Injection - Prologue by ♥ Brigid ♥
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This is an excerpt from my NaNoWriMo '08 novel. :) woot!
Fifteen-year-old Alyx Slade can't trust anyone. Sometimes, she's not even sure if she can trust the aunt who raised her. It's hard enough that her life is so confusing, and that she has yet to discover the true identities of her parents.
Then, the Injection is invented --- one little prick of a needle, and all your imperfections, including all your impure thoughts and emotions, are gone. No more sickness. No more hatred. No more sadness. No more war. Nothing could be more perfect, right?
Wrong.
Alyx suspects more and more about the Injection, especially when everyone around her starts getting it ... and things start getting weird.
Alyx's only choice is to turn to three other teens, and join them in their dangerous rebellion against the government. And while they're at it, they just might find out the secret behind the Injection ... and how it connects to Alyx's past.
chapters
chapter 1:
Prologue
chapter 2:
Chapter 1
chapter 3:
Chapter 2
chapter 4:
Chapter 3
chapter 5:
Chapter 4
chapter 6:
Chapter 5
chapter 7:
Chapter 6
chapter 8:
Chapter 7
Prologue
chapter 1
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updated Apr 16, 2009
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Okay. Let’s get one thing straight right now: I, Alyx Slade, am not a liar. Sure, I am a criminal. I have been on “wanted” lists all over the country. Heck -- I’ve helped to kill people, and I’m still struggling with myself to decide if those killings were justified.
But right now, in this moment, as I write this, none of that matters. What matters is that this story is ten million percent true, and I’m depending on you to believe it. If you’re not willing to believe me ... Well then, put this book down. Walk away. Go read some science fiction crap about how aliens are going to take over the world. But I’m telling you: if the world comes to an untimely end, it won’t be because of any aliens. Oh, no. It will be because of us.
That’s right. Us. As in human beings. Trust me, I’ve seen enough to be sure of that.
Anyway, I guess I should backtrack a little, and let you get an idea of what I’m about to tell you.
Let me start off by giving you a thought that you should get used to: The human mind is a strange thing. It is such a complicated thing, in fact, that it can’t even comprehend itself. We have so many thoughts, and emotions, and ideas, that it can get pretty overwhelming. So we’re always trying to come up with shortcuts, with miraculous solutions, with reasons. And most of the time, these shortcuts, solutions, and reasons do not exist. Either that, or they’re dangerous enough to end humanity as we know it.
The Injection was the latter. The dangerous kind.
Now, there is a good chance that you don’t even know what the Injection is. My guess is that the government has probably tried to cover it up by now, along with my name and the names of my friends. I figure that by the time this book actually gets out there -- if it ever does -- either we’re going to be legendary, or our names will be completely buried and hidden from the world’s knowledge. But I really have no idea what’s going to happen.
I’ve never written a book before. I don’t really know what I’m doing, but I really think that this story has to be written down. Why? Two reasons. One: because I want to remember it as best as I can, as soon as I can get myself to believe it at all. Two: because this isn’t just about me. It’s about you. You, reading my words right now. Not to sound conceited, but I think my story could change the world; or, at least, it could prevent it from collapsing. So this story is not only about me, but also about you, and your children, and your grandchildren, and so on. This is about the generation after generation of human beings that remain. This is about stopping humanity from totally collapsing in on itself. Our species sure has a way of screwing things up: and I’m counting on you to believe what I have to say, and to take it into consideration next time you want to take one of those infamous human-mind shortcuts. That’s all I’m asking of you.
Does that mean, though, that this story isn’t personal? Heck, no. I’ll tell you right now, this story has a lot to do with me. I just wanted you to know that it could affect you, too.
To be honest, you probably don’t want to know a lot of the information that I’m going to tell you in this book. I’m not going to lie or hold back: the Injection was a sick idea to begin with, and only got worse as things went along. It might be easier for you to just walk away. Go off and believe whatever story the government’s made up by now.
