The Experiment - Prologue- Silence by Kenzie T
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New story idea I just got! Wahoo! Finally! I don't really know much about the story right now, so I'll post more of a description later when I find out. Enjoy. :)
chapters
chapter 1:
Prologue- Silence
chapter 2:
Chapter 1- Dreams
chapter 3:
Chapter 2- Mr. Flatrino
chapter 4:
Chapter 3- Bickering
chapter 5:
Chapter 4- Lunch
chapter 6:
Chapter 5- Babysitting
chapter 7:
Chapter 6- Cheating
Prologue- Silence
chapter 1
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updated Apr 25, 2009
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The girl was tense. Her eyes were closed, her fists balled up next to her sides. A sweat broke across her forehead. Her breathing was ragged and staggered.
She appeared to be in her mid-twenties. A sheet of long silky black hair fell from her head and encompassed her body. Her face was contorted into a mixture of pain, and nausea.
She had the look of a mature woman, but was touched with the face of a young lady. Brown freckles adorned the skin underneath her eyes, running from one side of her face to the other.
Suddenly she jerked to the side, her right side folding while her left side stretched. Her eyes flew open to reveal a pair of green knowing eyes.
The door in the corner of the room opened, and a man walked in.
He wore a tight pinstriped suit that may have once fit him, but wasn’t so kind now. His shoes were glossy and shined, throwing off the light from the ceiling fixture, and his brown hair was brushed back with oil.
The girl on the floor stared at the wall behind the man, taking no notice of him.
Slowly he walked over to her, his shoes clip-clapping on the floor. He stopped in front of her, bending down until they were at eye level.
Still she did not acknowledge his presence. Her lips were moving quickly, and a muttering sound escaped her lips.
The man sighed, pulling out a handkerchief and wiping his face. He replaced the material, and then looked at her again.
She was still.
He sighed. “Do we have to go through this every time I come in?” he asked, his tone bored.
Again there was no response.
“I’ll take that as a yes then.” He stood up, his knees popping. “Would you like to hear the news today?”
This time he didn’t wait for her, he just plowed on. “We’re starting the experiment again. I know I told you we would respect your wishes and not, but given your lack of … eh, help we’ve decided to retry the failed attempts.”
If she understood anything he was saying, she made no notion of it.
“Do you hear me? We’re re-starting the experiment.”
No response.
He jabbed at her with his foot. “That means new subjects, new discoveries … new deaths.” He jabbed again. “I’m not kidding.”
The room was silent.
“Respond, darn it! I haven’t worked my way up to the top for nothing. Answer me!” His voice went more high-pitched.
She continued staring at the wall.
“Answer me!”
No response.
The man kicked her in the side, his face twisting into a scowl. He growled and kicked her again, beating hard into her side. He kicked again and again, harder with each blow.
“Answer me!” he yelled again.
This time she turned and looked at him, her eyes gleaming.
He stopped kicking and stared at her, his mouth opening slightly the longer he looked.
She stared into his eyes for a few seconds, and then turned away.
He dropped to the floor, going stiff.
“Starting the experiment again would be a dangerous mistake for you.”
And then the room got eerily silent.
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She appeared to be in her mid-twenties. A sheet of long silky black hair fell from her head and encompassed her body. Her face was contorted into a mixture of pain, and nausea.
She had the look of a mature woman, but was touched with the face of a young lady. Brown freckles adorned the skin underneath her eyes, running from one side of her face to the other.
Suddenly she jerked to the side, her right side folding while her left side stretched. Her eyes flew open to reveal a pair of green knowing eyes.
The door in the corner of the room opened, and a man walked in.
He wore a tight pinstriped suit that may have once fit him, but wasn’t so kind now. His shoes were glossy and shined, throwing off the light from the ceiling fixture, and his brown hair was brushed back with oil.
The girl on the floor stared at the wall behind the man, taking no notice of him.
Slowly he walked over to her, his shoes clip-clapping on the floor. He stopped in front of her, bending down until they were at eye level.
Still she did not acknowledge his presence. Her lips were moving quickly, and a muttering sound escaped her lips.
The man sighed, pulling out a handkerchief and wiping his face. He replaced the material, and then looked at her again.
She was still.
He sighed. “Do we have to go through this every time I come in?” he asked, his tone bored.
Again there was no response.
“I’ll take that as a yes then.” He stood up, his knees popping. “Would you like to hear the news today?”
This time he didn’t wait for her, he just plowed on. “We’re starting the experiment again. I know I told you we would respect your wishes and not, but given your lack of … eh, help we’ve decided to retry the failed attempts.”
If she understood anything he was saying, she made no notion of it.
“Do you hear me? We’re re-starting the experiment.”
No response.
He jabbed at her with his foot. “That means new subjects, new discoveries … new deaths.” He jabbed again. “I’m not kidding.”
The room was silent.
“Respond, darn it! I haven’t worked my way up to the top for nothing. Answer me!” His voice went more high-pitched.
She continued staring at the wall.
“Answer me!”
No response.
The man kicked her in the side, his face twisting into a scowl. He growled and kicked her again, beating hard into her side. He kicked again and again, harder with each blow.
“Answer me!” he yelled again.
This time she turned and looked at him, her eyes gleaming.
He stopped kicking and stared at her, his mouth opening slightly the longer he looked.
She stared into his eyes for a few seconds, and then turned away.
He dropped to the floor, going stiff.
“Starting the experiment again would be a dangerous mistake for you.”
