hearts of the warrios- secrets are revealed

by ♥lil' bit :}
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genre: Science Fiction & Fantasy
description:
jack was an average kid, until he starts having dreams about some horrible past but yet he cant tell if its his.then jack finds out his familys past. as he relizes that there is no turning away from it, he faces his fears and saves what matters most to him. as he is granted a quest to find out how he can save himself and his family from thier greatest enemy King of the Shadows he meets some interesting friends. but, as in a prophesy says, he will be betrayed by one who is close.


chapters

chapter 1: at dawn

chapter 3: the truth hurts


at dawn
chapter 1   —   updated 07/05/08   —   2161 characters   —   36 people liked it   —   35 reviews
lightning crashing against the windows, wind shrieking outside. as i crawl under my blankets i relize something is scratching at my window. screeeeech!!! thump, thump!!! as i lurched up from the covers i could see something in the shadow of my room...


BZZZZ! BZZZZ! i shot up out of bed and found out it was only a dream. as i tryed to gain my breath back, i realized what time it was. it was 8:30 in the morning. "uh-oh" i muttered to my- self. i loooked down at my clothes and thought they'll have to do for school.

Hi. im jack whittaker. if you hadn't noticed already im on a very tight scheduel. you see if im late for school one more time ill get dettention. so when i get detention at school, then at home im grounded.so now u understand way im stressing!!!anyways... at school im not popular or im not un-popular,(if that makes sence) but im normal. i got my three best friend, jared blake, sasha collin and of corse the tuff one in the group holden fiss. you see i've been growing up with jared and holden ever since i was 2 years old. buti met sahsa 4 years ago and sasha is sooo cute. (but i try to stay cool around her.)

so if you're like me and u walk to school then you know what its like. tiring, boring and just plain stupid!!! but... when i walk to school im normaly alone... i think??? but this time i could feel a strangers eyes burning and seeping into the back of my neck. my neck hairs were standing on end and everytime i turn around id see a shadow of a big figure. so of course i picked my pace hoping to get away from whatever was well... stalking me!!! this time when i turned around i went into a sprint and ran the 2 blocks i had to go. but as i turned around at the second block the shadow was gone. when i circled back around BAM!!!! right into a tree. as i was getting to my feet and trying to regain my strength, i tok a glanse at my watch. "oh no!!!" i shriecked. i had 1 minuet to get to school and i was almost there. diiiinnnggg!!! nooooo i thought. that was the bell and standing outside of the doors shaking there heads were jared, sasha, and holden. i just new they were disapointed, and i was ashamed.
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Fwit said:
" oof "

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shugo chara lover said:
" i liked it keep going!plz! "

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kiara (i wish i lived in Paris...) said:
" i like! hope u keep writing!!!! cuz i'll be waiting to read more!!!!! basically its sounds good!!!! "

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Kataury said:
" I love your first person view! the way he introduces himself makes me feel like I'm actually talking to the guy! It's brilliant! Like an average kid! ...more "

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Evelyn said:
" Interesting - keep going. "

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Sella said:
" keep writing!! "

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♥ Brigid ♥ said:
" cool! "

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kittykat said:
" interesting you should keep going!!!!!!! "

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Oceanwaves(Springpaw pic) said:
" Wow, cool!
Kep t up!
I can't wait for ore! "

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Blooming said:
" Awsome!!! Keep on going!! "

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♥Pammy (Honey Divine)♥ said:
" It is really good for a start. Now I must read the second chapter "

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Tay Tay said:
" awsome start!! "

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kittykat said:
" ooooh chilling! who is the mysterious stranger? keep on writing! "

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♥Pammy (Honey Divine)♥ said:
" Keep writing more. That was really good for the ending of the chapter. "

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Fwit said:
" pull it!
pull it! "

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Oceanwaves(Springpaw pic) said:
" Really good! "

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Blooming said:
" Ahhhhhh!!! really interesting and really good. Keep on going!! "

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Angel♥ said:
" nice, but don't forget to read it over! "

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Tay Tay said:
" nice "

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Oceanwaves(Springpaw pic) said:
" Sweet!!! "

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Blooming said:
" Awsome!! "

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shugo chara lover said:
" great job! "

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Tay Tay said:
" :) "

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♥Pammy (Honey Divine)♥ said:
" Wow. I wonder what will happen. To chapter 4 "

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Rose said:
" This is really good! Chapters 2, and 3 were really intense. I loved the way how you created the mood! "

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Blooming said:
" Can't wait for you to finish the whole story!! "

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Evelyn said:
" Good job on weaving in a backstory; it gives some depth to your characters and plot.

Evelyn "

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Tay Tay said:
" it's like...omg!!!! It brings creeps to me. I like this story "

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kittykat said:
" awesome very good!!! "

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♥Pammy (Honey Divine)♥ said:
" Wow. Now I have to read charter 5 "

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Leiani said:
" Great jpb so far....I can't wait to see what you come up with next. When you get back over here lets work on editing some of your errors. I will sho...more "

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♥Pammy (Honey Divine)♥ said:
" Please tell me there is more than that!!! "

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Oceanwaves(Springpaw pic) said:
" Wow "

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Dave said:
" Cool concept. I like the interactions. Would love to here more about the other characters in the story. Are you planning on involving them in Jack's...more "

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♥♥Tianna♥♥ said:
" wow, very interesting plot. Keep it going!! "

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