drunk morgan is. XD
"
chapter 14 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
gooooooood!!! although the end was reaaaaaaaaallly cheesy!
"
chapter 15 review
Aly ♫SOCCER GOALIE♫SOFTBALL CATCHER♫
said:
"
OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG!!!! LOVE THIS! He sooo added his number! shaa!!!
"
chapter 15 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
*giggles* I can't believe they actually had sex. Wait- well... actually, I guess I can. *smirks* He's right, though. If he had tried something like th...more
"
chapter 15 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
OMYGOSH!!!!!!!!! The ending was my fave!!!!!! He added his number, awwww!
"
chapter 15 review
Sophie
said:
"
aww they slept together, altho she was drunk..
cant she lighten up a little bit and not be so strict wen she is with ryder? "
cant she lighten up a little bit and not be so strict wen she is with ryder? "
chapter 15 review
Sella
said:
"
hahahaha!!! funny. :D ryder is amazing ...
heehee. *starts singing* morgan's lost her virgin-ity, morgan's lost her virgin-ity ... naughty na...more "
heehee. *starts singing* morgan's lost her virgin-ity, morgan's lost her virgin-ity ... naughty na...more "
chapter 15 review
Jackee
said:
"
you should make ryders number my number. that would be funny. it would make me laugh you should do it. lol. jk. or am i???
"
chapter 16 review
Acacia
said:
"
Haha! You caved and let Morgan have Ryder this chapter after all. :D :D
"
"
chapter 16 review
Wolfspirit
said:
"
I hate to make a correction, but, the part where she sees Ryder with is friends, reread the paragraph. It has a word that's wrong.
"
chapter 16 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
GAH!!!! YOU UPDATED THIS WHILE I WAS GONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! GRRRRRRRRRR GRRRRRRR GRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!! But I will forgive you, cuz that was AMAZING!...more
"
chapter 16 review
Sella
said:
"
awww :D
the whole thing about madison's driving is hilaroius. i was cracking up. you're so funny! :D heeheee ... suicidal squirrels ... XD an...more "
the whole thing about madison's driving is hilaroius. i was cracking up. you're so funny! :D heeheee ... suicidal squirrels ... XD an...more "
chapter 17 review
Sophie
said:
"
why did she put the diary away? she cudve shown ryder and they cudve done sumthing abt it
keep writing :) "
keep writing :) "
chapter 17 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
<3 it!!!Omg, I wasn't expecting that!!!PLEASE WRITE MORE!!this is one of the best stories I have read!!!!!
"
chapter 17 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
THAT WAS AMAZING -as usual- GREAT TWIST!!!!!!!!!!! Im still freaking out- AHHHHHH NOW I STILL HAVE TO WAIT FOR MORE! GRRRRRR, but great job! Im in lov...more
"
chapter 17 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
OH, I LOVE THIS!!! Please write more! And that so sucks, how the whole stupid feud started! If only they stopped it! But there has to be a certain way...more
"
chapter 17 review
Sella
said:
"
Wow! One of the best chapters yet! I LOVE the diary thing, it's SO cool! Finding out the history of how the feud started was awesome! It seems like su...more
"
chapter 18 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
O.M.G. OMGGG!!! OMIGODDD NO WAAAY!!! haha wow this is awesome. :)
"
chapter 18 review
Acacia
said:
"
AHAHAHAHAHA. This is not at all funny for Morgan and completely hilarious for me. I CAN NOT WAIT for Ryder's reaction. I think this is possibly my fav...more
"
chapter 18 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
AHHHH! You can NOT leave us hanging! NOOOOO!
I NEEED TO know more or I may die! :O
But seriously, I love it! You need to keep wr...more "
I NEEED TO know more or I may die! :O
But seriously, I love it! You need to keep wr...more "
chapter 18 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
*FREAKING OUT* *TAKING IN DEEP BREATHES* OH MY FREALKING GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THAT was WHOA!!!!!!!! A joy to read as usual, but I was gripping the...more
"
chapter 18 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
Kind of cliche... but I'm willing to see where it goes. Please write more soon!
"
chapter 18 review
Sella
said:
"
haha I knew they were going to get pregnant! :)
but someone wouldn't be 100% positive that they're pregnant just because they missed their pe...more "
but someone wouldn't be 100% positive that they're pregnant just because they missed their pe...more "
chapter 18 review
Kim
said:
"
Oh my god!
I kinda guessed because of the last chapter nd when i saw the title i just knew. cant wait to see what happens! "
I kinda guessed because of the last chapter nd when i saw the title i just knew. cant wait to see what happens! "
chapter 18 review
Aly ♫SOCCER GOALIE♫SOFTBALL CATCHER♫
said:
"
OMG OMG OMG!!! I HAVE to know what he says! AHHHHH!!!!! LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!!!!!
"
chapter 18 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
OMG, wow......Hahaha, Madison was making me laugh But are you sure you won’t let her wear pink?”
I knew she would be pregnant, but shouldn't...more "
I knew she would be pregnant, but shouldn't...more "
chapter 19 review
Acacia
said:
"
Awww! I'm not sure whether this is going to be completely adorable or a horrible, horrible disaster.
Probably both. "
Probably both. "
chapter 19 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
AMAZING!
Do you know how amazing this is!?
