The Experiment - Prologue- Silence by Kenzie T

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New story idea I just got! Wahoo! Finally! I don't really know much about the story right now, so I'll post more of a description later when I find out. Enjoy. :)



chapters

chapter 1: Prologue- Silence

chapter 2: Chapter 1- Dreams

chapter 5: Chapter 4- Lunch

chapter 7: Chapter 6- Cheating


Prologue- Silence
chapter 1   —   updated Apr 25, 2009   —   3035 characters   —   69 people liked this writing   —   60 reviews of this writing
The girl was tense. Her eyes were closed, her fists balled up next to her sides. A sweat broke across her forehead. Her breathing was ragged and staggered.

She appeared to be in her mid-twenties. A sheet of long silky black hair fell from her head and encompassed her body. Her face was contorted into a mixture of pain, and nausea.

She had the look of a mature woman, but was touched with the face of a young lady. Brown freckles adorned the skin underneath her eyes, running from one side of her face to the other.

Suddenly she jerked to the side, her right side folding while her left side stretched. Her eyes flew open to reveal a pair of green knowing eyes.

The door in the corner of the room opened, and a man walked in.

He wore a tight pinstriped suit that may have once fit him, but wasn’t so kind now. His shoes were glossy and shined, throwing off the light from the ceiling fixture, and his brown hair was brushed back with oil.

The girl on the floor stared at the wall behind the man, taking no notice of him.

Slowly he walked over to her, his shoes clip-clapping on the floor. He stopped in front of her, bending down until they were at eye level.

Still she did not acknowledge his presence. Her lips were moving quickly, and a muttering sound escaped her lips.

The man sighed, pulling out a handkerchief and wiping his face. He replaced the material, and then looked at her again.

She was still.

He sighed. “Do we have to go through this every time I come in?” he asked, his tone bored.

Again there was no response.

“I’ll take that as a yes then.” He stood up, his knees popping. “Would you like to hear the news today?”

This time he didn’t wait for her, he just plowed on. “We’re starting the experiment again. I know I told you we would respect your wishes and not, but given your lack of … eh, help we’ve decided to retry the failed attempts.”

If she understood anything he was saying, she made no notion of it.

“Do you hear me? We’re re-starting the experiment.”

No response.

He jabbed at her with his foot. “That means new subjects, new discoveries … new deaths.” He jabbed again. “I’m not kidding.”

The room was silent.

“Respond, darn it! I haven’t worked my way up to the top for nothing. Answer me!” His voice went more high-pitched.

She continued staring at the wall.

“Answer me!”

No response.

The man kicked her in the side, his face twisting into a scowl. He growled and kicked her again, beating hard into her side. He kicked again and again, harder with each blow.

“Answer me!” he yelled again.

This time she turned and looked at him, her eyes gleaming.

He stopped kicking and stared at her, his mouth opening slightly the longer he looked.

She stared into his eyes for a few seconds, and then turned away.

He dropped to the floor, going stiff.

“Starting the experiment again would be a dangerous mistake for you.”

And then the room got eerily silent.
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Captain Rayana said:
" Ooh, creepy...But I like it :D You should continue! "
886144
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" OMIGOSSHHH so awesome!! pleez write more :) "
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♥ Tink ♥ (Paige) said:
" Disturbing... but very, very, very good....

Darn U, Kenz! U hooked me on another story! "
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Jess said:
" Omg, I love it! PLEASE continue!!!!!! "
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Sella said:
" o!!m!!!!!!g!!!!!!!!! kenzie!!! this is utterly, unbelievably amazing!!! i love it!!! you're SUCH a talented author, and for some reason, i feel that t...more "
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Kassy said:
" OMG!!!!!!!!! I love it! What experiment is it? WRITE!!!!! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" wow, really eerie, but very good, Kenzie! "
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Violet said:
" Scary.....Sounds really cool. Can't wait to read more. "
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Kaitie♥ said:
" Super Good!Like it, scary though :D "
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Dee said:
" Prologue
Very well done...Great opening. My favorite line:
He wore a tight pinstriped suit that may have once fit him, but wasn’t so kind...more "
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~Clare~ said:
" Love it already!!! "
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♥♥maddie♥♥ said:
" wow... it's kinda like your trying to hard to sound like a good writer though. i mean, it's good but everything is over-exaggerated. i didn't know you...more "
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Roni said:
" erm, what's going on? That was weird (but in a good way!)

Also, the first four paragraphs could be made into one... There's a good amount of ...more "
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Wolf (Em) said:
" oh, wow. "
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Hannah said:
" Soooooo good!!!!! "
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*Mikayla* said:
" Ooooh, good! "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Awesome ^^ "
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chapter 2 review
Kassy said:
" My dad’s a lawyer, so he gets a big paycheck. This makes him a really good liar. .