And then the room got eerily silent.
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chapter 1 review
♥ Tink ♥ (Paige)
said:
"
Disturbing... but very, very, very good....
Darn U, Kenz! U hooked me on another story! "
Darn U, Kenz! U hooked me on another story! "
chapter 1 review
Sella
said:
"
o!!m!!!!!!g!!!!!!!!! kenzie!!! this is utterly, unbelievably amazing!!! i love it!!! you're SUCH a talented author, and for some reason, i feel that t...more
"
chapter 1 review
Dee
said:
"
Prologue
Very well done...Great opening. My favorite line:
He wore a tight pinstriped suit that may have once fit him, but wasn’t so kind...more "
Very well done...Great opening. My favorite line:
He wore a tight pinstriped suit that may have once fit him, but wasn’t so kind...more "
chapter 1 review
♥♥maddie♥♥
said:
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wow... it's kinda like your trying to hard to sound like a good writer though. i mean, it's good but everything is over-exaggerated. i didn't know you...more
"
chapter 1 review
Roni
said:
"
erm, what's going on? That was weird (but in a good way!)
Also, the first four paragraphs could be made into one... There's a good amount of ...more "
Also, the first four paragraphs could be made into one... There's a good amount of ...more "
chapter 2 review
Kassy
said:
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My dad’s a lawyer, so he gets a big paycheck. This makes him a really good liar. .
That line is HILARIOUS! Love it! "
That line is HILARIOUS! Love it! "
chapter 2 review
♥ Tink ♥ (Paige)
said:
"
MORE!!! MORE!! MORE!!!! *screams*
GOSH KENZ! WHY MUST YOU DO THIS TO ME EVERYTIME?!?!?
Fav line- " Is dreaming of a girl you’...more "
GOSH KENZ! WHY MUST YOU DO THIS TO ME EVERYTIME?!?!?
Fav line- " Is dreaming of a girl you’...more "
chapter 2 review
Sella
said:
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this is such a great start!! it's really interesting. i need to know more!! Pleease right more XD
"
chapter 2 review
Dee
said:
"
Chapter 1
Brilliant! My favorite line:
My dad’s a lawyer, so he gets a big paycheck. This makes him a really good liar. "
Brilliant! My favorite line:
My dad’s a lawyer, so he gets a big paycheck. This makes him a really good liar. "
chapter 3 review
Dee
said:
"
Chapter 2
Well done in deed!
Favorite line: The extra ex’s are for the two times she’d dumped him for another guy and gotten back toget...more "
Well done in deed!
Favorite line: The extra ex’s are for the two times she’d dumped him for another guy and gotten back toget...more "
chapter 3 review
~Clare~
said:
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I like it a lot, but it seemed to have a lot of rambling going on, not having too much to do with the actual story. It's ok, but maybe just a little l...more
"
chapter 4 review
Sella
said:
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lol. i love them, they're an awesome group of friends!! and you've got me on the edge of my seat, needing to know what the experiment is and who the g...more
"
chapter 4 review
Dee
said:
"
Chapter 3
I especially like how you segued from the dream to the classroom.
Outstanding dialog as well. "
I especially like how you segued from the dream to the classroom.
Outstanding dialog as well. "
chapter 4 review
Roni
said:
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And why am I thinking that Audry is connected to the girl in some strange way? Or that maybe a romance will randomly spring up (like in soooo many sto...more
"
chapter 5 review
♥ Tink ♥ (Paige)
said:
"
I KNEW IT! HE LOOOOOVVVEEESS HER DOESN'T HE!!!
Great writing, very captivating. "
Great writing, very captivating. "
chapter 5 review
Captain Rayana
said:
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Oh god, I know what you mean about the cafeteria food :p Anyway, I love the chapter, as always :D
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chapter 5 review
Jess
said:
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Lol. Heh, their cafeteria food sounds like mine: overpriced and disgusting
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chapter 5 review
Dee
said:
"
Chapter 4
Truly "brilliant" writing. There are too many lines that I love to be able to pick a favorite. I eagerly await the next chapt...more "
Truly "brilliant" writing. There are too many lines that I love to be able to pick a favorite. I eagerly await the next chapt...more "
chapter 6 review
Jess
said:
"
Omg, it just keeps getting better...
This is so awesome!!!
There are so many things i'm wondering, I'm not even going to say all the things ...more "
This is so awesome!!!
There are so many things i'm wondering, I'm not even going to say all the things ...more "
chapter 6 review
Sella
said:
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amazing!!!! i wonder, what's the experiment? what happened to the girl? i NEED to know more!! write more NOWWW!!!!!!
"
chapter 7 review
Dee
said:
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Chapter 6.
OMGosh, I had the exact thing happen to me in my high school Algebra class. I was mortified. "
OMGosh, I had the exact thing happen to me in my high school Algebra class. I was mortified. "
chapter 7 review
♥ Tink ♥ (Paige)
said:
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Ch. 5-6
Intriguing, still. I want to know what happens next! "
Intriguing, still. I want to know what happens next! "
chapter 7 review
Jess
said:
"
lol. One of my friends does that whole "borrow a pencil" thing except with anything else.
And by the way...what is microflora? "
And by the way...what is microflora? "
chapter 7 review
Roni
said:
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
I like this!
And I have a feeling that this chapter is ending with... dun dun dun... FORESHA...more "
I like this!
And I have a feeling that this chapter is ending with... dun dun dun... FORESHA...more "