One of the best freaking stories out there, man! :D "
Do you know how amazing this is!?
One of the best freaking stories out there, man! :D "
chapter 19 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
OH MY OH MY!!!!!!!!!!! *Deep breaths* WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm lovin' this, and GAH! I need to read the next chapter, it's so...more
"
chapter 19 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
WOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOW!!!!!!!!!!!!! SHE IS ACTING WAY!!!!!!!! TO MUCH LIKE MAURE, like first she falls in love with a rodrick and she is one original older...more
"
chapter 19 review
Sella
said:
"
Wow. That's the first time I've heard Ryder swear. lol! :D
I'm really impressed with how supportive Ryder is being. A lot of guys would want ...more "
I'm really impressed with how supportive Ryder is being. A lot of guys would want ...more "
chapter 19 review
Amanda
said:
"
I just have to say you are one of the best writers I've read on here, this could be definitely be published because it is so creative. I have a couple...more
"
chapter 19 review
Huneeya
said:
"
LOVE IT!!! A LITTLE BABY!! wait a sec... a boy or a girl ???? :\
"
chapter 20 review
Acacia
said:
"
I wanna see that!!! That would be HILARIOUS!
You know. For the people who aren't in the story. "
You know. For the people who aren't in the story. "
chapter 20 review
Sella
said:
"
I love this chapter! Mad is hilarious. :) And I'm really surprised at how well Morgan's mom took the news! But I guess it's not THAT big of a deal, si...more
"
chapter 20 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
Hahah, this chapter was really funny!And I'am really glad her mom didn't get angry or anything....she won't be so happy when she finds out WHO the fat...more
"
chapter 20 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
This chapter was great! :)
So funny. :D
Keep writing! I looooooove it! "
So funny. :D
Keep writing! I looooooove it! "
chapter 20 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
But It might be something that would be interesting to read! (Sorry Morgan!)
Great job!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!!!
WRITE MORE! WRITE MORE! And ag...more "
Great job!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!!!
WRITE MORE! WRITE MORE! And ag...more "
chapter 20 review
Catie
said:
"
Oh My!!!! WOW. This is so good. She's having a baby!!! I find that both really funny and really sad.
"
chapter 20 review
Madelyn
said:
"
oooooh more please! I check this every day for knew writing- PLEASE WRITE MORE!
"
chapter 20 review
Aly ♫SOCCER GOALIE♫SOFTBALL CATCHER♫
said:
"
OMG! I soo need to know what happens!!!!
"
chapter 21 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG, what can i say???RYDER IS TOTALLY COOL!And WOW...LOVE IT!!!!!!*sigh*..DID I MENTION THAT I LOVE RYDER???HE IS SO AWES...more
"
chapter 21 review
Kim
said:
"
aaaw thats so sweet.
I would so laugh if she ended up having twins, a boy and a girl. That would make sense though cuz of both of the spell...more "
I would so laugh if she ended up having twins, a boy and a girl. That would make sense though cuz of both of the spell...more "
chapter 21 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
YES! :D
I love love love love love love love love x1000 love it! :DDDDDD "
I love love love love love love love love x1000 love it! :DDDDDD "
chapter 21 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
OMGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!! THAT WAS THE BESTESTESTT CHAPTER ON EARTH! My FAVORITE CHAPTER YET!! This is just SOOO AMAZING! I am practically speechless!! But t...more
"
chapter 21 review
Abbee
said:
"
Holy crap!!!!!!!!!! say yes, no say no! omigosh! u love just leaving cliffhangers for us dont you holly?! im dying her and my brother's looking at me ...more
"
chapter 21 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
i want to be its daddy? not her... oh... right. McAlister plus Rodrick means no idea what the kids going to be...
"
chapter 21 review
Madelyn
said:
"
omigod awesomeness! MUST. HAVE. MORE. PLEASE! It's been days since you wrote! I'm DYYYIIINNGGG!
"
chapter 21 review
Sella
said:
"
O!!!!!!!!!! M!!!!!!!!!!!!! G!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE RYDER I LOVE RYDER I LOVE RYDER!!!!!! SOOO SWEET!!!! XD
how i...more "
how i...more "
chapter 21 review
Kendra
said:
"
stupid stupid stupid STUIPID place to stop. I must know what happens now.
"
chapter 21 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...more
"
chapter 21 review
Sophie
said:
"
OMG!!! MARRY HIM!!
maybe that will finally end the fued, bcoz he is doing right by her
im so happy that he didnt try and make her hav an abo...more "
maybe that will finally end the fued, bcoz he is doing right by her
im so happy that he didnt try and make her hav an abo...more "
chapter 21 review
Music Lover ♥ Taylor Swift Fanatic ♥ HP Rox
said:
"
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! OMG! OMG! OMG!
"
chapter 22 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!THIS IS NOT HAPPENING!!HOLLY!!!YOU ARE EVIL!!(jk jk)
HOW COULD YOU LET THIS HAPPEN!!AHHHH!!!*screams in the ...more "
HOW COULD YOU LET THIS HAPPEN!!AHHHH!!!*screams in the ...more "
chapter 22 review
Sophie
said:
"
uh uh, no way
they CANNOT break up
u gotta get them back together, fast!! "
they CANNOT break up
u gotta get them back together, fast!! "
chapter 22 review
Kim
said:
"
god i feel so sorry for ryder. i totally see morgens point of veiw though but i still would have married him.
are you trying to kill me!! i...more "
are you trying to kill me!! i...more "
chapter 22 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
NOOOOOOOO WAAAAAAAAY!