That line is HILARIOUS! Love it! "
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♥ Tink ♥ (Paige) said:
" MORE!!! MORE!! MORE!!!! *screams*

GOSH KENZ! WHY MUST YOU DO THIS TO ME EVERYTIME?!?!?

Fav line- " Is dreaming of a girl you’...more "
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Sarah said:
" Wow. Again, wow. This is really good. I absolutly love it. :D "
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Sella said:
" this is such a great start!! it's really interesting. i need to know more!! Pleease right more XD "
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Jess said:
" =) =) =) =)
Nice, me likes!!! "
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Drizzleherb said:
" Awesome, Kenzie! Keep writing! "
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Dee said:
" Chapter 1
Brilliant! My favorite line:
My dad’s a lawyer, so he gets a big paycheck. This makes him a really good liar. "
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~Clare~ said:
" lol! liking it! "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" oooh ... intrigue :) "
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Roni said:
" I applaud you. :) This was very interesting. "
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Hannah said:
" loving it more and more!!!!! "
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chapter 3 review
Captain Rayana said:
" He's going to get caught >< "
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Sella said:
" oooh!! he's going to fall asleep and have the dream again!! :D "
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Jess said:
" Lol. I bet I know what's coming...


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♥ Tink ♥ (Paige) said:
" Loving it, Kenz. More detail in your cubi!! :) "
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Dee said:
" Chapter 2
Well done in deed!
Favorite line: The extra ex’s are for the two times she’d dumped him for another guy and gotten back toget...more "
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~Clare~ said:
" I like it a lot, but it seemed to have a lot of rambling going on, not having too much to do with the actual story. It's ok, but maybe just a little l...more "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" uh-oh ... "
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♥ Tink ♥ (Paige) said:
" HA! I KNEW IT! HE DREAMED ABOUT THE GIRL! "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Haha, love the disputing :D "
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Sella said:
" lol. i love them, they're an awesome group of friends!! and you've got me on the edge of my seat, needing to know what the experiment is and who the g...more "
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Dee said:
" Chapter 3
I especially like how you segued from the dream to the classroom.
Outstanding dialog as well. "
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Jess said:
" Wait... what? I confuzzled.... But in a goooood way... "
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~Clare~ said:
" I loved the dream! "
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Roni said:
" And why am I thinking that Audry is connected to the girl in some strange way? Or that maybe a romance will randomly spring up (like in soooo many sto...more "
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chapter 5 review
♥ Tink ♥ (Paige) said:
" I KNEW IT! HE LOOOOOVVVEEESS HER DOESN'T HE!!!

Great writing, very captivating. "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" :] yay i luv this story so far!! can't wait for more ^_^ "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Oh god, I know what you mean about the cafeteria food :p Anyway, I love the chapter, as always :D "
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Jess said:
" Lol. Heh, their cafeteria food sounds like mine: overpriced and disgusting "
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Dee said:
" Chapter 4
Truly "brilliant" writing. There are too many lines that I love to be able to pick a favorite. I eagerly await the next chapt...more "
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Sella said:
" oooh, dustin and audrey, heehee!! :D lol. anyways, soo good!! "
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chapter 6 review
Jess said:
" Omg, it just keeps getting better...
This is so awesome!!!
There are so many things i'm wondering, I'm not even going to say all the things ...more "
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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" yaaaaay :) more? pleez ^_^ "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Aw, poor girl :( "
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Sella said:
" amazing!!!! i wonder, what's the experiment? what happened to the girl? i NEED to know more!! write more NOWWW!!!!!! "
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Dee said:
" Chapter 5
And the plot thickens :] "
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chapter 7 review
Dee said:
" Chapter 6.
OMGosh, I had the exact thing happen to me in my high school Algebra class. I was mortified. "
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chapter 7 review
Captain Rayana said:
" Awz, :( "
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♥ Tink ♥ (Paige) said:
" Ch. 5-6

Intriguing, still. I want to know what happens next! "
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Sella said:
" aww poor dustin :(. anyways. WRITE MORE!! "
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Jess said:
" lol. One of my friends does that whole "borrow a pencil" thing except with anything else.
And by the way...what is microflora? "
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Roni said:
" OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

I like this!

And I have a feeling that this chapter is ending with... dun dun dun... FORESHA...more "
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Brendan said:
" ... words abadon me. Well, one word doesnt.. fantastic! keep going dont stop! do u think you could check out the story i have on my profile? i really ...more "
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