chapter 1 review
Cindy
said:
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Wow Bethany. *nudge, nudge*. This sounds a lot like Twilight but
she is already a vampire. Be careful, try to ad your own twist, not just perfect gu
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chapter 1 review
August
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chapter 1 review
Tasha
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good explaining the fight and great at explaining Herim's looks
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chapter 1 review
Maria
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chapter 1 review
Bec
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chapter 1 review
Camille
said:
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cool! you got right to the point instand of waiting four books! nice names!
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chapter 1 review
Kate
said:
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very compelling--and i hope it is unique enough to stand alone from all the other vampire stories
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chapter 1 review
Sara
said:
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why wont you write more!!!!
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chapter 1 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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Wow, this is good!!!
Will you read my story "the 4 souls''?
I'm only on the prolouge, but I would appreciate the advice of another writer
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chapter 1 review
Catie
said:
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This is a really great story. You are an awesome writer.
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chapter 1 review
Josie
said:
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Very Good
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chapter 1 review
Hannah
said:
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this is really awsome
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chapter 2 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 2 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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wow... This is great... must keep reading...
*zombie-ness*
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chapter 3 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 3 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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This is very good, but why did she say that he couldn't have kit? was he momentarily dillusional?
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chapter 3 review
Musical♥Writer
said:
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U switch from present tense to past tence a lot. try stiking to one or the other.
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chapter 4 review
Sara
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chapter 5 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 5 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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Nice!
It's dramatic!
I think you did copy a lot from twilight though... mostly in this chapter
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chapter 6 review
Cindy
said:
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I really liked it Bethany. So sweet. Like Bookworm, I am a romantic type. Make sure not to go too fast though or your story will be shorter than it co
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chapter 6 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 6 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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This is so sweet...
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chapter 7 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 7 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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sweetness... good fight....
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chapter 8 review
Sara
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chapter 9 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 9 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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THis is great!
I am addicted at this point....
I am a little bit creeped out about the last quote though....
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chapter 9 review
Mindy
said:
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My mom's making me get off before I can finish it, but wow. Just. Wow.
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chapter 10 review
Cindy
said:
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NOOOO! They have been separated! This is cruel and unusual Miss Mind Reader... I love it!
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chapter 10 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 10 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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wow...I love this drama...
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chapter 11 review
Cindy
said:
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I loved it Bethany. You make me feel as if my writing is boring and not that worth it anymore! Yours is so much more interesting!
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chapter 11 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 11 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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Nice ending!
I love this...
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chapter 12 review
Sara
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chapter 13 review
Sara
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chapter 14 review
Sara
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chapter 15 review
Sara
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chapter 16 review
Cindy
said:
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wow
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chapter 16 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 16 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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Cliff-hanger...
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chapter 17 review
Sara
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chapter 18 review
Cindy
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liked it
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chapter 18 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 18 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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I liked it!
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chapter 19 review
Sara
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chapter 20 review
Sara
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chapter 21 review
Cindy
said:
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ah-oh
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chapter 21 review
Sara
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chapter 22 review
Cindy
said:
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Short but to the point. It was great. I really liked this chapter.
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chapter 22 review
klutz is my middle name
said:
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wow now welcoming twilight 5(that a compliment) please keep writing!!!
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chapter 22 review
Sara
liked it
chapter 22 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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I like this!
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chapter 23 review
Sara
said:
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okay this storys awesome but its been almost a year so yeah i am now doubting u will ever finish...EVERRR!!!=(=(=(=(
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chapter 23 review
Tigerstarz
said:
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awwww!
Please write more!!!!!
it is at a cliff-hanger!!!!
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chapter 23 review
Chandini
said:
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oh.my.god. I totally believe that you could publish this!
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chapter 23 review
Larosa
said:
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awww man ...this is agony....cant wait to read the rest ....awesome story....
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chapter 23 review
Abbee
said:
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amazing. love it. it sucked me right in. keep writing! school's almost ending c'mon write!
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chapter 23 review
Azibell
said:
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Write more, please! I've been waiting for almost over a year now for you to write another chapter. Your story is awsome, and i can't wait to find ou
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chapter 23 review
Kelsey
said:
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oh my gosh! oh my gosh! oh my gosh! This is completely AMAZING! You HAVE GOT 2 WRITE! HAVE 2! I. Am. Begging. Please!
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chapter 23 review
Sarah
liked it
chapter 23 review
Kim
said:
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*sniff* i liked this story
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chapter 23 review
Apurva
said:
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wow ur a good writer!keep it up! you know how to get in to details without boring a person. i loved the different point of view you had! it was a nice
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chapter 23 review
Bint Ali
said:
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u should try to finish it during the winter break its really good
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