Is Morgan CRAZY?!?!
She can NOT do that! Why why why?!
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! D: "
Is Morgan CRAZY?!?!
She can NOT do that! Why why why?!
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! D: "
chapter 22 review
Acacia
said:
"
Unfair!!!!! I don't care if this is YOUR story, you're not allowed to do that!
"
chapter 22 review
Madelyn
said:
"
NOOOOOO! (but at least you finally wrote more) I love that bit at the end with the heart. But why did she refuse? WHY?!?!?!
"
chapter 22 review
Snuffleupagus!
said:
"
are you kidding me right now? please tell me ur kidding. they cannot break up. that is simply not allowed. this did not happen.
"
chapter 22 review
Amber
said:
"
It's so good! I love it but you cannot seriously let them break up forever. Their love is inevitable and i'll be waiting. :D
"
chapter 22 review
Kriss
said:
"
Love it! As always, its a great chapter, but its really kinda sad. But as always, its great :]
"
chapter 22 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
They just . . . They could not of . . . OH MY GOD!!!!!! THEY BROKE UP!!!!!!! *SOBS* NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! How-how could Morgan say no...more
"
chapter 22 review
Sella
said:
"
Nooooo!!!! NOOOOOOOO!!!!! YOU ARE SERIOUSLY MAKING ME CRY RIGHT NOW!!! I'm serious, tears are filling up my eyes!! I CAN'T BELIEVE MORGAN TOLD RYDER T...more
"
chapter 22 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
Aww... I can't believe she said no!!! =( *cry* Write more Holly. It isn't fair to just let us spin like this...
"
chapter 22 review
Aly ♫SOCCER GOALIE♫SOFTBALL CATCHER♫
said:
"
love it love it love it!!! but ur making me cry! AHHH! RYDER!!!! he can't be gone FOREVER!!! NOOOOOOOOOOO!
"
chapter 22 review
Music Lover ♥ Taylor Swift Fanatic ♥ HP Rox
said:
"
morgan and ryder are soooo perfect! i hope they dont break up!
"
chapter 23 review
Sella
said:
"
hahahahaha :) this is hilarious! XD BUT I STILL DONT FORGIVE YOU FOR MAKING MORGAN BREAK UP WITH RYDER!!!!!!!!
and i don't understand how mor...more "
and i don't understand how mor...more "
chapter 23 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
YAY ITS A GIRL! Of course, I kind of wished it was a boy . . . That would of been interesting . . . Even though it would of sent Morgan into a deeper ...more
"
chapter 23 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
YAYY!!ITS A GIRL!Though if it WAS a boy it would have added something..well..new!Anyway, I LOVED IT!!!*sigh*....ONE CHAPTER WITHOUT RYDER??Though I wa...more
"
chapter 23 review
Kim
said:
"
ha god madison is annoying
isnt it a little odd that mad and mo were saying witch out loud in front of the doctor ova and ova agen
he must t...more "
isnt it a little odd that mad and mo were saying witch out loud in front of the doctor ova and ova agen
he must t...more "
chapter 24 review
Acacia
said:
"
Haha! I knew the baby was going to explode someday. Of course she'd do it at a party full of people. :D :D
"
chapter 24 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
WHOA! WHOA! WHOA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OMGOSH! OMGOSH! GAH!!!!!!!! THAT WAS WOW!!!!!! Im not sure how I can sum this all up besides WOW! Great job! Great gre...more
"
chapter 24 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
AMAZING!!!!!
PURELY AMAZING!
When is Ryder going to come baaaack!
I miss him!
I love it! You MUST write more SOON! "
PURELY AMAZING!
When is Ryder going to come baaaack!
I miss him!
I love it! You MUST write more SOON! "
chapter 24 review
Sella
said:
"
WHOA!!! That's scary, but SOOO COOL!!
But, OH OH. This is going to be a problem!! People are going to find out!! 0_0 "
But, OH OH. This is going to be a problem!! People are going to find out!! 0_0 "
chapter 24 review
Mindy
said:
"
*Damn* Girl!!! One question: When will Morgan get a *damn* clue and accept Ryder's help?! I mean, they HAVE to end that *damn* feud sometime!!!
...more "
...more "
chapter 24 review
Apurva
said:
"
mygod this is gr8! u can really publish it! its like so professional!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i luv the names! :I "
i luv the names! :I "
chapter 24 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
Aww... no Ryder in these? Hello, I need Ryder in this! He's the one who got her freaking pregnant, for God's sake! WRITE MORE!!!
"
chapter 24 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
Scary!!I thought she would lost the baby or something!!!!*shudders*
Haha, I liked it though!
Have I ever told you that you are A GREAT writer?...more "
Haha, I liked it though!
Have I ever told you that you are A GREAT writer?...more "
chapter 24 review
Kim
said:
"
ha :L
poor morgen must be really struggling now
first an annoying sister
second a uncontrolable power "
poor morgen must be really struggling now
first an annoying sister
second a uncontrolable power "
chapter 24 review
Madelyn
said:
"
Sweet! More soon!I hope she tells Madison the truth-Madison might think it's romantic.
