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Soulwrecked - Paintball by Pumpkin Head

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Literature & Fiction

tags
games, gladiators, life, romance, terror, war

description:
Loosely based on a dream. Sahara, a blonde girl with orange eyes, is an arch enemy of Snow. But when a new boy, Jalard, known as Ocean, comes to the gladiator world of Talair, what will she do? He has come on a mission to kill Snow and Sahara, but the muse/god Zadet has different plans for all three of them...

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chapters

chapter 1: Paintball

chapter 2: Pine Needles

chapter 3: Muddy Waters

chapter 4: Orange Eyes

chapter 5: Mother Hen

chapter 6: Blaze

chapter 7: Chosen One

chapter 8: Offering

chapter 9: Blaze and Heat

chapter 10: New Game

chapter 11: Death Story

chapter 12: Three Small

chapter 13: Rottweilers

chapter 14: Disappointed

chapter 15: Bandaged

chapter 16: Liger

chapter 17: Blocked

chapter 18: Names

chapter 19: Hide Me

chapter 20: Zetzy

chapter 21: Sick and Old

chapter 22: Chocolate

chapter 23: Flag

chapter 24: Catch You

chapter 25: Free Day

chapter 26: Dirty Fight

chapter 27: Just a Dream

chapter 28: Live Life

chapter 29: Remembrance

chapter 30: Blue Lights

chapter 31: Knives

chapter 32: Reasons

chapter 33: Burned

chapter 34: Punishment

chapter 35: Base Hurcamr Ocean

chapter 36: A Friend

chapter 37: Water Safety

chapter 38: Sailboats

chapter 39: Petty Fight

chapter 40: Clothing

chapter 41: Stabbed

chapter 42: Suffocation

chapter 43: Apples

chapter 44: Gone to Heaven

chapter 45: Orders

chapter 46: Pirate

chapter 47: Stormy Seas

chapter 48: Protection

chapter 49: Broken

chapter 50: Idea

chapter 51: Raft

chapter 52: New Beginnings

chapter 53: Confession

chapter 54: Looking Back

chapter 55: Answers

chapter 56: Wet Cat

chapter 57: Distraction

chapter 58: Hunger

chapter 59: Wish Upon A Star

chapter 60: Lighthouse

chapter 61: First Place

chapter 62: Healings

chapter 63: Smothered

chapter 64: News

chapter 65: Plyte

chapter 66: Zapped Away

chapter 67: Swap

chapter 68: Earth's Choc

chapter 69: Final Chapter--Family

chapter 70: Author's Note


Paintball
chapter 1   —   updated Mar 04, 2009   —   3044 characters   —   267 people liked this writing   —   225 reviews of this writing
Sahara knew this was no ordinary game of paintball. There were no such things as playful, ordinary, simple games here. This was a place where those who survived the game lived for the next one. This was the planet Talair, and this was a place for no baby.

The shipment of new players and terrors that were the bane of Sahara’s existence had arrived this morning, effectively knocking this game from next week to today.

As Sahara caught her breath behind a rock, her followers passing her by inches, she thanked her muse for giving her the idea to take a mud bath to hide her blonde hair and bright clothing she had been forced to wear. She was on the Prey’s side this time. She wondered for a moment why she seemed to be on the Prey’s side more often than the Predator’s when it came to search-and-shoot games.

She gave a mental shrug and caught her breathing when she heard someone on the other side of the rock she was crouched by. It seemed to be a boy by his deep breaths. Sahara hoped that is wasn’t Snow. Snow had always had a grudge on her, she didn’t know why. And she knew if it was Snow, he would show no mercy. He was one of the rare ones who had been born and raised on Talair.

The hairs on the back of her neck rose as she recalled what he had whispered to her as the gun was placed in his hands. He had hefted it in his almost bulky, muscular arms and grinned at her with those icy eyes he got his name for. He took one long step towards he rand strung a lock of her long hair between them.