Notice that this is the second opening I’ve left for you to put the book down -- because I want to make it clear that you can’t say I didn’t warn you.
Of course, if you abandon this book, then you’ll never know. That’s your choice. But someone once told me that it’s best to always know the truth, even when you don’t want to hear it or believe it.
That’s all I can say to start off: just a little warning. If you don’t think you can handle or believe that the shocking, thrilling story I’m about to tell is the real deal, then leave. I’m not stopping you. As for the rest of you, thanks for reading.
But remember to keep in mind that this story just might change your life forever.
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But right now, in this moment, as I write this, none of that matters. What matters is that this story is ten million percent true, and I’m depending on you to believe it. If you’re not willing to believe me ... Well then, put this book down. Walk away. Go read some science fiction crap about how aliens are going to take over the world. But I’m telling you: if the world comes to an untimely end, it won’t be because of any aliens. Oh, no. It will be because of us.
That’s right. Us. As in human beings. Trust me, I’ve seen enough to be sure of that.
Anyway, I guess I should backtrack a little, and let you get an idea of what I’m about to tell you.
Let me start off by giving you a thought that you should get used to: The human mind is a strange thing. It is such a complicated thing, in fact, that it can’t even comprehend itself. We have so many thoughts, and emotions, and ideas, that it can get pretty overwhelming. So we’re always trying to come up with shortcuts, with miraculous solutions, with reasons. And most of the time, these shortcuts, solutions, and reasons do not exist. Either that, or they’re dangerous enough to end humanity as we know it.
The Injection was the latter. The dangerous kind.
Now, there is a good chance that you don’t even know what the Injection is. My guess is that the government has probably tried to cover it up by now, along with my name and the names of my friends. I figure that by the time this book actually gets out there -- if it ever does -- either we’re going to be legendary, or our names will be completely buried and hidden from the world’s knowledge. But I really have no idea what’s going to happen.
I’ve never written a book before. I don’t really know what I’m doing, but I really think that this story has to be written down. Why? Two reasons. One: because I want to remember it as best as I can, as soon as I can get myself to believe it at all. Two: because this isn’t just about me. It’s about you. You, reading my words right now. Not to sound conceited, but I think my story could change the world; or, at least, it could prevent it from collapsing. So this story is not only about me, but also about you, and your children, and your grandchildren, and so on. This is about the generation after generation of human beings that remain. This is about stopping humanity from totally collapsing in on itself. Our species sure has a way of screwing things up: and I’m counting on you to believe what I have to say, and to take it into consideration next time you want to take one of those infamous human-mind shortcuts. That’s all I’m asking of you.
Does that mean, though, that this story isn’t personal? Heck, no. I’ll tell you right now, this story has a lot to do with me. I just wanted you to know that it could affect you, too.
To be honest, you probably don’t want to know a lot of the information that I’m going to tell you in this book. I’m not going to lie or hold back: the Injection was a sick idea to begin with, and only got worse as things went along. It might be easier for you to just walk away. Go off and believe whatever story the government’s made up by now.
Notice that this is the second opening I’ve left for you to put the book down -- because I want to make it clear that you can’t say I didn’t warn you.
Of course, if you abandon this book, then you’ll never know. That’s your choice. But someone once told me that it’s best to always know the truth, even when you don’t want to hear it or believe it.
That’s all I can say to start off: just a little warning. If you don’t think you can handle or believe that the shocking, thrilling story I’m about to tell is the real deal, then leave. I’m not stopping you. As for the rest of you, thanks for reading.
But remember to keep in mind that this story just might change your life forever.
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chapter 1 review
T.O.L.I.
said:
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ladeedeeda!!!! i lurvvvvvv it! and the bit about the human mind is like the beggining to my nano! which is kind of creepy.....weird! but really great …more
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chapter 1 review
Al
said:
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Wow! This is an amazing start to something wonderful! Very good writer! Can't wait to read more! :D
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chapter 1 review
~Clare~
said:
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looooove it!!! of course it hit the top of the writing list right away! : D
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chapter 1 review
Wannabe Poet-
said:
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Holy Cow! That's amazing, Brig! Jeez! And you are how old (I don't wanna look!) That's wicked!
