Trail
by Bebe M. A.
genre:
Literature & Fiction
description:
Short Story
chapters
chapter 1:
One
chapter 2:
Two
One
chapter 1
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updated 05/11/08
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997 characters
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4 people liked it
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4 reviews
Once upon a time in an unfinished moment, an absence of weary voices, an implicit ban on remembrance or telling of events
Orderly thoughts were still forming in the diffuse extension of the Universe, or the so-called Mind…
Movement, inner cries, convulsion, memories. There, on the very verge of outer space, in the midst of chaos… revolution
Some force swallowed in an instant any sense of sanity like the anteater its pray
This is how all came to happen, a something that started before starts were settled and such a thing like a beginning was known
This is how it was revealed. A sudden impulse emerged, carrying it out
Then did those images insist on coming back and staying, so much, so often, over and over, that the feeling of embarrassment overwhelmed no more
But, could words describe? Is there a way to take you there? Could the path be opened with a machete or with a sword?
Need company. No fairy magic wand, no much strength. Tight road ahead.
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Orderly thoughts were still forming in the diffuse extension of the Universe, or the so-called Mind…
Movement, inner cries, convulsion, memories. There, on the very verge of outer space, in the midst of chaos… revolution
Some force swallowed in an instant any sense of sanity like the anteater its pray
This is how all came to happen, a something that started before starts were settled and such a thing like a beginning was known
This is how it was revealed. A sudden impulse emerged, carrying it out
Then did those images insist on coming back and staying, so much, so often, over and over, that the feeling of embarrassment overwhelmed no more
But, could words describe? Is there a way to take you there? Could the path be opened with a machete or with a sword?
Need company. No fairy magic wand, no much strength. Tight road ahead.
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chapter 1 review
Carlos
said:
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its not bad... not bad at all, i kind a like it... specially the last part... "is there a way to take you there?"... and i laught with the m...more
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chapter 1 review
Karey Shane
said:
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In Chapter One it sounds like a difficult journey is about it begin. I have questions...What is the sudden impulse that emerges? Why did it cause emba...more
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chapter 2 review
Carlos
said:
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i liked this better than the other one... aaahhh.. time... my favorite theme!... i hope you write more of it...
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chapter 2 review
Karey Shane
said:
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In Chapter Two I'm left wondering what the rain had swept away. Is it something she was hoping would be erased?
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