"
chapter 24 review
Huneeya
said:
"
more more more more more more
i need more
write more soon PLEASE holly!!! "
i need more
write more soon PLEASE holly!!! "
chapter 24 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
awwwwwwwww love it!!!! Madison is being a brat though...
"
chapter 24 review
Aly ♫SOCCER GOALIE♫SOFTBALL CATCHER♫
said:
"
LOVE IT! Great idea for the daughter!
"
chapter 25 review
Acacia
said:
"
Teeheehee! I love how he just shows up like that, and she's not even phased. XD
"
chapter 25 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
I have no idea, but tears are on the verge of spilling out! That was just awesome as usual. I want Ryder back, I miss him more and more. (I know he ca...more
"
chapter 25 review
Sella
said:
"
MORGAN IS SUCH A FREAKING IDIOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Sorry. Just had to get that out there. XD But seriously ... why the heck is she refusing...more
"
chapter 25 review
Huneeya
said:
"
omg
i have tears in my eyes
ryders bak
but i have tears in my eyes
morgans an idiot
she shud hurry up and say yes b4 its 2 la...more "
i have tears in my eyes
ryders bak
but i have tears in my eyes
morgans an idiot
she shud hurry up and say yes b4 its 2 la...more "
chapter 25 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
I'am sorry and I think that Morgan is awesome..BUT WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH HER???I MEAN SERIOUSLY!!
AHHH...
*cries*...That was sad..once a...more "
AHHH...
*cries*...That was sad..once a...more "
chapter 25 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
awsome name!!! i love your chapter names!
"
chapter 25 review
Madelyn
said:
"
Yay more wanted NOW! When will she tell Mad? I'm assuming she'll be the first to now about the secret romance with ryder.
"
chapter 25 review
Aly ♫SOCCER GOALIE♫SOFTBALL CATCHER♫
said:
"
LOVE IT! again... I loved that Ryder returned. I was afraid he might be gone for long!
"
chapter 25 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
Holly, if you don't make her say yes RIGHT NOW, then I promise you that you will never hear the end of it.
"
chapter 25 review
Amber
said:
"
Wow, nice. It's so riveting. I always can't wait for the next chapter. Morgan is stupid but I get why she doesn't want to rush this, the entire situat...more
"
chapter 25 review
Sarah
said:
"
Wow, I'm really impressed. I'm enjoying this story. Please write more.
"
chapter 26 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
*ROAR!!* Thats it, I roared, I never thought I would, but the blonde headed bimbo made me do it! I HATE HER! I had a gut feeling this was going to hap...more
"
chapter 26 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
I want Ryder to die.
I want him to go hide under a big freaking rock with Sabrina and DIE A VERY PAINFUL DEATH. :@
I hate him now. So SIMPLE...more "
I want him to go hide under a big freaking rock with Sabrina and DIE A VERY PAINFUL DEATH. :@
I hate him now. So SIMPLE...more "
chapter 26 review
Acacia
said:
"
I'm going to stab Sabrina. And then Orpheus. And then maybe give Ryder a good smack upside the head.
"
chapter 26 review
Sophie
said:
"
OMG RYDER!!!! i hope he has a damn good explanation.. and orpheus needs to go die!! trying to get sex from a pregnant woman.. honestly, he is messed u...more
"
chapter 26 review
♥Hima the Grape♥
said:
"
Why do all the stories I read seem to make me mad or sad??
"
chapter 26 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
Aw... poor Morgan. Ryder is a freaking idiot. I'm sorry, but he is. And what's up with the "I can explain!" They always say that, but they n...more
"
chapter 26 review
Huneeya
said:
"
o-m-g
i hate sabrina
how could ryder do this to her?
unbelievable
i wish she would let him explain though "
i hate sabrina
how could ryder do this to her?
unbelievable
i wish she would let him explain though "
chapter 26 review
Kim
said:
"
haha
god i cant believe that you made ryder get another girlfriend. i mean come on. you've always mede him out to be sweet ect and now hes basica...more "
god i cant believe that you made ryder get another girlfriend. i mean come on. you've always mede him out to be sweet ect and now hes basica...more "
chapter 26 review
Amber
said:
"
Wow Ryder is an idiot sometimes, why would he even go for someone like that? I mean I at least hope she can think by herself and everything. But if sh...more
"
chapter 26 review
Kelcie
said:
"
Good for Ryder. Morgan is being self-centered and stubborn. How many times was a self respecting guy supposed to beg her to be with him before he mo...more
"
chapter 26 review
Catie
said:
"
Stupid Ryder!!! Didn't he see what that did to morgan? She is so much better without him. I was really mad she didn't say yes but if hes the kind of g...more
"
chapter 26 review
Aly ♫SOCCER GOALIE♫SOFTBALL CATCHER♫
said:
"
AWESOME! I so hate Ryder right now, but then again I love him still... Such a hard thing to be mad at him...
"
chapter 26 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
WHAT THE???? Sabrina?!?! I understand why Morgan hates her....
"
chapter 27 review
Kriss
said:
"
You and your damn cliffhangers... :) I liked the chapter though, write the next one soon!