“I’ll see you out there, hot stuff.” He growled in his rough voice and she shoved him away.

She had gotten her name for her looks, but she hated it when the boys and men here mocked her about it. “Hot stuff” and “heat wave” were two of the most common plays on her name.

“You’ll only see me under your boot in your dreams, icicle.” She replied and his eyes narrowed.

“We’ll see about that, desert wind. We’ll see,” Then he had walked off to the other men and women who were on the Predator side.

The gunshot went off to let the Prey have a head start and Sahara had bolted off into the several acres of woods that they had fenced in for this game and more.

She had five hours to stay safe and not get hit.

The boy on the other side of the rock moved and brought Sahara out of her thoughts with a jolt. She tensed up and the movements stopped again. She bit her lip and closed her eyes tight, waiting patiently for the enemy to go away or find her. She hoped it would be the former.

Suddenly, air from someone breathing deeply touched her face and she took in a hissing breath. They found me! I’m done for!

“Shh!” Two fingers pressed against her lips and they were soft and calloused at the same time. Her eyes flipped open to see a boy kneeling in front of her. He pushed up against her so she was tight between his body and the rock. Another pair with guns ran past.

As soon as they were safely gone, Sahara asked, “Why did you save me?”
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Sella said:
" wow! this is really intruguing! i love it. :D "
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Niki said:
" This is really cool! I love it when I get ideas from dreams! I recently had one about Morgan Freeman telling me to help a big group of immortal cats…more "
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Michelle said:
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" WOW.. "
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Niki said:
" I am really confused about the whole muse thing. Would you mind explaining that? Other than that, it's really good! "
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Michelle said:
" omg amazing!!!

lolz i love the way you sneak humor into it "
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Nicole said:
" I liked this chapter but...what's with saying that he has blue-green eyes, then orange eyes, then ocean eyes? "
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Morgan said:
" The description of Shadow's death is incredible! ^V^ Mushy, but incrediable just the same. "
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love the flash back "
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Michelle said:
" OMG WHY DID YOU STOP????

gah, the suspense!!! "
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Captain Rayana said:
" I iz a bit confused, but I still like it :D "
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Sella said:
" oh no!! 0.0 whats happening?? "
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Morgan said:
" Don't. Stop. It seemed though, that you changed his personality..... Or if it's not the same person, could you make it clearer? "
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Michelle said:
" lol its so funny that he doesnt know he's conversing with the person he's supposed to kill. "
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Michelle said:
" XD just as i mentioned it. *feels like mind reader*

and omg! "
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" OH OH!!Now he'll know that Sahara is the one he has to kill..OMG!!This is amazing!! "
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Michelle said:
" omgomg!! *intrigued* type up the next chapter--quick!!!! "
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XD this is amazing! "
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Michelle said:
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" I love it! This is really good, Shan! "
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" Oh Oh!!Shannie, I love your story!!:D "
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" oh no!! 0.0 why is he disappointed?!?!?! what's WRONG with him?!?! "
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" Shannnnn! I need more! ASAP! "
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Michelle said:
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and why's he disappointed? "
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Captain Rayana said:
" *dramatic music* "
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Michelle said:
" omg what?? "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" This is a really good action packed story, I am loving it!!!!! "
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Maryam_Music Lover said:
" Oh no...Snow..D-Died!!??? "
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Michelle said:
" omgomgomg is he gonna tell her??

and what did zadet say to snow?

gah, i love this!!! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
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♥ Rachel♥ said:
" *skips around singing "Jalard likes Sahara Jalard likes Sahara"* "
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Maryam_Music Lover said:
" Omg.....Zadet is one twisted.............muse. "
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chapter 18 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" This is just plain awesome!!!!!! Keep writing, and plzzz don't stop its really good! Infact great, wonderful, out of this world, any more adjectives t…more "
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Niki said:
" Please write more! hey, i'd love it if you'd look at my story Forever. new critics are always good. "
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Michelle said:
" why is she suddenly so hurt now that snow's gone? i thought they hated each other...? "
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Maryam_Music Lover said:
" So sad...but great at the same time. "
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chapter 19 review
Michelle said:
" omg!!

but he can get it, cuz the liger was only supposed to target snow, right? "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" I love it! Keep writing, plzzzzz don't stop there!!!!!!!! "
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Sella said:
" oh no!!!! PLEASE don't kill blaze!! PLEASE!! :( "
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Jess said:
" Keep writing!

