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by ♥ Brigid ♥
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genre: Science Fiction & Fantasy
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I'm writing this story with my thirteen-year-old sister, Fiona. (Here's a link to her profile: http://www.goodreads.com/user/... She writes the chapters from Tatiana's point of view, and I write the ones from Erik's point of view. The plot hasn't been totally worked out yet, but basically it is about two rival kingdoms battling for control of a magic orb that can tell the future, and two teenagers who have to save the world before everyone kills each other.


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chapter 1: Chapter 1: Tatiana (by Fiona)


Chapter 1: Tatiana (by Fiona)
chapter 1   —   updated 10/15/08   —   3826 characters   —   55 people liked it   —   51 reviews
Chapter 1: Tatiana

The sunlight beating down on the terrace practically blinded me the moment I stepped outside. I blinked a couple of times before my eyes adjusted, then sat down at the table where my mother, Tabatha, and my sister, Lydia sat.

As I sat down there was no “Good morning” or “How are you feeling?”, just a “Really, Tatiana, is that the best you could do?” from my mother. At this, she was referring to my plain, un-princess-like appearance.

I shrugged. I’ll admit that I could have done better. I’d quickly glanced at myself in the full-length mirror that hung in my bedroom before I left for tea. What I had seen was a tomboyish 18-year-old girl in a worn floral print sundress with freckles and a mess of tangled brown ringlets. Although I was wearing my tiara, I did not see a princess.

But though this was certainly not my best look, it was by far not the worst. I had a wide selection of worn and torn and dirty dresses, muddy boots, and chipped tiaras. But I liked to save those for special occasions.

Take the suitor dinners for example, though there had not been so many of those lately. Since I was six years old, my mother had been trying to set me up with princes, dukes, and heirs from all the nearby kingdoms. Although I was too naïve to realize what was going on at the beginning, by the age of nine I’d figured it out. I began to act completely barbaric at all of these dinners, which scared away most of the suitors and their parents.

However, at the age of eleven I found myself betrothed to a suitor I’d never met, who was the prince of a kingdom I’d never heard of. When we did meet, he acted like a snob and I acted like a pig. After some begging and pleading from both of us, our parents called off the engagement.

Since then, there hadn’t been quite so many suitor dinners. There was the occasional disastrous dinner, but I was always victorious. This, of course, made my mother furious.

At a young age, I found that I could never please my mother. What she had wanted was two ladies for daughters, but instead she had one lady, Lydia, and me, Tatiana. While Lydia excelled in embroidering and grooming herself, I had more talent when it came to tree-climbing and sports. Though the activities I preferred were supposedly meant only for boys, I was able to learn much from my older brother, William. My mother, on the other hand, thought I should learn from Lydia. She was often glancing admiringly at Lydia, then disappointedly at me, almost as if to say, “Why can’t you be more like your sister?”

As much as I loved Mother, I knew that if I tried to impress her, I would only fail miserably. It was much more fun to annoy her.

But whatever made my mother unhappy would probably make my father proud, since the two were opposites. Though they still got along fine, I often thought it quite strange that they had done so well enough to marry.

Thinking of my father made me notice that neither he, nor William, was present.

“Mother?” I began softly, placing my dainty tea cup on my saucer.

“Yes, dear?” she responded, doing the same.

“Where are Father and William?” I questioned.

“That’s it!” Lydia cried, her face breaking out in a smile. “That’s what feels different. But yes, Mother, where are they?”

I rolled my eyes at my sister’s stupidity. Though she may have been beautiful, Lydia wasn’t the brightest. Then I turned to Mother.

“So?” I asked.

Mother shifted uncomfortably in her seat.

“They went... to a meeting,” she said, nodding afterwards, as if to convince herself that this was true.

“Oh,” said Lydia.