"
chapter 27 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
AAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THIS IS SOOOOOO NOT GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOT GOOD NOT GOOD! WRITE MORE WRITE MORE!!!!!!! Ok, got to stop...more
"
chapter 27 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
HOLY CRAP!!!! YOU ARE EVIL!!! but i'm sure you knew that already ... but AAAH!!! MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!! O_O
"
chapter 27 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
YOU NEED TO WRITE MORE NOOOOOOOOW!!!!!!!!!!
I can not wait another two days!
At LEAST tomorrow! :D:D:D:D:D:D "
I can not wait another two days!
At LEAST tomorrow! :D:D:D:D:D:D "
chapter 27 review
Sella
said:
"
Jesus!!! Two months early???? Whooaaa. Aww man, I guess someone beat me being 6 weeks premature. DARN MEREDITH. :P:P:P
Oh and I just realized...more "
Oh and I just realized...more "
chapter 27 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
OH NO!!Two months early!!!Wow!!!!Ahhh....THIS IS NOT GOOOODDD!!!!!!HOLLY DO NOT MAKE MEREDITH DIE!!PLEASE WRITE MORE SOON!!!
"
chapter 27 review
Ilana
said:
"
It's amazing. :)
“Of course, the worst a Shadow-Shaper is strangle you,” Molly pointed out.
Missing something here? "
“Of course, the worst a Shadow-Shaper is strangle you,” Molly pointed out.
Missing something here? "
chapter 27 review
Kim
said:
"
aaww nooo
holly!
i seriously am going to use that pickfork on you. i dont care about ryder anymore. the pichfork has YOUR NAME ON IT!! "
holly!
i seriously am going to use that pickfork on you. i dont care about ryder anymore. the pichfork has YOUR NAME ON IT!! "
chapter 27 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
OH GOSH!!! i read something like that happening... and well, the baby ended up being dead....
"
chapter 27 review
Huneeya
said:
"
omg
omg
baby! coming! baby!
ok, u kno what i cant b bothered 2 type a full comment
not when theres another chap 2 read... "
omg
baby! coming! baby!
ok, u kno what i cant b bothered 2 type a full comment
not when theres another chap 2 read... "
chapter 28 review
Acacia
said:
"
For once I didn't laugh at Morgan's plight. I had my hand over my mouth like the entire time. :(
"
chapter 28 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
*looks at screen, mouth wide open, breathing heavily* That . . . baby . . . morgan . . . ryder . . . baby . . . dead . . . early . . . dead . . . baby...more
"
chapter 28 review
Grace
said:
"
Stupid head. Not allowed. Not allowed. Baby can't die. But strangly, it's just my cup of tea. I like it.
"
chapter 28 review
Ilana
said:
"
Oh... no.... AAH!! She can't die! I'll just have to trust that she lives. Yep.
Are babies supposed to have ny hair that young? I mean, mayb...more "
Are babies supposed to have ny hair that young? I mean, mayb...more "
chapter 28 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
AWHHH! D: D: D:
Why is she going to die!?!
What about Ryder!
Ahhhh! D: "
Why is she going to die!?!
What about Ryder!
Ahhhh! D: "
chapter 28 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
I don't know what to say....but I do know that this story is amazing, I know i have told you millions of times that you are evil to break Morgan and R...more
"
chapter 28 review
Kim
said:
"
aaaww its my birthday.
why did you make me cry on my birthday.
*sniff* i even snapped the pichfork yesterday and now i have nothing to thr...more "
why did you make me cry on my birthday.
*sniff* i even snapped the pichfork yesterday and now i have nothing to thr...more "
chapter 28 review
Sophie
said:
"
oh no!! she cant die!! thats so sad, poor morgan.. and ryder
omg, tell ryder, he has to noe!
write more soon... and dnt be cruel and kill th...more "
omg, tell ryder, he has to noe!
write more soon... and dnt be cruel and kill th...more "
chapter 28 review
Huneeya
said:
"
holly
holly, will she live?
holly!!! i cant say anything
im speechless :( i love her already "
holly, will she live?
holly!!! i cant say anything
im speechless :( i love her already "
chapter 28 review
Sella
said:
"
Oh my God!! You're breaking my heart. Poor Meredith!! I know she's going to make it through alive, but still, this is scary!! 0.0
I WANT TO M...more "
I WANT TO M...more "
chapter 29 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
AWH!
That's so freaking sad. It reminds me of saying goodbye to my grandma the other day. Except not as many 'I love yous' but still!
THIS I...more "
That's so freaking sad. It reminds me of saying goodbye to my grandma the other day. Except not as many 'I love yous' but still!
THIS I...more "
chapter 29 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
I really dont know what to say. I really dont. I have tears streaming down my face, and my hands are barely able to type this. Yet again you've left m...more
"
chapter 29 review
Megan
said:
"
I am crying. She's going to live. I swear I will hunt you down if you kill her!
"
chapter 29 review
Snuffleupagus!
said:
"
she cant die. dont let her die. and tell ryder, he needs to know. im freaking crying, you did an amazing job with this chapter and this story.