=) "
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Maryam_Music Lover said:
" Please..Please..let nothing happen to Blaze...let him be strong enough!!!Haha, Awesome chapter! "
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Captain Rayana said:
" Gah! Awesome :D "
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Michelle said:
" omg youre so good at describing things...

hmmm... somehow i think i know where youre going with this... and im not going to say anything... "
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Sella said:
" this is still amazing! lol. im glad you posted after so long! post more now! :D "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" I LOVE this story! Im so glad you finally updated it! Oh plz dont keep us waiting =P. I cant wait to read further on! "
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Jess said:
" WOOT!! Go Blaze!!!!

Thanks for updating!!!!
Don't wait so long this time, k? :)
I'll go insane "
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Morgan said:
" *sigh* You made Sahara a weeper.... "
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Maryam_Music Lover said:
" Yayyy!!!!! He Lived!!:D "
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Sella said:
" omg!! did ocean do something? or zadet? what happened?!?! "
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" I love it!!!! Cant wait to read the next chapter!!!!! "
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Michelle said:
" gah omg! i think i might know who killed it...? "
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Jess said:
" =) "
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" Muahaha... "
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Sella said:
" more more more!! i love this!! :D "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" MORE! I love this story sooo much! "
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Michelle said:
" omg nice!!! why did you have to stop again?!? "
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chapter 23 review
Michelle said:
" gah!! omg shannon are you trying to kill me?

please say ocean just shot that.... "
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Captain Rayana said:
" SUSPENSE! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Suspense!!!!! Hurry write more!!!!!!!! "
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Sarah said:
" No! he cant shoot ocean or sahara!!!! please write the next chapter soon!! "
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Jess said:
" omgomgomgomgomgomgomgomgomg!
can't *twitch* stand it! *twitch*
Update NOW! "
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Sella said:
" NOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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Morgan said:
" The last two chapters are too quick... "
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chapter 24 review
Sella said:
" im soo glad you posted more in this, finally!! its sooo amazing!!! more please!! :D "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" You really need to keep writing!!! This is awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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Michelle said:
" omg its so deep! lolz like philosophical. and i know i spelled that wrong...

but OMG YOURE SOO GOOD AT THIS AND I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPEN…more "
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Jess said:
" THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR UPDATING!!!!!
I was starting to get scared that the previous chapter and Sahara really got shot and died....ending the sto…more "
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chapter 25 review
Michelle said:
" XD!!! "
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Sella said:
" aww :D post more! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" AWESOME! "
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chapter 26 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" Love it! Love it! LOVE IT! "
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Michelle said:
" XD! "
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chapter 27 review
Sarah said:
" i love this story!! its awesome!!! but wait, was that fight really just a dream or was ocean pretending or something? "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Hmm interesting! "
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Michelle said:
" im confused now... "
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Sella said:
" awwww!!! :D "
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chapter 28 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" WRITE MORE PLZ! I love this sooooo much! "
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Michelle said:
" lolz i soo cant wait for the next chapter! hurry up and write!! "
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Sella said:
" write more! i love this! :D "
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Morgan said:
" *sigh* Why has this become about Sahara wandering around between boys? What happened to the trickster god? His prophecies and plots? Ocean's mission?…more "
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chapter 29 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" Awesome! "
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Michelle said:
" ooh, intrigue... "
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chapter 30 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" OMGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!! NEED TO READ MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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Sarah said:
" :O "
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Michelle said:
" OMG NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!! "
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Saved By Grace said:
" GAH!
Suspense ... "
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chapter 31 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" OHMYGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HOLY COW!!!!!! "
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chapter 31 review
Michelle said:
" OMG!! XD this is soo suspenseful!! "
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chapter 32 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" THIS IS AMAZING!!!!! "
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Michelle said:
" le gasp!! "
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chapter 33 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" I was on the edge of my seat for the last few chapters! Still amazing!!!!!!!!! "
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chapter 33 review
Michelle said:
" omg this is so sad....

