It says a lot when you cannot even finish a short story, especially an erotic one. I didn't find it interesting enough to continue. It was very boring. The voice was loose and even though this is a short, a reader has to be able to connect with at least one character to care about finishing the story. I found nothing at all original about the scene, in fact the sex sounded like something that had been copied out of Basic Instinct. I think the author tried too hard to be "unique" with this but it turns out being over the top and tedious. The dialogue was laughable, corny and it made the sex scenes humorous other than erotic.