Learning the Characters - Yue Liang - The Moon by Koeeoaddi

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Yue Liang - The Moon
chapter 1   —   updated Apr 02, 2009   —   654 characters   —   42 people liked this writing   —   20 reviews of this writing
Learning the Characters
(Yue Liang - The Moon)

My hand,
stiff as horsehair
falters and balks.
"The moon," he tells me
and draws the lines.

Listen to me.
I grind the ink,
look into the wet black slab
but see no sky.
I worry my hand
across the page
the sun fastened tight
to obstinate dusk.

"Watch"
he insists.
His lesson forms
in rock and light.
I retrace his strokes,
and he smiles --
my crude moon
climbs a crumpled sky.

But later
alone at my desk,
I sketch the spiny shadow
of the asparagus fern,
a cat on the sill
looking into the night

And the moon
blooms like an orchid
underneath
my astonished brush.
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His lesson forms
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" I love this. The word choices are so evocative and rich, this is one dense poem. "
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" "I worry my hand across the page" - great styling. "
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" beautiful imagery. love the staccato lines. and what an ending. hushed. "
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" I love it - esp. the blooming moon and the crumpled sky "
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" I just have to say that I love the way you transfer the moon's immensity to a subjection at the end. Just awesome. "
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Maria said:
" Absolutely lovely... like a long haiku. You are a natural! "
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" hello! i was browsing the poetry section and i stumbled upon your poem. this is really beautiful - i love all the imagery; it's very simple but still ...more "
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" Loved it all, but I really loved the last verse.

And the moon
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my astonished brush. "
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Abstract. I like that. "
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" lovely! "
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