Please check out my writing! "
Please check out my writing! "
chapter 1 review
John
said:
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Brigid your a very talented writer. I've enjoyed reading this just like any book I would have picked up at the store. Please finish so you can tweak i…more
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chapter 1 review
Cory
said:
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Going to keep reading that's for sue. I love the concept of mind altering substances used by the gov to control the pop :)
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chapter 1 review
Maureen
said:
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Ok, now I am interested, sorta more so than in recent events. Thanks for that, life has been kinda boring recently.
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chapter 1 review
♫Krista♫
said:
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I'm intrested, and from that little page I know this is gonna be good!
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chapter 1 review
Rita
said:
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Things you did right:
1) you tell me who you are in the first line. now i feel like i know you.
2) you have attitude. now i feel like you …more "
1) you tell me who you are in the first line. now i feel like i know you.
2) you have attitude. now i feel like you …more "
chapter 1 review
Jared
said:
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Wholly cheese!! ur amazing. if only i had the talent u did!!! dont stop writing. ur realy good. Best of luck. I would not be surprised if you got this…more
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chapter 1 review
Emilie[-MLE-]
said:
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the beginning reminds me a lot of Maximum Ride, but it is clear that you have a very good writing voice.
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chapter 1 review
Kelsey
said:
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I am in love with your plot. It's fairly original and interesting! The whole idea gets me hooked. I love it!
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chapter 1 review
Diane
said:
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Have you read the "uglies" series by any chance? the summary of this story reminds me of it. This is very skilled writing by the way, i love…more
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chapter 1 review
Amphitrite
said:
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Uglies meets Anthem meets Maximum Ride. Very interesting so far.
**EDIT**
I couldn't find this for a while...but I found it agai…more "
**EDIT**
I couldn't find this for a while...but I found it agai…more "
chapter 1 review
Jessica
said:
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ur awesum!
the whole series is great!
don't EVER stop writing, Brigid! "
the whole series is great!
don't EVER stop writing, Brigid! "
chapter 1 review
Clare
said:
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The plot is a little like the uglies-- but the writing is excellent!
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chapter 1 review
Kenny (is a Christian girl)
said:
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I am hooked..you know, I've always loved that type of beginning.
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chapter 2 review
Sella
said:
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OMG, WOOOOOOOWWWWWWWW!!! THIS IS SOOO AMAZING!!!
hmm...are alyx's parents the ones who invented the injection?!?! "
hmm...are alyx's parents the ones who invented the injection?!?! "
chapter 2 review
CAROLINE ♥ Hate cannot drive out hate,
said:
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F***ing brilliant!!! I luv it!!! :)
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chapter 2 review
jeeves...
said:
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wow, awesome already- it's so detailed and easy to picture... the part with the red crayon going across the paper... wow...
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chapter 2 review
Kathryn
said:
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I liked it, really, I did, but this is the exact same thing as the Uglies series. It's the same concept, and I do like it a lot, just saying you know.
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chapter 2 review
Paige
said:
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This is great--nothing else I have read on here comes even close to being this good! I can't wait to keep reading.
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chapter 2 review
Rita
said:
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Well done expressing emotions, reaction, and internal thoughts. Be careful about violating POV rules. You said, "She would just stare out at the …more
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chapter 3 review
Sella
said:
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OMG!! WOW!! (again) THIS GETS BETTER EVERY CHAPTER!!!
i wonder why kates lying to her about her mom...maybe coz she doesnt want her to go loo…more "
i wonder why kates lying to her about her mom...maybe coz she doesnt want her to go loo…more "
chapter 3 review
Al
said:
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Wow, this is getting quite intriguing! Very interesting plot and story line!
