The Jump: A Short Story
by Seth §Æ
genre:
Drama
description:
This is a story that I wrote in my 'writer's group' in school. I am not sure if it is good. Just about a person who has a story with Cliff Diving.
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chapter 1:
Chapter One
Chapter One
chapter 1
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updated 09/29/08
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13 people liked it
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I really do want to know... did you like it? Did you hate it? Did you think it was weird? All of these can be answered in reviews! I know, it surprised me too.
I knew this was wanted, and needed, to do. I had some false hope that Chase wouldn’t try to stop me today. But, no worries, it was only false. He would never see the reason behind my doing this but, neither did I. All I knew that this was right for me. My sleek, black SUV slid to a stop when I reached the cliffs. I got out and walked to the highest point of the cliffs. It was chilly today and I thought that it would maybe rain. I was about ready to jump when I saw him. Embry was running toward me like his life depended on it. His attempt was futile, though.
“Stop!” he yelled.
“I am sorry, Chase. You never would let my cliff dive,” I whispered. I braced myself and jumped.
I tried to scream but the wind wouldn’t let the air out of my mouth. Nobody ever had told me how fun cliff diving was. Now I knew. It was amazing! That was, until I hit the water. This was the only part that I hadn’t really thought about. My legs hit the water so hard I wouldn’t doubt if they were broken. The current and I fought with my desire to stay afloat and unfortunately, the current won. It was more peaceful and placid then I thought it would be. I thought that I was dying, but I still wasn’t sure. The more I tried, the weaker I got. So, I stopped. Stopped trying, it was just to much for me. I made my very last attempt then officially gave up. It was all over now. Then, everything went black.
Just wrote this down in my little ‘writer’s group’ in school. And no, you twilight fans, I didn’t steal the name Embry. Stephanie doesn’t own that name. And, Do you think that the protagonist, whose name is unknown, lives? Figure it out for yourself because I am NOT telling.
Seth
P.S Would I kill my own character? Maybe...
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I knew this was wanted, and needed, to do. I had some false hope that Chase wouldn’t try to stop me today. But, no worries, it was only false. He would never see the reason behind my doing this but, neither did I. All I knew that this was right for me. My sleek, black SUV slid to a stop when I reached the cliffs. I got out and walked to the highest point of the cliffs. It was chilly today and I thought that it would maybe rain. I was about ready to jump when I saw him. Embry was running toward me like his life depended on it. His attempt was futile, though.
“Stop!” he yelled.
“I am sorry, Chase. You never would let my cliff dive,” I whispered. I braced myself and jumped.
I tried to scream but the wind wouldn’t let the air out of my mouth. Nobody ever had told me how fun cliff diving was. Now I knew. It was amazing! That was, until I hit the water. This was the only part that I hadn’t really thought about. My legs hit the water so hard I wouldn’t doubt if they were broken. The current and I fought with my desire to stay afloat and unfortunately, the current won. It was more peaceful and placid then I thought it would be. I thought that I was dying, but I still wasn’t sure. The more I tried, the weaker I got. So, I stopped. Stopped trying, it was just to much for me. I made my very last attempt then officially gave up. It was all over now. Then, everything went black.
Just wrote this down in my little ‘writer’s group’ in school. And no, you twilight fans, I didn’t steal the name Embry. Stephanie doesn’t own that name. And, Do you think that the protagonist, whose name is unknown, lives? Figure it out for yourself because I am NOT telling.
Seth
P.S Would I kill my own character? Maybe...
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chapter 1 review
♥ Brigid ♥
said:
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hmmm. cool. although by using the name embry combined w/the whole cliff-diving thing it does seem like fanfic.
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chapter 1 review
Erin
said:
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i liked it. ur a good writer but it sounded ALOT like twilight. u know, with the sleak black cars, embry, cliff diving.
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chapter 1 review
~Clare~
said:
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lol, what does Embry have to do with twilight?! I mean, he's like a really small character... If it was a girl named Bella and a guy named Edward tryi...more
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chapter 1 review
Riley
said:
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I'm sorry, but it DID sound like New Moon when Bella jumps off the cliff. You matched it almost word for word. It's not the Embry that does it...it's ...more
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chapter 1 review
i ♥ E.C.
said:
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I'd have to say that yes, it does parallel with Twilight just a bit, but trust me, there is no doubt in my mind that htis is original...I've done a lo...more
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chapter 1 review
Hylian Princess ☼
said:
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This is really good. If you continued with the story and it was all about the cliff diving then it wouldn't seem so much like Twilight. I would to rea...more
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