amazing writing shan!! "
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chapter 33 review
Sella said:
" Ugh!! Jalard deserves it!! I HATE HIM!!! He has the nerve to try to kill Sahara, after everything ... UGH!!! GO DIE, STUPID OCEAN!! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Eeep!!!!!!!! I love it!!!!!!!!!!!1 "
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Michelle said:
" o.m.g... "
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Sella said:
" YESSS!!! GO SAHARA!! OCEAN DESERVES IT!! But wait. Why will Sahara get a punishment? She wasn't part of it! "
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chapter 35 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" Whats going to happen now??????????? "
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Michelle said:
" wow... suspense all over again... youre so good at this, lol "
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chapter 36 review
Sarah said:
" I love this story!!! :D :D "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Need to read more!!!!!!! I absolutly love this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Keep going!!! ☺ "
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Michelle said:
" omg you stopped there? gah! "
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chapter 37 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" Awesome! I love it! "
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Michelle said:
" well i would be mad too. hhmph. "
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chapter 38 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" HOLY COW!!!!!!!!!! I cant wait to read the next chapter. "
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chapter 38 review
Michelle said:
" why am i getting a bad feling about this? shan? "
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chapter 39 review
Michelle said:
" uh-oh... yeah, really bad feeling.

wth is up with ocean..? "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Coool!!! "
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chapter 40 review
Michelle said:
" holy crap!!! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Uh-oh!!!!!!!! "
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chapter 41 review
Michelle said:
" !!!!!!! "
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chapter 41 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" Ahhhh I know I shouldnt like Ocean, but noooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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chapter 42 review
Michelle said:
" OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!! THIS IS NOT HAPPENING!! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" OMGOSH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!!! Its soo good!!!!! "
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chapter 43 review
Michelle said:
" ...okay, im not mad anymore. lol, this chapter is interesting. "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Eep! Love it still! "
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Sarah liked it
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Michelle said:
" well theyre not out of it yet. and here i was starting to be relieved... "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Great job! Its amazing! And uh-oh the storm is coming! "
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chapter 45 review
Michelle said:
" holy crap! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" GAH!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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chapter 46 review
Michelle said:
" not getting the best feeling right now. youre really good at suspense, ggrrrr.... "
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chapter 46 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" Something is going to go wrong. . . "
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chapter 47 review
Michelle said:
" le gasp! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Oh great tidal wave!!! "
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chapter 48 review
Michelle said:
" why are the chapters so short? gah the suspense!! "
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chapter 48 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" Hmmm, cliffhanger!!!!!!!!!!! I hate those! "
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Mindy said:
" OMG!!! I love it!!! "
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Michelle said:
" oh, come on, you did not just stop there. cant wait for more! XD "
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Lauren said:
" Wow this is amazing!! I just read it all, I couldn't stop!! I have no words to describe this, and I think you should see if you could have this publ…more "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Write more!!!!! I love this story, its sooooooo awesome! "
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Michelle said:
" okayy then. much suspense. "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Suspense! "
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Bint Ali said:
" This story rox my sox off!!!! :) "
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Michelle said:
" lol nice, XD "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" I hate it when I have to come to the end of the chapter! "
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Michelle said:
" yay! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" So much suspense! Whats going to happen next??? "
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Sella said:
" NOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!! HOW DARE OCEAN SAY HE LOVES SAHARA!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HE DOESNT DESERVE TO SAY THAT!!!!!!!!!!!!! HE TRIED TO KILL HER!!!!!!!!!! IF HE REA…more "
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Michelle said:
" yay again!! XD finally "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" HOLY CRAP!!!!! I expected that, but whoa! I mean he did try to kill her! And now he's saying he loves her. I'm with Sella on this. "
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chapter 54 review
Michelle said:
" ...as planned? suspense, and im really wary about jalard again... "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" What does it mean 'planned'? What does Ocean have up his sleeve??????? "
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chapter 55 review
Sella said:
" Oh my god, Ocean now creeps me out. btw, how old are they anyway? you never mentioned that! "
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Michelle said:
" strange, lolz "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Very strange . . . "
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chapter 56 review
Sella said:
" Agh. I can't believe Sahara's forgiving Ocean for almost killing her. I wouldn't!