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chapter 3 review
~Clare~
said:
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wow creepy!!!
The only thing I think is wrong with it is how smart Alyx is. I mean, I know to tell the story, she needs to be smart enough …more "
The only thing I think is wrong with it is how smart Alyx is. I mean, I know to tell the story, she needs to be smart enough …more "
chapter 3 review
Jade
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OMG it is getting sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo…more
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chapter 3 review
megan
said:
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I totally completely andutterly loved it
this is the best ever. it is so suspenseful write more so I dont have to wait for the next chapter when …more "
this is the best ever. it is so suspenseful write more so I dont have to wait for the next chapter when …more "
chapter 4 review
Sella
said:
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OMG WOW!!!!!!!! XD XD XD I KNEW THE INJECTION HAD TO DO IT HER MOTHER!! lol XD
i think alyx should just ask kate straightforward if her mothe…more "
i think alyx should just ask kate straightforward if her mothe…more "
chapter 4 review
Al
said:
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It's getting better and better each chapter! Can't wait to read the next one! :D
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chapter 4 review
Carlyle
said:
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This is awesome! I wouldn't be surprised if I read this in an actual book or something.
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chapter 5 review
Sella
said:
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ooh yay!! XD
i love the debate you had between angela and alyx. it was so realistic and cool! XD "
i love the debate you had between angela and alyx. it was so realistic and cool! XD "
chapter 5 review
Al
said:
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Wow! You have to write more! It's just so amazingly good! :D So cool that she has made a friend. :D I also know exactly how she feels at school. I'm a…more
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chapter 6 review
Sella
said:
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Ooh this is sooo intriguing!! It's sad that she had to leave her only friend behind...:(
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chapter 6 review
Ayesha
said:
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"I felt like banging my head against the table."
Does anyone besides me ever get that feeling?? "
Does anyone besides me ever get that feeling?? "
chapter 7 review
Sella
said:
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omg this is sooo creepy!!! but soo amazing!! XD
you know, it reminds me a bit of the host...like, with the whole perfect thing, and the seeke…more "
you know, it reminds me a bit of the host...like, with the whole perfect thing, and the seeke…more "
chapter 7 review
Drizzleherb
said:
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Wow. That was a really creepy chapter, Brigid. It was still awesome, though!
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chapter 8 review
Sella
said:
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OOMG!!! WOWO WOWOWOWOWOWOW!!! MORE OMRE OMRE I CANT WAIT TO READ MORE!!! XD XD XD
this story is turning out to be sooo freaking AMAZING!!! I …more "
this story is turning out to be sooo freaking AMAZING!!! I …more "
chapter 8 review
Nightshade
said:
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WOW! This is FANTASTIC!! I'm sooooo excited for the next chapter!!!!!!
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chapter 8 review
Jackie Lynn
said:
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This was really good!!!!! I love it! Your idea is very cool and original and I hope there's a sequel!!!!! (By the way, I love the way you spell Alyx's…more
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chapter 8 review
Sarah
said:
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Wow. That was truly an amazing excerpt. It started to remind me of WWII, with the Nazis and Jews. I could definately see this published.
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chapter 8 review
Michelle
said:
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okay, i'm totally hooked!! would love to see it published! good luck!
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chapter 8 review
Darbus
said:
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I enjoyed this. There are plenty of stories out there about something creating perfection, or solving problems, and some of them are good, but some o…more
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chapter 8 review
♫Krista♫
said:
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Ahhhh!!!!!!!!!!!! I want to read more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It was so awesome, great, loved it! And I would love to see this published!
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chapter 8 review
deliabookworm
said:
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You should post the rest of it! Don't leave us hanging! It's good. :)
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chapter 8 review
♤♧♡♢Moonlan♠♣♥♦
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OMG! Post the rest of it! Please! Or tell me where I can get the rest of the story! C'mon!
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