"
chapter 29 review
Huneeya
said:
"
my visions blurred with tears holly
there has 2 b some spell they havent thought of, some way that she will live
because meredith mauve mcalli...more "
there has 2 b some spell they havent thought of, some way that she will live
because meredith mauve mcalli...more "
chapter 29 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
I'am starting to think that I should get a tissue box with me before reading your chapters!!I can tell how much you like our tears!D:
That is just...more "
That is just...more "
chapter 29 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
Okay, Holly. I'll admit it. I am very very mad at you. While I know you aren't (you just CAN'T) going to kill little Merry, you can't kill Morgan. You...more
"
chapter 29 review
Mindy
said:
"
Damn Girl. You've got ME crying!
I REALLY need a virtual tissue. Anybody? "
I REALLY need a virtual tissue. Anybody? "
chapter 29 review
Abbee
said:
"
omigod holly! i actually had to wait a couple minutes after reading cuhz i was crying so hard. i love this chapter. it has to be my favorite, i think....more
"
chapter 29 review
Sarah
said:
"
Please, please, continue. :'( By the way, could you update more often? I really really really really really really love your chapters.
"
chapter 29 review
♥Hima the Grape♥
said:
"
That.. *sniffle* Was the saddest thing I've EVER read...
"
chapter 29 review
Sella
said:
"
Aww man!! I know she's going to live, but I'm still getting teary!! You did such a good job with this chapter, it's so emotional!
Three thing...more "
Three thing...more "
chapter 29 review
Sophie
said:
"
NOOOOOO!!!
omg holly, u made me cry!!
hurry up with the next chapter!! "
omg holly, u made me cry!!
hurry up with the next chapter!! "
chapter 29 review
Cassi
said:
"
ohmygosh that is SOOOO sad! please, please tell me she doesn't die!!!!
"
chapter 29 review
☽adris☽
said:
"
o my god.. PLEASE tell me meredith is going to be okay..
you need to hurry up, that is too sad to leave me hanging.
"
you need to hurry up, that is too sad to leave me hanging.
"
chapter 29 review
Catie
said:
"
Oh My God. Why holly? I am really crying now. Goodbye Meredith MMauve McAllister
"
chapter 29 review
Bethie
said:
"
This is a very good chapter. Don't feel badly that you didn't cry, I only kind of welled up. It was well written and heart-felt. I felt for Morgan and...more
"
chapter 29 review
Music Lover ♥ Taylor Swift Fanatic ♥ HP Rox
said:
"
this is SO sad! im gonna cry! *sob*
"
chapter 29 review
Aria
said:
"
omword, omword, omword I'M GONNA CRY!!! HOLLY, THIS STORY IS AMAZING!!!!
"
chapter 30 review
Acacia
said:
"
TEEHEEHEEHEEHEE. I love this. *singsong voice* Ryder's back, Ryder's back!
"
chapter 30 review
Sunni the Dinosaur
said:
"
AWHHHHHH!
YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY! :D :D :D
I love itttttt! "
YAY YAY YAY YAY YAY! :D :D :D
I love itttttt! "
chapter 30 review
Snuffleupagus!
said:
"
thank you holly. im so glad you didnt kill her. AND ryder came back! this was like the best chapter ever!!!!!!
"
chapter 30 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
You have NOOOOO idea how happy I am. No I'm more than just happy, I'm esctatic, elated, rapturous, tickled pink! Wonderful! Yay!
♫Ryder'...more "
♫Ryder'...more "
chapter 30 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
Ha ha! What did I tell you!!! I SO knew she was going to live. After all, you can't just kill Morgan's baby. It'd kind of make the last 16 chapters po...more
"
chapter 30 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
YAYY!!!
OMG!!!
GUESS WHAT??I REALIZE THAT I WAS SO STUPID!!
RYDER IS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE HIM!!!
I WANT A RYDER!!!
I LO...more "
OMG!!!
GUESS WHAT??I REALIZE THAT I WAS SO STUPID!!
RYDER IS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE HIM!!!
I WANT A RYDER!!!
I LO...more "
chapter 30 review
Sophie
said:
"
YAY!!! RYDER AND MORGAN ARE BACK TOGETHER!! and the baby is going to live!!
now they can get married and be a happy family and end the fued!!
...more "
now they can get married and be a happy family and end the fued!!
...more "
chapter 30 review
Huneeya
said:
"
OMG HOLLY I LUVVVV U!!! <333333333333
ur amaaaaaazing
this has GOT 2 b the happiest chap u have ever written...and maybe will ever write :P...more "
ur amaaaaaazing
this has GOT 2 b the happiest chap u have ever written...and maybe will ever write :P...more "
chapter 30 review
Jackee
said:
"
f.y.i. morgan doesn't put meredith down before Ryder kisses her but then she isn't there so you might want to add that. but other than that, I LOVE IT...more
"
chapter 30 review
Sella
said:
"
NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!! I HATE YOU RYDER YOU F***ING BASTARD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HOW DARE YOU COME BACK YOU ASSHOLE?!?!?!?!?!??! HOW DARE MORGAN FORGIVE Y...more
"
chapter 30 review
Amber
said:
"
it was awesome! tho the sorceress is just weird! yay! meredith muave ryder!
"
chapter 30 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
"
freaking amazing. i was holding my breath the whole time ... omigoddd so good! i'm crying again, but with happiness this time ><
"
chapter 30 review
Ilana
said:
"
Amazing. I think it was my favorite chapter yet. I want more information about the spell Ryder used, though, and how he got bewitched or whatever.