Please write more soon! "
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Michelle said:
" XD! but why did you stop again? come on, i need to know what happens next!! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Write more, write more!!!!

I need to read more! This is excellent! "
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Michelle said:
" sahara's much the pessimist, no? "
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Michelle said:
" OMG A BIRD!!! THEY'RE GETTING CLOSE!!

right? lol "
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Jasmine said:
" Oh my gosh!!! This is really really good! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Cool! Write more! "
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Michelle said:
" yay!!!!! "
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chapter 60 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" W-O-W!

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Michelle said:
" i really hope they arent late... "
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chapter 61 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" Write more, write more! "
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chapter 61 review
Michelle said:
" omg omg yay!!! *Hugs shan* XD! "
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Jasmine said:
" Please write more!!! "
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♫Krista♫ liked it
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Michelle said:
" im debating whether or not to be scared... "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" i know they've been out at sea for what seemed like forever and they had to get close with each other then, but if i were sahara i probably wouldnt le…more "
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Michelle said:
" OMG I JUST REALIZED THAT!! what are they going to do when they leave?? "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" grrr, even though i dont really like ocean all that much u r making it hard on me to dislike him anymore! I love it, great job! "
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Michelle said:
" and now the suspense again. youre soo amazing at writing this!! "
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♫Krista♫ said:
" *sigh* i feel really bad for sahara! "
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Michelle said:
" gahh!!! "
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chapter 66 review
♫Krista♫ said:
" I feel so so bad now for Sahara!!! I guess if she likes Ocean, I'll have to like him too. "
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Michelle said:
" OMG THIS IS SOO SOO SAD!!! "
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Jasmine liked it
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♫Krista♫ said:
" Gah!!!!! This is amazing! Write more!!!!!!!!! "
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Michelle said:
" omg wth? gah soo confused... but you must put up more and actually tell me you did it!!! "
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Sella said:
" OMG WOW!!! so amazing!! but so sad. :( i can't believe ocean and sahara can't be together! D:

there's one thing i don't understand. why can'…more "
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Jasmine liked it
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Michelle said:
" omg!!! "
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Sella said:
" OMG!! AWWWW!!! :D "
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Michelle said:
" XD!!!! omg its over??? like that!!! gah it was so amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!! "
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Sella said:
" OMG!! this chapter is SOO sweet!! i love it!! and i love how sahara named her son after shadow!! :) just one thing, though. what did shadow mean when …more "
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Saved By Grace said:
" Bravo!
A wonderful story, and a wonderful ending to a wonderful story! :D
I wish you luck in your publishing venture. "
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Michelle said:
" XD! cant wait til you get it published!!! "
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Sella said:
" yay! i'm glad you're going to get it published! :D

i just have a few things to say about your editing plans ... first of all, i love this end…more "
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Snuffleupagus! said:
" it was really great. "
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Hasna said:
" cool! i wish that you had done more with blaze though "
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Bint Ali said:
" What planet is Blaze on then? Earth? "
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