But I said nothing, for I could tell by the awkwardness of what my mother had said, that this was not just any meeting.
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chapter 1 review
Tale_of_lost_ink said:
" I love this and brigid your sister is an awesome writer! i cant believe she think she isnt like you said in my group! "

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Bluemoon said:
" GREAT JOB!!! Your sister is an amazing author just like you! Keep working on it! "

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Candi said:
" Tell Fiona she is a good writer 4 me!!!
The story really flows i like both ur styles.
Keep it up!!! "

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~Clare~ said:
" oh my gosh... you're kidding, right?!? She doesn't think she can write?!!? I'd NEVER be able to write this good! So tell her to shut up and start writ...more "

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☠☼Serena☼ ☠Smilin Again☼ ☠ said:
" good job fiona! "

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~Rachel~Silverlight~ said:
" fiona & brigid you guys are awesome authors! "

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Harrison said:
" This is very good, especially for a twelve-year old. Don't stop writing, you can only grow if you continue to strive for perfection, and one day, you ...more "

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Karey Shane said:
" Fun. Writing with your sister! Tell Fiona "hi" from a fan. You know I'm already one of yours. :) "

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Fiona said:
" Goof job, Fiona! I like your name...lol "

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Kenzie said:
" Wow. Wow. Wow. I love this! You and your sister are both amazing writers! Tell her that she is an amazing writer for me Brigid! Man, now I'm stuck on ...more "

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chapter 2 review
Char said:
" really suspenseful and good! tell fiona that she's really good at writing "

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chapter 2 review
Tale_of_lost_ink said:
" I loved your wrting too brigid i love this story and the idea......now on to chapter 3 "

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~Clare~ said:
" no fair!!! I'm already attached and its only the second chapter!!! XD "

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☠☼Serena☼ ☠Smilin Again☼ ☠ said:
" omg..wow "

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Fiona said:
" Mean, mean, mean, mean girl, Brigid! Don't kill Cassandra! Bad girl! But, really, good chapter! "

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chapter 3 review
Char said:
" i like it...keep it up "

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chapter 3 review
Tale_of_lost_ink said:
" I am still in love with you sister's writing! keep it up! "

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~Clare~ said:
" awesome! "

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chapter 3 review
☠☼Serena☼ ☠Smilin Again☼ ☠ said:
" lolz..good job! "

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chapter 3 review
Fiona said:
" Rule of the universe: all girls with the name "Fiona" are good authors. "

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chapter 4 review
Kenzie said:
" Poor, Erik. First his father, then his mother. "

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chapter 4 review
~Clare~ said:
" more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more ...more "

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chapter 4 review
☠☼Serena☼ ☠Smilin Again☼ ☠ said:
" omgomgomg! this is...amazing!!!!!!!!!! "

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Tale_of_lost_ink said:
" I love this story so muych i can't get enough! "

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chapter 5 review
☠☼Serena☼ ☠Smilin Again☼ ☠ said:
" LOL...luv it! "

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~Clare~ said:
" AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH ITS SOOOO AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "

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Chandani :D said:
" love it!! Brigid you are such a gret writer and your sister is really good too!! "

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chapter 6 review
Sella said:
" I KNEW IT!!! BWA HA HA HA HA!!

Okay, sorry. This was really good! :D "

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chapter 6 review
Kenzie said:
" Cliffhanger on this one too! Nooooooo! "

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~Clare~ said:
" WOW "

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Tale_of_lost_ink said:
" more plz "

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Chandani :D liked it
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Sella said:
" Oh no! 0.0 "

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Tale_of_lost_ink said:
" oooooo harsh "

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~Clare~ said:
" awesome! "

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Chandani :D liked it
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chapter 8 review
Sella said:
" Sooo good!! XD

Lol. I love his last thought- "Wonderful. I'm turning into Penelope." Hilarious. ;D "

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chapter 8 review
Tale_of_lost_ink said:
" hilarious brigid!!!!! just like sella i love that last thought!!!!! i want more! "

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~Clare~ said:
" haha love that last thought! "

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chapter 9 review
Sella said:
" Can't wait to read more!! "

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Tale_of_lost_ink said:
" yay! more! "

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~Clare~ said:
" whoa! totally need more!! "

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~Clare~ said:
" awesome! ahh i nnnneeeeed more! "

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Sella said:
" Wow! Good good good! More more more!! Lol XD "

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Seth said:
" Go Brigid! (And Fiona!) for making another great story! "

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chapter 11 review
Seth said:
" You two are so good! "

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Sella said:
" XD "

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~Clare~ said:
" I LOVE it in a fairy taleish kinda way. I mean, it would be literally impossible for a GIRL to go to battle with only like a couple days practice, but...more "

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Tale_of_lost_ink said:
" yay! u guys r great! "

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chapter 12 review
Seth said:
" No! They can't find him! "

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Sella said:
" Oh no!!! D: "

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Kenzie said:
" Wow. Awesome!

More please! "

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~Clare~ said:
" AHHHH MORE!!! Please more NOWWW!!! "

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