"
chapter 30 review
Music Lover ♥ Taylor Swift Fanatic ♥ HP Rox
said:
"
OMG! YAY! this is SOOOOOOOOOOO good! you MUST write more SOON!
"
chapter 30 review
Sarah
said:
"
Can you update two chapters per day??? I check like everyday and for more than a week there hasn't been anything updated!!!! ugghhhh I"m dying he...more
"
chapter 31 review
Music Lover ♥ Taylor Swift Fanatic ♥ HP Rox
said:
"
I LOVE THIS CHAPTER! totally worth the wait!
"
chapter 31 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
Holly, thank you. Thank you a bijillion times. You just made my awesome day into an awesomeness day. Great job, Clari is awesome. A little corky but h...more
"
chapter 31 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
Awesome!:D
I love Clari, she is pretty cool.
I have waited for this chapter for soo long...and its definitely worth it, love it!:D "
I love Clari, she is pretty cool.
I have waited for this chapter for soo long...and its definitely worth it, love it!:D "
chapter 31 review
Sella
said:
"
Aww. :) I love how Morgan changes, how when she first finds out she's pregnant she's horrified and doesn't want a baby, and now she's glad and loves M...more
"
chapter 31 review
Sophie
said:
"
i hope her and Ryder resolve the feud soon
and Clari was nice to come :) "
and Clari was nice to come :) "
chapter 31 review
Mindy
said:
"
Absolutely no pressure.....to get the next chapter out sooner!!!! ;-}
"
chapter 31 review
Kim
said:
"
youve gotta be kidding me.
this chapter isnt boring !!
this is a record. 2 happy chapters in a row.
gods im so happy that merry's aliv...more "
this chapter isnt boring !!
this is a record. 2 happy chapters in a row.
gods im so happy that merry's aliv...more "
chapter 31 review
Amber
said:
"
said:
sweet. well they better finish this feud. really i think that they should be mature about it and end this thing. "
sweet. well they better finish this feud. really i think that they should be mature about it and end this thing. "
chapter 31 review
Brenna
said:
"
LOVE THIS!
Write more soon!
Gods, I hope this becomes a book. SO good. :) "
Write more soon!
Gods, I hope this becomes a book. SO good. :) "
chapter 31 review
Huneeya
said:
"
awww merry's so cute :) ha ha all the clari parts made me laugh :D
"
chapter 31 review
Aria
said:
"
GAH, OMGOODNESS!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE RIGHT MORE!!! PLLLLEEEEAAAAASSEEE!!!! I JUST FINISHED CHAPTER 31!!! TELL ME THERE'S MORE!!!
"
chapter 31 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
awwwwwwwwwww! was morgan imagining that or was she actually... ya know seeing into the future?
"
chapter 32 review
Acacia
said:
"
I loved this. Especially Mo and Madison's sisterly love/fighting.
"
chapter 32 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
Madison is awesome. I'm almost thinking she's my favorite now . . . Mmm not yet, but she is tied for 1st with Morgan. Anyways, thanks for adding this ...more
"
chapter 32 review
Sella
said:
"
Oh, no. OH, NO. Rule #29837509372509375 of Hollyism: When there are three overly happy chapters in a row, you know that something VERY VERY VERY bad i...more
"
chapter 32 review
Huneeya
said:
"
awesome! :)
i rly wish morgan had just come out with it and told madison though :(
and OMG mad lost her virginity when she was fourteen?! no w...more "
i rly wish morgan had just come out with it and told madison though :(
and OMG mad lost her virginity when she was fourteen?! no w...more "
chapter 32 review
Kim
said:
"
Ha!
we were telling you that madison was being rude and mean about the nursery and the clothes and parties.
it looks like you acually listen...more "
we were telling you that madison was being rude and mean about the nursery and the clothes and parties.
it looks like you acually listen...more "
chapter 32 review
Music Lover ♥ Taylor Swift Fanatic ♥ HP Rox
said:
"
oooooooooooooooh! great chapter! i have a feeling something bad is gonna happen soon.......
"
chapter 32 review
Sophie
said:
"
get Ryder and Morgan married already!
and tell Madison abt him.. she will understand..?
write more ;) "
and tell Madison abt him.. she will understand..?
write more ;) "
chapter 32 review
Ilana
said:
"
Awesomesauce. Only a couple typos, and other than that it's great. :)
"
chapter 32 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
Love it!!;D
MADISON LOST HER VIRGINITY WHEN SHE WAS 14?
I'am not shocked just surprised!
Anyway, awesome chapter! "
MADISON LOST HER VIRGINITY WHEN SHE WAS 14?
I'am not shocked just surprised!
Anyway, awesome chapter! "
chapter 32 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!! hmmmmm sorta like Mad a little more...
"
chapter 33 review
Madelyn
said:
"
YES! That was awesome! AND HOW THE HELL CAN YOU TORTURE US WITH THAT AWESOME/ TOTALLY INFURIATING CLIFFHANGER!
"
chapter 33 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
OM MY F-ING GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *jumps out of chair, and screams at the top of my lungs* HOLLY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...more
"
chapter 33 review
Mindy
said:
"
What the...what the...WHAT THE FLYING CATFISH???!!!! Are they finally going to find out???!!!! I bet they're totally going to FREAK!!!!!!! PLEASE WRIT...more
"
chapter 33 review
Kriss
said:
"
I must say this for probably the hundreth time... YOU AND YOUR DAMN CLIFFHANGERS!!! You better not wait until after november to finish this chapter, l...more
"
chapter 33 review
Huneeya
said:
"
ohhh my gosh
ohmigosh
this did not just happen
no way, nah uh, that did NOT just happen
i hope for the sake of morgan and ryder and me...more "
ohmigosh
this did not just happen
no way, nah uh, that did NOT just happen
i hope for the sake of morgan and ryder and me...more "
chapter 33 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
wowowowoowowowowowowwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!!! no no no no no no!!!!! they're going ot kill him!!!!!!!
"
chapter 33 review
Maryam_Music Lover
said:
"
I'am not caring ONE bit about NaNoWrImO...but you ARE writing the next chapter before it okay??I MEAN YOU HAD to make it a Cliffhanger!!!!:PPPPPP
...more "
...more "
chapter 33 review
Sophie
said:
"
aww, this scene with Ryder was so cute :)
and her dad is such an ass
holy crap! sumone walked in! i think its Madison.. uh-oh! "
and her dad is such an ass
holy crap! sumone walked in! i think its Madison.. uh-oh! "
chapter 33 review
Nicole
said:
"
ahhhhhckkk....
writemorewritemorewrtiemorewritemore
WRITE MOREE!!!!!!!
im addicted to this book!!! so this needs to be finished!!! i n...more "
writemorewritemorewrtiemorewritemore
WRITE MOREE!!!!!!!
im addicted to this book!!! so this needs to be finished!!! i n...more "
chapter 33 review
Shelby
said:
"
Oh god, I really hope that isn't her mom. There may be some hope if it was Madison. You sooooooooooooooo have to write soon!
"
chapter 33 review
Nina !!! im the vampire girl!!! u jealous?
said:
"
holy crap.that was amazing keep writing please!!! who is it!?!? whos at the door???????? who? who! who? ahhhhh!!!!!
"
chapter 33 review
Kat
said:
"
omygoodness... CLIFFHANGER! okay, so when i first started reading this story, i was only going to read a few chapters, but what can i say? you've got ...more
"
chapter 33 review
Rashmi
said:
"
fantastic...just loved it. Just waiting to know 'who was it?' Do continue writing...
"
chapter 34 review
Acacia
said:
"
I love Madison. I absolutely love, love, love Madison.
"We tell each other stuff, like which enemy we’re screwing this week."
...more "
"We tell each other stuff, like which enemy we’re screwing this week."
...more "
chapter 34 review
♫Krista♫
said:
"
I can finally say:
I LOVE THIS MORE THAN ANYONE ELSE!!!!!!!
Anyways, I know you did a very bad thing about writing this during NaNo, b...more "
I LOVE THIS MORE THAN ANYONE ELSE!!!!!!!
Anyways, I know you did a very bad thing about writing this during NaNo, b...more "
chapter 34 review
Nina !!! im the vampire girl!!! u jealous?
said:
"
WOOHOO! amazing!!!! its my fav story ever!!!
"
chapter 34 review
Sella
said:
"
AHHHH!!!! YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW FREAKING HAPPY I AM THAT YOU POSTED MORE OF THIS!!! I DON'T EVEN CARE THAT YOU WERE BEING A NAUGHTY GIRL AND NOT DOING ...more
"
chapter 34 review
Huneeya
said:
"
HOLLY!!!
MY WISH TOTALLY CAME TRUE!!!!!! AAAHHHHH!!!!! IT WAS MADISON!!!! AHHHHHHH!!! IM SOOOOOOOOOO HAPPPYYYYY!!!!!!!
I CANT EVEN TELL Y...more "
MY WISH TOTALLY CAME TRUE!!!!!! AAAHHHHH!!!!! IT WAS MADISON!!!! AHHHHHHH!!! IM SOOOOOOOOOO HAPPPYYYYY!!!!!!!
I CANT EVEN TELL Y...more "
chapter 34 review
Esther GirlwritingRun,JustRun!Readitorikillyou!
said:
"
uh oh... yea hating mad again...
"
chapter 34 review
Shelby
said:
"
Yey! Thank Madison... Although that girl can't keep her mouth shut. Someone is going to find out!
"
chapter 34 review
Kim
said:
"
AAAHHHH HOLLY HOW COULD YOU POST A NEW CHAPTER WITHOUT TELLING ME IMMEDIATLY!!!!!!
at least it was madison. "
at least it was madison. "
chapter 34 review
Laura (Or Cal! :P)
said:
"
Ohmygosh!!! I need more! :( Can't stand it! How does it end?!?!?!?!!!
That was amazing, Holly. :) "
That was amazing, Holly. :) "
chapter 34 review
♥Jess♥
said:
"
Uh, wow. Uh-oh. Everyone is going to find out sooner or later. Ryder isn't going to die, is he, Holly? Please don't make him be six feet under...
"
chapter 34 review
Ellen ♥
said:
"
WOW! I just spent the past one and a half hours catching up on this story.. and wow!
I looove Madison even more now! "
I looove Madison even more now! "
